Freedom's like...
Just another word.96 total reviews
Comment from Sasha
That is an excellent illustration you chose for this poem. I like the mixture of freedom and God. You have excellent rhyme and I enjoyed the smooth flow of this one. I also enjoyed your notes.
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That is an excellent illustration you chose for this poem. I like the mixture of freedom and God. You have excellent rhyme and I enjoyed the smooth flow of this one. I also enjoyed your notes.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2015
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Thanks Sasha, for the wonderful review, comments and excellent rating, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Our freedom's like a gust of wind
that clears the footprint's brand;
Though showers come in summer's heat
rains vanish as through sand.
I suppose the meaning of "freedom" is different to each
individual.
A well written poem, with good rhythm and rhyme, Roy.
Margaret
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Our freedom's like a gust of wind
that clears the footprint's brand;
Though showers come in summer's heat
rains vanish as through sand.
I suppose the meaning of "freedom" is different to each
individual.
A well written poem, with good rhythm and rhyme, Roy.
Margaret
Comment Written 29-Jul-2015
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Thanks Margaret, for the wonderful review, comments and excellent rating, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Nan Beeson
Good morning, Roy. Your title, "Freedom's like..." makes me wonder what you have to say about it, especially in today's havoc and jeopardy here in our beloved USA. About our freedom being like a gust of wind and vanishing like sand is so sad and visual. The whirlwind then dumping it makes one weep and can feel how it feels; all scattered and no longer existing. What a frightful taught when referring to our Freedom. Yes, our freedom was made possible by Christ's precious blood and the pain of Him hanging on the cross--and a thorn feeling like a million of them. It is interesting that you say that freedom is just another word unless it is "bought" with a price so mighty, one can hardly believe the price being having to "surrender" ourselves, such a small price, whereas Jesus Christ paid a price that is hardly conceivable, but true, because we won the battle although precious Jesus paid the price for it with his precious blood and inconceivable pain.
Your author's notes are an eye opening post in itself, and your quote from ! Corinthians 7:23a from the NIV is perfect for your explanation of your masterpiece poem. IO will check my KIJV and see how they coincide. It will be interesting, I am sure. Thank your for sharing this poem, and my reading it so early in the morning makes me want to do my best by showing my appreciation for my freedom at the cost of shedding painful blood...Nan Nan>>>
with blood, a cross, a thorn.
absolved am I from guilt and shame;
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Good morning, Roy. Your title, "Freedom's like..." makes me wonder what you have to say about it, especially in today's havoc and jeopardy here in our beloved USA. About our freedom being like a gust of wind and vanishing like sand is so sad and visual. The whirlwind then dumping it makes one weep and can feel how it feels; all scattered and no longer existing. What a frightful taught when referring to our Freedom. Yes, our freedom was made possible by Christ's precious blood and the pain of Him hanging on the cross--and a thorn feeling like a million of them. It is interesting that you say that freedom is just another word unless it is "bought" with a price so mighty, one can hardly believe the price being having to "surrender" ourselves, such a small price, whereas Jesus Christ paid a price that is hardly conceivable, but true, because we won the battle although precious Jesus paid the price for it with his precious blood and inconceivable pain.
Your author's notes are an eye opening post in itself, and your quote from ! Corinthians 7:23a from the NIV is perfect for your explanation of your masterpiece poem. IO will check my KIJV and see how they coincide. It will be interesting, I am sure. Thank your for sharing this poem, and my reading it so early in the morning makes me want to do my best by showing my appreciation for my freedom at the cost of shedding painful blood...Nan Nan>>>
with blood, a cross, a thorn.
absolved am I from guilt and shame;
Comment Written 29-Jul-2015
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Thanks Nan, the freedom from sin's burden is the only lasting and unmovable one, all other freedom seems to indistinct and fleeting. Thanks for the comprehensive and searching review, great empathy, blessings, Roy.
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Same to you, Roy. You know my feelings, and that I always learn something in each new post of yours and truly enjoy besides... Nan:))
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Thanks Nan
Comment from krys123
Roy;
-A beautiful writing my friend and quite well conceived with the writing is very inventive and truly and ingeniously creative. Your resourcefulness in writing this piece is truly magnificent. An excellent type of writing.
-Good use of enjambment
-each of your rhyming words are contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making the rhythm to flow smoothly this also has to do with the fact that your rhyming is neither forced nor labored.
-The rhythmic meter, cadence, timing and tempo were all helpful in making the reading clear, fluid in easy but also the rhythm was in force nor labored also.
-I like your reference to Bobby McGee where freedom's just another word.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you forever.
Alex
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Roy;
-A beautiful writing my friend and quite well conceived with the writing is very inventive and truly and ingeniously creative. Your resourcefulness in writing this piece is truly magnificent. An excellent type of writing.
-Good use of enjambment
-each of your rhyming words are contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making the rhythm to flow smoothly this also has to do with the fact that your rhyming is neither forced nor labored.
-The rhythmic meter, cadence, timing and tempo were all helpful in making the reading clear, fluid in easy but also the rhythm was in force nor labored also.
-I like your reference to Bobby McGee where freedom's just another word.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you forever.
