Internet Affair
Two people met over the Internet.140 total reviews
Comment from azwildrosa
what a great read. i love the second guessing, laila does. i'm sure many of us do the same and yet we still follow that invisible rope leading the way. we all hope and pray its save as far as meeting someone on the net goes. my dad met his wife on the net. i'm glad it works out for some. the whole works is pleasant read. kept me going all the way. very believable dialog in adding in background characters. thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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what a great read. i love the second guessing, laila does. i'm sure many of us do the same and yet we still follow that invisible rope leading the way. we all hope and pray its save as far as meeting someone on the net goes. my dad met his wife on the net. i'm glad it works out for some. the whole works is pleasant read. kept me going all the way. very believable dialog in adding in background characters. thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. A reviewer gave me three because he said it wasn't possible. Thank you for sharing.
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i'm guessing this persons not met anyone online before. i have, not for a date but as friends. an elderly gentleman. i was all the nervous as anyone. not the same questions of course but close to it. turned out he was purty cool. i think your story is very well close to what anyone would think meeting someone from online for the first time. i hope that's the only three you get. :)
Comment from Sandy P.
dear Barbara, I really loved this first part to your story. Title caught my attention first thing and my interest was held from the first sentence. Great job with this, I am so anxious to read your "part 2" - can't wait to find out more about Jacob! Again, wonderful job!
Sandy
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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dear Barbara, I really loved this first part to your story. Title caught my attention first thing and my interest was held from the first sentence. Great job with this, I am so anxious to read your "part 2" - can't wait to find out more about Jacob! Again, wonderful job!
Sandy
Comment Written 15-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from ladybird
A good first part to your story, which I read with interest. The doubts Laila had are understandable, under the circumstances. Look forwadr to reading part two.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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A good first part to your story, which I read with interest. The doubts Laila had are understandable, under the circumstances. Look forwadr to reading part two.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Brytni_Marie
I just wanted to say that I waas very disappointed when I reached the end. I was literally almost on the end of my seat reading this, heart pounding, wondering what Jacob Kraft was going to look like and how he reacted to her. Your character just sucked me right in. I can't wait to read the rest of it.
Please hurry. I wanna know what happens next :)
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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I just wanted to say that I waas very disappointed when I reached the end. I was literally almost on the end of my seat reading this, heart pounding, wondering what Jacob Kraft was going to look like and how he reacted to her. Your character just sucked me right in. I can't wait to read the rest of it.
Please hurry. I wanna know what happens next :)
Comment Written 15-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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I will post part 2 as soon as I earn enough pumps to post. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Angelite
Just the title caught my attention.
this is a well written piece. I remember when i met my husband,,,,we had been talking online for 18 months between New Zealand and England, i flew to meet him and all the thoughts you have portrayed in your short story flitted either through my head, or my parents head about his being untrue, an axe murderer. You have pretty much hit the button on the 'what ifs'in here.
Good read, hope it turned out as well as mine did,,,happily married 8 years now. lol
Angel
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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Just the title caught my attention.
this is a well written piece. I remember when i met my husband,,,,we had been talking online for 18 months between New Zealand and England, i flew to meet him and all the thoughts you have portrayed in your short story flitted either through my head, or my parents head about his being untrue, an axe murderer. You have pretty much hit the button on the 'what ifs'in here.
Good read, hope it turned out as well as mine did,,,happily married 8 years now. lol
Angel
Comment Written 15-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind review, I appreciate your telling me your story. I have a reviewer who gave me a three because he said it wasn't possible,
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maybe you should copy and paste my reply onto his review,,,,to show him how wrong he is,,,,also check into the real world occasionally as a huge percentage of people are meeting partners this way. I stand by what i say,,,it can work,,and for me,,it did. Angel
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His ego couldn't handle it. I mentioned all the all the previous people who shared their stories with me and he said something like, " I don't care what they say. I will my previous statement. He also told me take a pain pill and chill out. I recently hand ankle surgery. Low blow. LIke I said his ego is HUGE!
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this would be your Ted person lol,,,was just reading some of your reviews,,,very controversial,,,,i have to admit,,i'm not a great critiquer when it comes to punctuation,,if i get stuck into a nice story thats easily readable i just enjoy it. Take the pain pill for the ankle (hope it gets better soon) and just enjoy your writing.
