Comment from visionary1234

Excellent

now THIS one I like - yeah! a simple cycle-of-life statement here that needsd no real explanation - nice imagery of rain sweeping in, bringing renewal, life goes on. :)S

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for truthful review

Comment from Caressa_08

Excellent

A continuous cycle, life & rain with what it can cause, with nature & its path...Oh, Rain, it will remain, causing death & blooms new life & this with hope...Picture is very good with rain clouds so heavily displayed.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for wonderful review

Comment from mountainwriter49

Excellent

Hello, Poet

I enjoyed your short poem tonight. The
message is superb. Line three is my favorite
because one must have hope in order survive.

I'm an old fashioned sort of guy and admire poetry
that isn't telegraphic. I think your short poem would
be more effective if the lines were grammatically connected.

Thanks for sharing
Ray

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for excellent review

Comment from muezza56

Excellent

another interesting and unusual and original style of writing, with multiple listings of the 5-7-5 stylealthough it does seem unfair that this writer is paying his way to the top of the listings, the irony of which is his examination of human nature and it's various faults

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for nice professional review

Comment from cheyennewy

Excellent

Hi Alcreaor,

You have penned a fine 5/7/5 poem and one I enjoyed reading more than once. There is so much truth in your expressive words. I see you are stretching your poetic wings....good for you. Well done, chey

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for nice review

Comment from GWinterwin

Excellent

Good words with a very good picture, tell a good story about the coming of rain. The blooming of new life and death swept away. Open life continues on after the presence of life-giving rain. Good writing.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for good review

Comment from vkmack

Excellent

Very nice! I really like the style and format. The words are just beautifully simple. Rain sings, life blooms, death sweeps--so much action in so few words. Just lovely.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for good review

Comment from rama devi

Good

This is my favorite of all your poems. I has good brevity, tone and pretty good pacing. It is the most lucid and easy to absorb. It has a prayerful overtone. One stumbling block is the linking of all three lines when they are distinct sentences.

SPAG suggestions:

O rain, come singing.
Bloom new lives, endow death sweep.
In hope, life goes on


I like your author's notes...phrases of creation. Deeply thoughtful.

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks

Comment from Gypsy Starchild

Excellent

This is a REALLY good 5-7-5... it reads beautifully as a stand alone and you thought-provoking footnotes lend further interest. :)

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for good review

Comment from Dave Russell

Excellent

With this piece I feel comfortable giving a five star...good structure, catchy and poetic lines. The meaning was clear and that is very refreshing.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for good review