Sweet Dreams, Alien Child
Where do they hide the pod?76 total reviews
Comment from SilverFoxes
LOL I recently returnd from my five years of R&R on that wonderful alien escape zone. Arrived home refreshed and relaxed and in awe of how wonderful my parents really are!
No nits or spag. A great story. Good luck with the last one!
SilverFoxes
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2008
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LOL I recently returnd from my five years of R&R on that wonderful alien escape zone. Arrived home refreshed and relaxed and in awe of how wonderful my parents really are!
No nits or spag. A great story. Good luck with the last one!
SilverFoxes
Comment Written 28-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2008
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Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed your stay. :-) I really appreciate the wonderful review.
Jan
Comment from Dave M
Jan,
I've enjoyed reading this post, and I couldn't find any nits. Yes, teenagers know all the answers, and if you don't believe that, just ask one.
Dave M
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2008
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Jan,
I've enjoyed reading this post, and I couldn't find any nits. Yes, teenagers know all the answers, and if you don't believe that, just ask one.
Dave M
Comment Written 28-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2008
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Thank you so much, Dave! :-) So glad you enjoyed it.
Jan
Comment from adewpearl
this is incredibly adorable - I am so glad my teenaliens are now twenty something people who love me. :-) You describe the total love of a little one so well and the transformation to teen with wit. I truly enjoyed this, so much so that if there was spag, I did not notice!
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2008
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this is incredibly adorable - I am so glad my teenaliens are now twenty something people who love me. :-) You describe the total love of a little one so well and the transformation to teen with wit. I truly enjoyed this, so much so that if there was spag, I did not notice!
Comment Written 28-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2008
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Thank you so much! :-) You made my night. I'm so glad you enjoyed it this much.
Hugs,
Jani
Comment from unidian
Ah Jan, been there, done that:-) Thing is, do you remember when the alien pod released you? LOL Small nit ... this line
You're the best youngest daughter I've ever had
best and youngest together jars a bit? Leave it to you, it didn't spoil my enjoyment of this. Tom x
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2008
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Ah Jan, been there, done that:-) Thing is, do you remember when the alien pod released you? LOL Small nit ... this line
You're the best youngest daughter I've ever had
best and youngest together jars a bit? Leave it to you, it didn't spoil my enjoyment of this. Tom x
Comment Written 28-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2008
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LOL Thanks, Tom. I tweaked it a little. I do say that because I don't play favorites and I can't say the best daughter, because that would hurt the other ones!
Thanks again for the great review!
Jan
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
Great write with a sure twist of humor and very entertaining....they do grow too fast...once they reach their teens, it's hard to get that connection back until their older and wiser. Nice work. Hugs and smiles, Susanne
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Great write with a sure twist of humor and very entertaining....they do grow too fast...once they reach their teens, it's hard to get that connection back until their older and wiser. Nice work. Hugs and smiles, Susanne
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Comment Written 28-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2008
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Thank you so much, Susanne. May I ask - did you find the first sentence confusing, regarding not trading them for the world. Another reviewer did, and I'm trying to decide whether or not I should keep that line or lose it! :-)
Jan
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I, personally, like the first line...it sets up the piece quite well. Children can sometimes feel like aliens to us! lol. Hugs and smiles, Susanne
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Thank you! :-) That's all I needed to hear.
Hugs,
Jani
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glad you let me give my opinion! hugs and smiles, Susanne
Comment from GerryMacNeil
Super story/translation of experience! I found the sentence that sets up the whole matter a bit rough: "(because you are owed far more than a single planet for everything they've put you through)." That phrase, "owed far more than a single planet," just doesn't make sense. The rest of it is delightful, Jani. Let me know if you decide to make a change--will revisit! Gerry
Update: that does it! Thanks! G.
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Super story/translation of experience! I found the sentence that sets up the whole matter a bit rough: "(because you are owed far more than a single planet for everything they've put you through)." That phrase, "owed far more than a single planet," just doesn't make sense. The rest of it is delightful, Jani. Let me know if you decide to make a change--will revisit! Gerry
Update: that does it! Thanks! G.
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Comment Written 28-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2008
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Okay, thanks Gerry. I will go tweak it and see if that helps.
Hugs,
Jan