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Thank you for your concern. Another reviewer told me to ignore him. He has become very controversial.
Comment from lila2010grad
I really like it. I want to read more. The first person narration was spot on. As I was reading this narration I felt I was Laila. For me a good first person narration is when I become the character. Your story accomplished that.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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I really like it. I want to read more. The first person narration was spot on. As I was reading this narration I felt I was Laila. For me a good first person narration is when I become the character. Your story accomplished that.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate your telling me you felt like Laila reviewer told me they couldn't follow it.
Comment from luna
I'll be sure to read the next installment of your story. Once deathly afraid of it, I actually am now life partners (with intentions of making it legal before long) with a man whom I met over the internet dating site, E-Harmony. We lived in two different worlds, two hours from each other, and when we met, it was like meeting an old friend. This spring I made the move and now live with him, also working as the office manager for the business he owns. I never thought it could really happen, but it does. My family thinks the world of him and his family has accepted me as one of their own, as well. Two months from now will mark our one year anniversary together.
Until the next chapter,
Yours,
Luna *smile*
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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I'll be sure to read the next installment of your story. Once deathly afraid of it, I actually am now life partners (with intentions of making it legal before long) with a man whom I met over the internet dating site, E-Harmony. We lived in two different worlds, two hours from each other, and when we met, it was like meeting an old friend. This spring I made the move and now live with him, also working as the office manager for the business he owns. I never thought it could really happen, but it does. My family thinks the world of him and his family has accepted me as one of their own, as well. Two months from now will mark our one year anniversary together.
Until the next chapter,
Yours,
Luna *smile*
Comment Written 15-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate you sharing your story. A reviewer gave me a three because he said it was possible.
Comment from DrJane
Hi, Barbara: Great story! The back and forth dialogue of doubt and confidence is fascinating. The artwork is a great match as well. A few notes: Para 4, Line 2: "Maybe Jacob's just like him." no comma; Para 17, Line 1: should read "Laila shifted"; Near the end: "Doubt reared its ugly head as Laila whispered"--the reader is a little confused as to whether it's the hostess or Laila speaking. 2nd to last line: "You're a lucky lady--you have one.." or You're a lucky lady. You have one ..."
Do hope you're feeling much better by now!
Blessings,
Jane
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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Hi, Barbara: Great story! The back and forth dialogue of doubt and confidence is fascinating. The artwork is a great match as well. A few notes: Para 4, Line 2: "Maybe Jacob's just like him." no comma; Para 17, Line 1: should read "Laila shifted"; Near the end: "Doubt reared its ugly head as Laila whispered"--the reader is a little confused as to whether it's the hostess or Laila speaking. 2nd to last line: "You're a lucky lady--you have one.." or You're a lucky lady. You have one ..."
Do hope you're feeling much better by now!
Blessings,
Jane
Comment Written 15-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your review I will correct those areas.
Comment from pugrpoems
I do not usually read romance novel chapters, but this is excellent! The only thing I don't like is the picture. This is truly excellent writing, and outstanding. Bravo!
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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I do not usually read romance novel chapters, but this is excellent! The only thing I don't like is the picture. This is truly excellent writing, and outstanding. Bravo!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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Sorry about the artwork. I will see if I can find something better. Thank you for your review.
Comment from JimLee
This is a fascinating story. It shows what I have observed both with my wife and many other women from daughters to employees and co-workers. You display well, my observation. Women can "what if" their lives away.
I suppose that is what makes men and women different.
Using logic to make a decision rather than emotion eliminates most "what if" questions.
Actually, I am glad God made us so different, but I must say you have done an excellent job of showing the reality of the "what if" syndrome.
I can't wait for the second part!
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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This is a fascinating story. It shows what I have observed both with my wife and many other women from daughters to employees and co-workers. You display well, my observation. Women can "what if" their lives away.
I suppose that is what makes men and women different.
Using logic to make a decision rather than emotion eliminates most "what if" questions.
Actually, I am glad God made us so different, but I must say you have done an excellent job of showing the reality of the "what if" syndrome.
I can't wait for the second part!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. Unfortunately, I am a what if person. One of my reviewers said nobody thought like that. I was shocked and began to think something was wrong with me.
