Your Arms
a ghazal62 total reviews
Comment from kiwigirl2821
You know Andre you use quite seductive and alluring imagery in your piece. It is not vile or tasteless rather, it feels like love. I'm inspired to find out more about your style of writing and nature of being. I think you are truly something special.
enjoyed the write so much. xoxo Kiwi
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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
You know Andre you use quite seductive and alluring imagery in your piece. It is not vile or tasteless rather, it feels like love. I'm inspired to find out more about your style of writing and nature of being. I think you are truly something special.
enjoyed the write so much. xoxo Kiwi
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Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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Thank you, Kiwi, for noting my seductive and alluring imagery. Thanks also for your review and for calling me truly something special. I appreciate it.
A separate matter, I have been listening to the Western Swing musician Don Burnham who traveled New Zealand and performed "Fern Frond Boogie," which made me think if Kiwis like you. Enjoy:
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my brother in law listens to this music and it is genuinely beautiful. It is very typical of the Kiwi lifestyle. They really do enjoy things like a good feed up and fun! ... nice to know others hear it as well ... xx deborah
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Yes, do you know thevTopps Twins? They are big in New Zealand. I love their music, too.
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Yes they come to the town I live in and are comedians as well ... funny as!
Comment from Dean Kuch
"Our entwined fingers formed a human centipede;
limbs squinched in the anaconda coils of your arms." ... Sounds rather...tight, Andre.
"Other times, my body pulsed within your heartbeat,
as if wrapped in the blood pressure cuffs of your arms." ... Again, suffocating and tight. Or, perhaps, just secure and cozy ...
"Strange how your absence tightens its grip around me
to where I can't breathe without yearning for your arms." ... Ah, there we have it--the suffocating quality I sensed all throughout this emotionally driven piece of poetry.
Nicely done, Andre, as usual.
~Dean
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
"Our entwined fingers formed a human centipede;
limbs squinched in the anaconda coils of your arms." ... Sounds rather...tight, Andre.
"Other times, my body pulsed within your heartbeat,
as if wrapped in the blood pressure cuffs of your arms." ... Again, suffocating and tight. Or, perhaps, just secure and cozy ...
"Strange how your absence tightens its grip around me
to where I can't breathe without yearning for your arms." ... Ah, there we have it--the suffocating quality I sensed all throughout this emotionally driven piece of poetry.
Nicely done, Andre, as usual.
~Dean
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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Yes, dean, you nailed it. This is a suffocating kind of love. I did not realize it until you pointed it out. This is no gentle cuddle.
Thank you for granting my poem its first review and first six star review. Thanks also for pointing out the lines that resonated with you and for your intuitive observations.
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You're more than welcome, my friend.
It is always a pleasure.
~Dean :)