My Favorite Tree
Children's Poetry Contest (163 words)81 total reviews
Comment from trumby
Very lovely children story in a poem. I love the image, the picture is just so perfect. Good choice of words and well expressed message. Your poem is a reminder of how the children enjoy life before, unlike now that they are too occupied by gadgets and do not appreciate the beauty of nature. Very lovely. Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing this beautiful piece.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Very lovely children story in a poem. I love the image, the picture is just so perfect. Good choice of words and well expressed message. Your poem is a reminder of how the children enjoy life before, unlike now that they are too occupied by gadgets and do not appreciate the beauty of nature. Very lovely. Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing this beautiful piece.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Thank you for your encouraging review. Yes, my children didn't grow up with the gadgets of today so climbing a tree was a more natural thing. Now, the grandchildren - that's a different thing. haha
Blessings
Janet
Comment from liz10240
I enjoyed this poem very much. Good flow, great rhyming any child would like it. Childrens poetry is my preferred genre and your poem is easy to understand and very entertaining.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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I enjoyed this poem very much. Good flow, great rhyming any child would like it. Childrens poetry is my preferred genre and your poem is easy to understand and very entertaining.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Thank you for your encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from MidnightReicheru
I really like this poem. It flows nicely and has a great rhyme to it. I especially love the ending since it gives the poem a child-like feel to it. The only thing I'd maybe recommend is that the line "He was looking around and surprised to see me" sounds a little awkward. I think, as long as it doesn't mess up and syllable or rhythm saying, "He was looking around and WAS surprised to see me" would make more sense since I believe it's a subject-verb agreement problem. Either way though, beautiful poem. I love the picture you've chosen to accompany it. Good luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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I really like this poem. It flows nicely and has a great rhyme to it. I especially love the ending since it gives the poem a child-like feel to it. The only thing I'd maybe recommend is that the line "He was looking around and surprised to see me" sounds a little awkward. I think, as long as it doesn't mess up and syllable or rhythm saying, "He was looking around and WAS surprised to see me" would make more sense since I believe it's a subject-verb agreement problem. Either way though, beautiful poem. I love the picture you've chosen to accompany it. Good luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Thank you for your encouraging review. I will definitely look at that line again.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
Sounds like an exciting day as a child and I must say kudos to the mom who was able to get her child outside to actually be a kid. My nephews are always outside doing something. Great job with this
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Sounds like an exciting day as a child and I must say kudos to the mom who was able to get her child outside to actually be a kid. My nephews are always outside doing something. Great job with this
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Thank you for your encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from mermaids
I can see your poem clearly, your poetic form describes my backyard. I have a fondness for squirrels and I love the poem being from the viewpoint of the squirrel.
This is a fun poem for adults as well as children.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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I can see your poem clearly, your poetic form describes my backyard. I have a fondness for squirrels and I love the poem being from the viewpoint of the squirrel.
This is a fun poem for adults as well as children.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review and for the sparkling six stars..
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Well, you had a lovely day up in your tree, Janet, and what a lot of lovely creatures you spied there. Children will love all the goings on, and will probably want to climb their own tree to see what is happening. A very well crafted poem and a pleasure to read. Good luck in the contest! xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Well, you had a lovely day up in your tree, Janet, and what a lot of lovely creatures you spied there. Children will love all the goings on, and will probably want to climb their own tree to see what is happening. A very well crafted poem and a pleasure to read. Good luck in the contest! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Thank you Sandra for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Drew Delaney
Very cute poem, JMF. I like the imagery of the tree and all the animals that live or visit the tree. It's like a little land with different animal and bird life entwined in its realm. So sweet. I wish you the best in the contest. Drew xx
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Very cute poem, JMF. I like the imagery of the tree and all the animals that live or visit the tree. It's like a little land with different animal and bird life entwined in its realm. So sweet. I wish you the best in the contest. Drew xx
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Thank you Drew for your encouraging review and good wishes.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Cheryl9359
This is a really cute poem. I like it and think children would enjoy reading it too. I like how you describe the favorite tree and all there is to see. Nice job and good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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This is a really cute poem. I like it and think children would enjoy reading it too. I like how you describe the favorite tree and all there is to see. Nice job and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Thank you for your encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Joan E.
I relished scrolling down the page and coming eye to eye with your squirrel! I enjoyed your rhymed couplets in these quatrains and the immediacy of your telling the story in the first person. Moms have a habit of spoiling fun! Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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I relished scrolling down the page and coming eye to eye with your squirrel! I enjoyed your rhymed couplets in these quatrains and the immediacy of your telling the story in the first person. Moms have a habit of spoiling fun! Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Thank you Joan for your encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from teols2016
This is a lot of fun. I kind of wish an owl would have been in it or at least referenced around the line about night coming, but you've got quite the animal kingdom already. I spotted one other thing:
It has been a great day in my tree, there's no doubt.. -- you've got two periods at the end here...either one or three are fine.
Again, this was a lot of fun and kids will definetly like it. Well done.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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This is a lot of fun. I kind of wish an owl would have been in it or at least referenced around the line about night coming, but you've got quite the animal kingdom already. I spotted one other thing:
It has been a great day in my tree, there's no doubt.. -- you've got two periods at the end here...either one or three are fine.
Again, this was a lot of fun and kids will definetly like it. Well done.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Thank you for your encouraging review. I would have had more wildlife in the poem but the contest restricted us to 180 words. I had thought of a lizard and a tree frog but the tree frogs only come out at night. An owl would be a great addition too. Thanks for catching that double period. I fixed that right away.
Blessings
Janet
