I Wandered the Desert
rhyming quatrains in 6/5/6/5140 total reviews
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, brooke, you did an excellent job writing this quatrain poem about the way we need to put actions behind our faith and do our part as God blesses what we do. i love the quatrain about the garden the best. that describes the life without works. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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this is very well written, brooke, you did an excellent job writing this quatrain poem about the way we need to put actions behind our faith and do our part as God blesses what we do. i love the quatrain about the garden the best. that describes the life without works. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much, sweetwoodjax, for your insightful reading of this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from DonandVicki
A Very ponderable poetic verse that leads the reader into many different thought provoking trains of thought. I enjoyed this poem very much Brooke. Don
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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A Very ponderable poetic verse that leads the reader into many different thought provoking trains of thought. I enjoyed this poem very much Brooke. Don
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Don, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Janelle
Looking in the all the wrong places for what I needed, and railing against the consequences, was once a habit of mine, so I can relate strongly to this darker than-your-normal poems Brooke. Excellent presentation and thought provoking poem. Regards, Jan
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Looking in the all the wrong places for what I needed, and railing against the consequences, was once a habit of mine, so I can relate strongly to this darker than-your-normal poems Brooke. Excellent presentation and thought provoking poem. Regards, Jan
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Jan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from billscott
This part
I wailed to the Heavens
for what wasn't there --
perhaps what I needed
was more than a prayer.
is resonating with me lately.
Good one!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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This part
I wailed to the Heavens
for what wasn't there --
perhaps what I needed
was more than a prayer.
is resonating with me lately.
Good one!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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billscott, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from honeytree
I really loved the art work for these words.
Wandering in the desert and maybe lost can be awful.
I guess when we are lost we certainly could need
More than a prayer.
honey tree
I have no six
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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I really loved the art work for these words.
Wandering in the desert and maybe lost can be awful.
I guess when we are lost we certainly could need
More than a prayer.
honey tree
I have no six
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Annie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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I loved what you wrote Brooke
Annie
Comment from the blue pixel
What a beautiful way to say that you are in the wrong place or at the wrong time Brooke and talk about great expectations? I don't mean to be flippant here Brooke and I know this attitude isn't appropriate for a poem of faith but you also know that I am way out of my league or comfort zone where poetry of this nature is concerned. Through my non-practicing Jewish eyes, I used another avenue to look at your poem. I think the message here is that if you expect to learn how to spell, you must first learn the alphabet. You must first have a plan if you to attain any goal. This is my interpretation anyway. I wish you luck in the contest my friend. xx Carol
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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What a beautiful way to say that you are in the wrong place or at the wrong time Brooke and talk about great expectations? I don't mean to be flippant here Brooke and I know this attitude isn't appropriate for a poem of faith but you also know that I am way out of my league or comfort zone where poetry of this nature is concerned. Through my non-practicing Jewish eyes, I used another avenue to look at your poem. I think the message here is that if you expect to learn how to spell, you must first learn the alphabet. You must first have a plan if you to attain any goal. This is my interpretation anyway. I wish you luck in the contest my friend. xx Carol
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Carol, thank you for your insightful reading of this poem. Yep, I'm arguing that if you want a garden, you had better plant the seeds and not just prayer for flowers :-) Too many people think faith is a substitute for action, but I have never believed God is a Santa Claus who hands out favors to those who have done nothing to make things happen themselves. Brooke :-)
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You have mentioned the precise point that has always bothered me about faith. It seemed to me to be a total lack of responsibility to leave it up to anything other than oneself. I'm glad to learn about your view Brooke. In fact, thanks to Jean Lutz and Kimbob, Father Flaps, this cynical non-practicing Jewess has learned a lot about Christianity and what it truly means. Thank you for adding to my every growing knowledge. xx Carol
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This is why I never pray for outcomes. I don't pray for God to save someone I love who is ill. I ask God to give that person the strength and will to handle what is happening. That is applicable to hundreds of situations.
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I love the way you think Brooke. I try to believe that we are only given things that we will be able to handle but to have someone else help us along with a prayer or two wouldn't hurt either. xx Carol
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Verrrry good poem. You make it obvious that you have to know where to look and what to do to get what you want or need. And once you know, you have to take action... DO it. Don't just keep wishing things were different, but set out to MAKE a difference. If everyone did what they gave lip service to, the world would be a better place. All the prayer and hope there is won't make the impossible happen. You have to start somewhere and God will come along to help you. That's the message a black pastor friend of mine preaches to his church. I love his line, "We don't need affirmative action. We can affirm ourselves!" He's a great guy with three awesome, smart, talented kids I have tutored thru the years.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Verrrry good poem. You make it obvious that you have to know where to look and what to do to get what you want or need. And once you know, you have to take action... DO it. Don't just keep wishing things were different, but set out to MAKE a difference. If everyone did what they gave lip service to, the world would be a better place. All the prayer and hope there is won't make the impossible happen. You have to start somewhere and God will come along to help you. That's the message a black pastor friend of mine preaches to his church. I love his line, "We don't need affirmative action. We can affirm ourselves!" He's a great guy with three awesome, smart, talented kids I have tutored thru the years.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Phyllis, that pastor is my kind of guy :-) Thank you so much for your insightful understanding of this poem. Brooke
Comment from Pili Pubul
This is such a fabulous poem, I love the style , so simple and clear,
but the message is powerful, deep and down to earth.
Just love it. Thank you. Pili
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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This is such a fabulous poem, I love the style , so simple and clear,
but the message is powerful, deep and down to earth.
Just love it. Thank you. Pili
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Pili, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are so welcome. Pili
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Yes, we definitely need action with our prayer. I enjoyed this one, Quatrains with 6-5-6-5 syllable count.
My favorite: I laid out a garden but scattered no seeds
then waited for flowers but got only weeds.
Nicely done, Carolyn
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Yes, we definitely need action with our prayer. I enjoyed this one, Quatrains with 6-5-6-5 syllable count.
My favorite: I laid out a garden but scattered no seeds
then waited for flowers but got only weeds.
Nicely done, Carolyn
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Carolyn, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from evilynne
We all expect things that we often are not able to attain. Your poem states this quite beautifully. Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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We all expect things that we often are not able to attain. Your poem states this quite beautifully. Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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evilynne, thank you so much :-) I appreciate your kind contest wishes and generous rating. Brooke
