O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from Irina
You know I like haiku so very much. Some haikus written by rules, but they are so banal. Your haiku is classic and expresses much in a few words!
Strong picture!
Thank you for sharing this work!
Irina.
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You know I like haiku so very much. Some haikus written by rules, but they are so banal. Your haiku is classic and expresses much in a few words!
Strong picture!
Thank you for sharing this work!
Irina.
Comment Written 08-May-2006
Comment from volunteer angel
Just like a raging thunderstorm, news spreads fast. Your haiku is about the news in ones life and how it will spread. Good news doesn't travel as fast as bad news.
Your syllables are perfect in this Haiku. Great job! V.A.
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Just like a raging thunderstorm, news spreads fast. Your haiku is about the news in ones life and how it will spread. Good news doesn't travel as fast as bad news.
Your syllables are perfect in this Haiku. Great job! V.A.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2006
Comment from Aleksandramarie
this just didn't work for me 100%
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being the departure from nature,
somehow, I think , or you made me think
of man made light...
and the question...just edges in ...and
well it doesn't work..
thought provoking though, thanks, mspotter
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this just didn't work for me 100%
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being the departure from nature,
somehow, I think , or you made me think
of man made light...
and the question...just edges in ...and
well it doesn't work..
thought provoking though, thanks, mspotter
Comment Written 29-Apr-2006
Comment from L.A.Tripp
While it's short, and seems to be to the point, I'm not exactly sure of what the point is. I'm kind of confused by it, and I don't know exactly what confuses me, because I just don't completely understand it. Sorry.
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While it's short, and seems to be to the point, I'm not exactly sure of what the point is. I'm kind of confused by it, and I don't know exactly what confuses me, because I just don't completely understand it. Sorry.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2006
Comment from Pnpebbles
Good job. Very descriptive with the short format. Can't really say much else other than keep up the good work. Take care.
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Good job. Very descriptive with the short format. Can't really say much else other than keep up the good work. Take care.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2006
Comment from H. Rebecca
o storm, what a rage! -when I think of " a rage", I think of an argument.
Consider:
o storm that rages
happy writing.
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o storm, what a rage! -when I think of " a rage", I think of an argument.
Consider:
o storm that rages
happy writing.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2006
Comment from Barbara-Anne
I began this review not quite sure what the poem meant, so I delved deeper and deeper. The more I read, the more I thought, and the more I thought the more profound the poem became. You can find emotional connections within yourself and then extrapolate them onto the poem. Whether or not you intended this or not, maybe we will never know - but you managed to write a very good poem. Well done.
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I began this review not quite sure what the poem meant, so I delved deeper and deeper. The more I read, the more I thought, and the more I thought the more profound the poem became. You can find emotional connections within yourself and then extrapolate them onto the poem. Whether or not you intended this or not, maybe we will never know - but you managed to write a very good poem. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2006
Comment from jackiesmuse
I have read it many times. I don't know if my brain is fatigued from my busy day, but I don't get the second line.
flow genes for lives, sky blush lights (Next it tells the activation effect;)
I'm sure it is profound. I know you are a fine writer.
Sorry.
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I have read it many times. I don't know if my brain is fatigued from my busy day, but I don't get the second line.
flow genes for lives, sky blush lights (Next it tells the activation effect;)
I'm sure it is profound. I know you are a fine writer.
Sorry.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2006
Comment from oldone
Using the Authers notes This follows the definition expressed.
As I am not a traind person in poetic form. I cannot evaulate this poem properly
The first line is griping and brings to the mind the flas of lightning and fast flowing clouds.
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Using the Authers notes This follows the definition expressed.
As I am not a traind person in poetic form. I cannot evaulate this poem properly
The first line is griping and brings to the mind the flas of lightning and fast flowing clouds.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2006
Comment from 96744mom
This gets better everytime. Like the red and black colors. Syllable counts all intact...lol. It's always fun working with haikus and senryus. There's no other comments to post. Great job!
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This gets better everytime. Like the red and black colors. Syllable counts all intact...lol. It's always fun working with haikus and senryus. There's no other comments to post. Great job!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2006