Alex
Comment Written 29-Jul-2015
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Thanks Alex, for the wonderful review, comments and excellent rating, I appreciate your great support, blessings, Roy.
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You are indeed insincerely welcome
Comment from MsPetra
I liked your poem. It had a nice flow to it and a nice message. Basically, you said something with style. Well done on that regard.
Your rhyme and meter are spot on.
I liked the third stanza best. Also, I agree with your comments after the poem. Freedom isn't free and it isn't cheap. It comes at great costs.
Thank you for writing this poem.
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I liked your poem. It had a nice flow to it and a nice message. Basically, you said something with style. Well done on that regard.
Your rhyme and meter are spot on.
I liked the third stanza best. Also, I agree with your comments after the poem. Freedom isn't free and it isn't cheap. It comes at great costs.
Thank you for writing this poem.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2015
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Thanks, for the wonderful review, comments and excellent rating, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Judgement Dave
Another very good poem from your good pen (or keyboard).
Must admit that I especially liked the following:
"like a cloud caught in a storm
a ghostly coloured sheen. "
Not sure I fully agree with the Joplin line being wrong though - there are different freedoms and different costs/benefits associated with each, often according to one's personal beliefs/values.
Someone who has nothing left to lose is free to do/say all the things that another would not for fear of losing something they hold dear. Of course the spiritual freedom granted to Christians by the crucifixion of Christ cost a life, but in the scheme of things maybe the freedom was worth so much more than one individual (even if that individual is divine offspring).
As ever, I may not fully get your angle, being the non-believer that I am, but appreciate a good, heartfelt poem that I can think about!
Cheers
JD
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2015
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Another very good poem from your good pen (or keyboard).
Must admit that I especially liked the following:
"like a cloud caught in a storm
a ghostly coloured sheen. "
Not sure I fully agree with the Joplin line being wrong though - there are different freedoms and different costs/benefits associated with each, often according to one's personal beliefs/values.
Someone who has nothing left to lose is free to do/say all the things that another would not for fear of losing something they hold dear. Of course the spiritual freedom granted to Christians by the crucifixion of Christ cost a life, but in the scheme of things maybe the freedom was worth so much more than one individual (even if that individual is divine offspring).
As ever, I may not fully get your angle, being the non-believer that I am, but appreciate a good, heartfelt poem that I can think about!
Cheers
JD
Comment Written 29-Jul-2015
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Thanks, for the wonderful review, comments and excellent rating, blessings, Roy.
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Most welcome.
Comment from scongrove
Wow! Another perfectly written work of art! I don't know how you do it, but your writing continues to motivate me. I love the message that you send. You continue to amaze me. Thank you for sharing this. A great way to start the day. :)
Shana :)
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Wow! Another perfectly written work of art! I don't know how you do it, but your writing continues to motivate me. I love the message that you send. You continue to amaze me. Thank you for sharing this. A great way to start the day. :)
Shana :)
Comment Written 29-Jul-2015
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Thanks Shana, your support is what brings a smile to my face, motivation to my day, and purpose to soul, a sincere thank you.blessings, Roy.
Comment from robina1978
Thanks for your foot note. Excellent photo that complements your poem perfectly.
It is about nature, freedom and God. In a good mixture. It rhymes and flows all the way.
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Thanks for your foot note. Excellent photo that complements your poem perfectly.
It is about nature, freedom and God. In a good mixture. It rhymes and flows all the way.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2015
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Thanks for the wonderful review, comments and excellent rating, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Fantastic, Roy. A spiritually powerful, uplifting, perfectly rhymed poetic proclamation of the cost of freedom.
Christ paid the ultimate sacrifice for our eternal freedom from eternal torment and death when He was nailed to, and died on, the cross on high atop Golgotha Hill.
"Now freedom's just another word,
unless it's bought not won.
One must surrender life for death,
as Jesus Christ has done."
Amen, and well done! ~Dean
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Fantastic, Roy. A spiritually powerful, uplifting, perfectly rhymed poetic proclamation of the cost of freedom.
Christ paid the ultimate sacrifice for our eternal freedom from eternal torment and death when He was nailed to, and died on, the cross on high atop Golgotha Hill.
"Now freedom's just another word,
unless it's bought not won.
One must surrender life for death,
as Jesus Christ has done."
Amen, and well done! ~Dean
Comment Written 29-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2015
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Thanks Dean, you've nailed the meaning, of course some who don't understand the meaning of Christ's death and resurrection, tended to miss the metaphorical wind simile, but not so so you, thanks for this encouraging and uplifting review, blessings, My friend, Roy.
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It is always a pleasure, Roy. You're very welcome, my friend. ~Dean
Comment from Sis Cat
Yes, "freedom's bought with blood, a cross, a thorn." Your poem extrapolates this point of faith. Equating freedom to the wind is an apt simile. Your rebuttal to the Janis Joplin line was also effective and faith based. Thank you for sharing your excellent poem on freedom.
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Yes, "freedom's bought with blood, a cross, a thorn." Your poem extrapolates this point of faith. Equating freedom to the wind is an apt simile. Your rebuttal to the Janis Joplin line was also effective and faith based. Thank you for sharing your excellent poem on freedom.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2015
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Thanks Cat, for the wonderful review, comments and excellent rating, blessings, Roy.
