flip flops held in hand: 5-7-5 suite
track memories, not sand, into the house87 total reviews
Comment from inside echo
Well done. Your poem follows the format perfectly, it's syllable count is perfect, as is its flow. I do not often see a haiku "linked". Thank you for sharing. Enjoy your weekend.
echo
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Well done. Your poem follows the format perfectly, it's syllable count is perfect, as is its flow. I do not often see a haiku "linked". Thank you for sharing. Enjoy your weekend.
echo
Comment Written 03-May-2015
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Yes, echo, this is my first attempt at linked haiku. I have seen several on this site and decided to try my hand at it when a worthy subject presented itself. Thank you for your review.
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You are most welcome.
echo
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was a very fantasy inducing set of haikus. I liked the imagery of the sand on the feet. I could feel the warmth of the sun kissed skin. Great haikus. I applaud your use of such inspiration. Great job. Gretchen
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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This was a very fantasy inducing set of haikus. I liked the imagery of the sand on the feet. I could feel the warmth of the sun kissed skin. Great haikus. I applaud your use of such inspiration. Great job. Gretchen
Comment Written 03-May-2015
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Yes, I am impressed that the sight of sandy feet inspired me to write my first haiku set. When I boarded a bus along a beach in Mexico yesterday, I was taken back by the sight of what I thought were white socks on the children's feet. It took me a moment to realize that it was sand. I wrote in a magazine and held on to the grab bar as the bus drove us to town. When the children disembarked, their feet sparkled. I finished and posted my poem six hours later. Thanks for your review.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Enjoyed the imagery of this piece. You made me as your reader see those kids with sandy feet and feel the warmth of that sand and hearts of the children. Well done. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Enjoyed the imagery of this piece. You made me as your reader see those kids with sandy feet and feel the warmth of that sand and hearts of the children. Well done. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 03-May-2015
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Thank you, Kiwi, for your fine review. I am glad my poem brought back memories.
Comment from walbc
This is an excellent poem, with great imagery.
Very clever to have written it in a series of Haikus.
I love the artwork you chose. Well done Sis Cat. Warm regards, Wendy.
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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This is an excellent poem, with great imagery.
Very clever to have written it in a series of Haikus.
I love the artwork you chose. Well done Sis Cat. Warm regards, Wendy.
Comment Written 03-May-2015
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Thank you, Wendy, for your kind review. This was my first time doing a haiku suite.
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That's amazing writing for a first time. I've never attempted one and would find it very difficult. Good on you! Wendy.
Comment from Gunner Lil
Very nice poem, easy to read and see the child walking on the beach looking for that one special shell. Will all the sand wash out between their toes?
Thank you for the fine reading.
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Very nice poem, easy to read and see the child walking on the beach looking for that one special shell. Will all the sand wash out between their toes?
Thank you for the fine reading.
Comment Written 03-May-2015
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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No, all the sand seldom washes out between a child's toes before the child arrives home. Thanks for your review.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
To be walking on a comfy sandy beach right about now. Action flows smoothly. Verses fit together nicely. Easy to follow story line. Write on.
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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To be walking on a comfy sandy beach right about now. Action flows smoothly. Verses fit together nicely. Easy to follow story line. Write on.
Comment Written 03-May-2015
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Yes, Brett, I have a beach right outside my resort balcony. I may go for a walk today and rekindle childhood memories. Thanks for the review.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Cat...
This is excellent. Your words give super imagery of the beach, sand, and children laughing.
Well composed and presented.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Hi, Cat...
This is excellent. Your words give super imagery of the beach, sand, and children laughing.
Well composed and presented.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 03-May-2015
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Thank you, Jax, for your kind review of my vivid poem
Comment from Glasstruth
There's a hidden story behind this that's left up to the imagination. It speaks of innocence, and being a part of nature's glow. Love these two lines:
"wet toes trudge across the strand
feet dipped in stardust"
I felt something magical as I read those lines. Wonderfully penned. Les
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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There's a hidden story behind this that's left up to the imagination. It speaks of innocence, and being a part of nature's glow. Love these two lines:
"wet toes trudge across the strand
feet dipped in stardust"
I felt something magical as I read those lines. Wonderfully penned. Les
Comment Written 03-May-2015
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Thank you, Glasstruth, for your kind review. Less than a day ago I spotted the sparkling feet that ignited my imagination. It seems like a dream or distant memory. I have this poem as a relic, like the sand around my drain. Thanks for the review.
Comment from costellsgirl33
"Sand backs up the tub". I love it. Two of my favorite things, the beach and children. Such a lovely combination. Your poem is very sweet and easy flowing. It made me smile. Good job
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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"Sand backs up the tub". I love it. Two of my favorite things, the beach and children. Such a lovely combination. Your poem is very sweet and easy flowing. It made me smile. Good job
Comment Written 03-May-2015
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Thank you, costellsgirl33, for your fine review. I am glad you loved that last line. I had just fixed two typos in it before your review. Yes, the beach and children make a fun combination. Thanks for your review.
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You are very welcome! It's a lovely poem.
Arnetta
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You are very welcome! It's a lovely poem.
Arnetta
Comment from jlsavell
Andre, I should be so adept at executing these poetic expressions called haiku. Your imagery absolutely stunning as you are inspired by observing the world around you in the most minute detail. Most impressive dear friend.. Jimi
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Andre, I should be so adept at executing these poetic expressions called haiku. Your imagery absolutely stunning as you are inspired by observing the world around you in the most minute detail. Most impressive dear friend.. Jimi
Comment Written 03-May-2015
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Well, thank you, Jimi, you inspired me. Yesterday when I saw fresh from a Mexican beach those sparkling feet on a bus, I wrote quickly in a magazine while I held onto the grab bar. I had to capture that moment in time with every detail my imagination can muster. Later during dinner at a beachside restaurant, my pecan-encrusted Mahi Mahi gave me another idea for a line. A poet bottles lightning. That is what I accomplished here. Thanks for the six star review and the encouragement.
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you are so welcome
