In My Dream
A dream I had involving The Doors lead singer80 total reviews
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Well written free verse with some rhymes which add interest. I could have done with a bit less of the blood and guts, but I have dreams just as bad~Debbie
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Well written free verse with some rhymes which add interest. I could have done with a bit less of the blood and guts, but I have dreams just as bad~Debbie
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you Debbie.
Comment from IndianaIrish
Hey Boz! What a great photograph of Morrison...I've been a fan forever. I think your poem is perfect for Jim and as a dream about him. I love the strageness of the dream...who was more strange than JM?
Smiles,
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Hey Boz! What a great photograph of Morrison...I've been a fan forever. I think your poem is perfect for Jim and as a dream about him. I love the strageness of the dream...who was more strange than JM?
Smiles,
Indy :>)
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you Irish. Charles Manson I think would be someone who would be weirder than Morrison. David Bowie too.
Comment from Chris Tee
This poem titled "In My Dream" is an absolutely excellent lyrical piece of poetry. It is just sad that you had to bring is the eating part at the end..
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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This poem titled "In My Dream" is an absolutely excellent lyrical piece of poetry. It is just sad that you had to bring is the eating part at the end..
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you Chris.
Comment from afrankjr
Though your technique and structure lack in certain areas a little, this is overall a great piece. The symbolic nature of the ring is what had the most impact on me. A symbol of his self-destruction that wasn't self-induced, perhaps? A symbol of the curse he bore, being objectified and enslaved by the skeevy reptiles masquerading as "fans", destined though to eat him alive at every opportunity? Questions abound, that's for sure...but that is the best kind of writing. Well done.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Though your technique and structure lack in certain areas a little, this is overall a great piece. The symbolic nature of the ring is what had the most impact on me. A symbol of his self-destruction that wasn't self-induced, perhaps? A symbol of the curse he bore, being objectified and enslaved by the skeevy reptiles masquerading as "fans", destined though to eat him alive at every opportunity? Questions abound, that's for sure...but that is the best kind of writing. Well done.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Bill Schott
Wow! Gets a little bizarre. This is a great poem alluding to the Lizard King. I still chuckle that teen girls want to meet Jim Morrison. That's immortality.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Wow! Gets a little bizarre. This is a great poem alluding to the Lizard King. I still chuckle that teen girls want to meet Jim Morrison. That's immortality.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you Bill.
Comment from Meta~Mark
this reminds me of this is the end by the doors ..Which must've poisoned me, The ring of the Lizard King...nice flow of the words and presentation..great job!
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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this reminds me of this is the end by the doors ..Which must've poisoned me, The ring of the Lizard King...nice flow of the words and presentation..great job!
Comment Written 05-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you Mark.
Comment from Bachus
LOL! What a fun dream... well, til the
end... love the Doors, have for ages.
Good thing it was just a dream!
Excellent, entertaining poem! Bachus
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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LOL! What a fun dream... well, til the
end... love the Doors, have for ages.
Good thing it was just a dream!
Excellent, entertaining poem! Bachus
Comment Written 05-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2012
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Thank you Bachus. Cool name by the way doesn't it have something to do with the god of wine.
Comment from Cindy Warren
What a bizarre dream. The result was a pretty great poem. Seems Jim Morrison wanted to feed you to his lizards. In dreams anything can happen.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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What a bizarre dream. The result was a pretty great poem. Seems Jim Morrison wanted to feed you to his lizards. In dreams anything can happen.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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Thank you Cindy.
Comment from Gungalo
Some dream, eh? It is well written and in free verse no less. Great portrayal of Morrison's ring and a scary ending for sure.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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Some dream, eh? It is well written and in free verse no less. Great portrayal of Morrison's ring and a scary ending for sure.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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Yeah it was pretty weird. Thank you gungalo.
Comment from Kingsland
I'm a very big fan of Jim Morrison. His lyrics, his poetry and his music. You pay tribute to him in this well written verse...
THE AMERICAN NIGHT
for leather accrues
The miracle of the streets
The scents & songs &
pollens of existence
Shiny blackness
so totally naked she was
Totally un-hung-up
We looked around
lights now on
To see our fellow travelers
Jim Morrison
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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I'm a very big fan of Jim Morrison. His lyrics, his poetry and his music. You pay tribute to him in this well written verse...
THE AMERICAN NIGHT
for leather accrues
The miracle of the streets
The scents & songs &
pollens of existence
Shiny blackness
so totally naked she was
Totally un-hung-up
We looked around
lights now on
To see our fellow travelers
Jim Morrison
Comment Written 05-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2012
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Thank you Kingsland.
