Savannah Love
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Comment from Gert sherwood
A virtual six. Heool barba
Love the way you are slowly giving us more suspense about there is a ghost to be seen.
I read your chapter twice and to me there is no reason to change anything.
Gert
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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A virtual six. Heool barba
Love the way you are slowly giving us more suspense about there is a ghost to be seen.
I read your chapter twice and to me there is no reason to change anything.
Gert
Comment Written 26-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and the virtual six. I appreciate your support.
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You are always welcome Barb.
Gert
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Barbara,
I enjoyed the nice tight prose, with only slightly more signs of ghostliness afoot. Nice scene at the river walk, establishing Cash as a local hero. I only saw only little thing, "she stopped and glance at him...", should be glanced. Nice job--Ted
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Dear Barbara,
I enjoyed the nice tight prose, with only slightly more signs of ghostliness afoot. Nice scene at the river walk, establishing Cash as a local hero. I only saw only little thing, "she stopped and glance at him...", should be glanced. Nice job--Ted
Comment Written 26-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Ihad just changed that sentence and still got it wrong. Thank you for the catch.
Comment from RazberryBullet
Liked this:... "You weren't serious about painting me, were you?" "I can promise I won't get any paint on you." She grinned. LOL!!!
Whoa!...The computer screen began flashing images and turned itself off. Paige backed up and covered her mouth. "What just happened?" The lights flashed off.
Lovely hook at the end..the mystery continues!
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Liked this:... "You weren't serious about painting me, were you?" "I can promise I won't get any paint on you." She grinned. LOL!!!
Whoa!...The computer screen began flashing images and turned itself off. Paige backed up and covered her mouth. "What just happened?" The lights flashed off.
Lovely hook at the end..the mystery continues!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from kashmayank
I havent read all the chapters so wont commment much but this was a nice work I LIKED THE FLOW OF WORDS VERY SMOOOTH ,all the best
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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I havent read all the chapters so wont commment much but this was a nice work I LIKED THE FLOW OF WORDS VERY SMOOOTH ,all the best
Comment Written 26-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from MizKat
Barbara - This is a wonderful chapter. I wonder if they'll ever find out about the iights? I enjoyed reading this and look forward to what you write next. Kat
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Barbara - This is a wonderful chapter. I wonder if they'll ever find out about the iights? I enjoyed reading this and look forward to what you write next. Kat
Comment Written 26-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
You get a virtual six-star rating for this chapter; the site wouldn't let me give it for real. I liked a lot of things about this chapter, Paige's headstrong nature, Nala's knowing how matters might develop, and the fact that the "hoodlums" were not vicious punks. I have a specific comment of praise and found the tiniest of nits:
"How do I delete them?" This is an excellent move on your part. Camera film is going the way of the dodo.
Besides I hear you're a legend" You need a period here - yes, picky, picky.
Dave
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Barbara,
You get a virtual six-star rating for this chapter; the site wouldn't let me give it for real. I liked a lot of things about this chapter, Paige's headstrong nature, Nala's knowing how matters might develop, and the fact that the "hoodlums" were not vicious punks. I have a specific comment of praise and found the tiniest of nits:
"How do I delete them?" This is an excellent move on your part. Camera film is going the way of the dodo.
Besides I hear you're a legend" You need a period here - yes, picky, picky.
Dave
Comment Written 26-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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I had changed the legend part and I guess the period got deleted. I have fixed it. Virtual hugs headed your direction. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
So if no one confessed to leaving the light on....then who did? I am beginning to think there is a ghost in that house and I hope they find it soon as it could be dangerous and not just creepy. You weave your characters inside this story with skill and always leave me wanting more. Well done....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Hi Barbara,
So if no one confessed to leaving the light on....then who did? I am beginning to think there is a ghost in that house and I hope they find it soon as it could be dangerous and not just creepy. You weave your characters inside this story with skill and always leave me wanting more. Well done....blessings, chey
Comment Written 26-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
This ghost is certainly creative, I begin to suspect a ghost of the rather solid type bent on driving her into a sale at well below value ...
Now I wonder if she has a cousin or some other relative who knows the house and is aggrieved it wasn't left to them?
Good building of the tension here.
Patrick
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Hi Barbara,
This ghost is certainly creative, I begin to suspect a ghost of the rather solid type bent on driving her into a sale at well below value ...
Now I wonder if she has a cousin or some other relative who knows the house and is aggrieved it wasn't left to them?
Good building of the tension here.
Patrick
Comment Written 26-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gungalo
Yes indeed you surely do love Savanah girl. Now, what is going on in this chapter? Is is a ghost she keeps seeing or just faulty wiring. Now she knows some background about Cash too.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Yes indeed you surely do love Savanah girl. Now, what is going on in this chapter? Is is a ghost she keeps seeing or just faulty wiring. Now she knows some background about Cash too.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Smile.
Comment from Sasha
The plot is developing quite nicely. Ghosts in the house, or bad wiring? I am enjoying this very much. I anxiously look forward to the next chapter.
Once again, I did not find anything that needs to be fixed or changed. I will pick up with the next chapter later today or tomorrow.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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The plot is developing quite nicely. Ghosts in the house, or bad wiring? I am enjoying this very much. I anxiously look forward to the next chapter.
Once again, I did not find anything that needs to be fixed or changed. I will pick up with the next chapter later today or tomorrow.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
