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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This made me smile and I am guilty of the same thing! My Mother was even worse! She would save broken kettles for my father to fix even though he'd been dead for five years! The collecting of beer cans made me smile, I collect the metal tops off champagne bottles! He he he, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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This made me smile and I am guilty of the same thing! My Mother was even worse! She would save broken kettles for my father to fix even though he'd been dead for five years! The collecting of beer cans made me smile, I collect the metal tops off champagne bottles! He he he, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you Dolly. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Beri Bee
Lighthearted creativity about a challenge that's real! "The copper jello mold should never be sold." What a great visual and truth! Very entertaining! Well done!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Lighthearted creativity about a challenge that's real! "The copper jello mold should never be sold." What a great visual and truth! Very entertaining! Well done!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Michaelk
Very nice. This poem reminds me of my own overflowing attic.
Reading this was like a trip through my early adulthood up to present day.
I was especially impressed when you rhymed Afghan.
Nice rhymes, very accessible theme, great poem.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Very nice. This poem reminds me of my own overflowing attic.
Reading this was like a trip through my early adulthood up to present day.
I was especially impressed when you rhymed Afghan.
Nice rhymes, very accessible theme, great poem.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Poet!
There is a lot of humor in this piece. You know what they say, to be able to poke fun at yourself is truly a gift. I think you will have the audience laughing.
Take a look at the crannies and nooks line... I'm thinking the way you have it stated that nook should be singular.
Good luck in the contest.
Kim
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Hi Poet!
There is a lot of humor in this piece. You know what they say, to be able to poke fun at yourself is truly a gift. I think you will have the audience laughing.
Take a look at the crannies and nooks line... I'm thinking the way you have it stated that nook should be singular.
Good luck in the contest.
Kim
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you Kim. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is very well-written and funny. Your use of specific details is excellent, and your examples are widely varied. I'm trying to do better about throwing things away--for the sake of my daughter after I'm gone.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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This is very well-written and funny. Your use of specific details is excellent, and your examples are widely varied. I'm trying to do better about throwing things away--for the sake of my daughter after I'm gone.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Lance S. Loria
A cute self deprecating poem. Where you say: "Every cranny and nooks" that should be nook. For the next line to rhyme perhaps try: "Filled with a choice comic book" The artwork is really cute too.
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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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A cute self deprecating poem. Where you say: "Every cranny and nooks" that should be nook. For the next line to rhyme perhaps try: "Filled with a choice comic book" The artwork is really cute too.
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Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from jmdg1954
Comically written I say for sure,
All the junk busting down the door.
Forty years of memories in every corner of our house,
Me I'd throw it all away, then she'll call me a louse!
I feel your pain, nothing to gain.
Let it go,
I'll tell you so.
You won't win,
By committing the sin... of throwing it all away.
Nicely done... John
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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Comically written I say for sure,
All the junk busting down the door.
Forty years of memories in every corner of our house,
Me I'd throw it all away, then she'll call me a louse!
I feel your pain, nothing to gain.
Let it go,
I'll tell you so.
You won't win,
By committing the sin... of throwing it all away.
Nicely done... John
Comment Written 21-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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Thank you John. Your review was probably better than my entry. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Artasylum
You may not be perfect but, your poem is this is a winner... maybe stick to the bulldozer scenario... Good luck in your I Am Not Perfect... it should come in first... yours, diana
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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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You may not be perfect but, your poem is this is a winner... maybe stick to the bulldozer scenario... Good luck in your I Am Not Perfect... it should come in first... yours, diana
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Comment Written 21-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much for the kind words Diana. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
