If The Jester Cried At Night
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Pictures Of You"A collection of favourite poems by mrgrunty.
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Comment from tulakoto
GREAT !!! A very nice piece of poetry written and pictured so well. Nice content and the flow was smooth. Meanwhile, pls. check the preposition " on " used in the 1st line of the 3rd stanza " Like a ship I'm adrift on the ocean " . I think it's better if you used the preposition " in ". More power.
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GREAT !!! A very nice piece of poetry written and pictured so well. Nice content and the flow was smooth. Meanwhile, pls. check the preposition " on " used in the 1st line of the 3rd stanza " Like a ship I'm adrift on the ocean " . I think it's better if you used the preposition " in ". More power.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2004
Comment from jammin john
A fiver all the way, mate. The next to the last stanza was an awesome read.
"I'd give all the gold of the oceans,
for the salty caress of your tears."
I'm jealous,,,great lines. Showing another side of you. A very good thing.
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A fiver all the way, mate. The next to the last stanza was an awesome read.
"I'd give all the gold of the oceans,
for the salty caress of your tears."
I'm jealous,,,great lines. Showing another side of you. A very good thing.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2004
Comment from Galahad
Hey, you know what, I liked it. So there. I don't know Valley (yet), but I am kinda curious about the meaning myself. Pretty good meter and beat. Very enjoyable.
-Galahad
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Hey, you know what, I liked it. So there. I don't know Valley (yet), but I am kinda curious about the meaning myself. Pretty good meter and beat. Very enjoyable.
-Galahad
Comment Written 06-Jul-2004
Comment from Waterbird
Since I am from Florida, I enjoy anything
that has to do with boats and the water.
I'd give all the gold of the oceans,
for the salty caress of your tears...really
like this line...great use of language and
metaphor. Also, I'm happy to see you
aren't a slave to a particular style of
writing. Versatility is a big plus in my book.
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Since I am from Florida, I enjoy anything
that has to do with boats and the water.
I'd give all the gold of the oceans,
for the salty caress of your tears...really
like this line...great use of language and
metaphor. Also, I'm happy to see you
aren't a slave to a particular style of
writing. Versatility is a big plus in my book.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2004
Comment from Notlob
Okay. All right. What the hell are you trying to do? Huh? Cause trouble here at Notlob's abode? Is that what you are all about? Why am I ranting? Because I happen to let Dottering Dottie, the love of my life read this . . . this poem. She turned to me after reading it and said, "He is good. I really do like him, he is so good," and the unspoken words hidden deep inside of her eyes were the thought, "Why can't YOU write like that?" The turmoil that resides inside Notlob's matrimonial world is all on your puny little shoulders. Actually, I agree with her, but damned if I'll admit it.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Okay. All right. What the hell are you trying to do? Huh? Cause trouble here at Notlob's abode? Is that what you are all about? Why am I ranting? Because I happen to let Dottering Dottie, the love of my life read this . . . this poem. She turned to me after reading it and said, "He is good. I really do like him, he is so good," and the unspoken words hidden deep inside of her eyes were the thought, "Why can't YOU write like that?" The turmoil that resides inside Notlob's matrimonial world is all on your puny little shoulders. Actually, I agree with her, but damned if I'll admit it.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2004
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2019
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Hi mate ! Not sure if you still walk the halls here but just wanted to say that you were always my most creative and enjoyed reviewer!
Comment from Gremlinsmom
Floor-staring others! I love that! What a great description and I got such good images from it. This is different from your usual but I liked it. And even after reading your author's notes and reading the poem a second time...I stil didn't notice repeated words. Very good, as always!
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Floor-staring others! I love that! What a great description and I got such good images from it. This is different from your usual but I liked it. And even after reading your author's notes and reading the poem a second time...I stil didn't notice repeated words. Very good, as always!
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2004
