A Baby Wants Joy
A 3 line poem, when a baby prays for joy; read Author Notes107 total reviews
Comment from Puzzle
I had to read this like 6 times. I wasn't understanding it. Then I read the authors notes which explain it is a silly poem. And then it all made sense. I guess this is a good silly poem. It made me think I was going nuts. Lol.
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I had to read this like 6 times. I wasn't understanding it. Then I read the authors notes which explain it is a silly poem. And then it all made sense. I guess this is a good silly poem. It made me think I was going nuts. Lol.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a cute poem that is easy to read and understand. That's all babies really want anyway. They find contentment with their milk, baths, clean clothes, clean diapers, being close to parents, and being held, sung to and talked to. That's their joy in life.
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This is a cute poem that is easy to read and understand. That's all babies really want anyway. They find contentment with their milk, baths, clean clothes, clean diapers, being close to parents, and being held, sung to and talked to. That's their joy in life.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
Comment from Ross E Silke
I really like this. There is just one typo you have incresing instead of 'increasing' in age (missing the 'a') in line two--a noticeable and easy to fix error, but I overlooked it in my rating as I think the tender love and care for the child wrapped up in your words along with the flow and sentiment is captured well to create an exceptional presentation with one minor typo--please fix. I really like the idea you painted with words though and it stands out. Great photo you selected to accompany.
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I really like this. There is just one typo you have incresing instead of 'increasing' in age (missing the 'a') in line two--a noticeable and easy to fix error, but I overlooked it in my rating as I think the tender love and care for the child wrapped up in your words along with the flow and sentiment is captured well to create an exceptional presentation with one minor typo--please fix. I really like the idea you painted with words though and it stands out. Great photo you selected to accompany.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
Comment from TPAC
Silly but a lot of depth conveyed in its given thought conveyance, touching my conscious making me to consider probabilities. I do offer one suggestion on the word "increses" to increases, rendered opinion stated in my viewpoint.
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Silly but a lot of depth conveyed in its given thought conveyance, touching my conscious making me to consider probabilities. I do offer one suggestion on the word "increses" to increases, rendered opinion stated in my viewpoint.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
Comment from Louise Michelle
This really got me thinking. I'm wondering if it's been recorded that babies can cry in the womb. I'll have to Google that. Once upon a time babies got wacked upon birth to get them crying. Doctors did a lot of stupid things back then. They still do. A very nicely written and provocative poem. Hugs, Lou
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This really got me thinking. I'm wondering if it's been recorded that babies can cry in the womb. I'll have to Google that. Once upon a time babies got wacked upon birth to get them crying. Doctors did a lot of stupid things back then. They still do. A very nicely written and provocative poem. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
A Baby Wants Joy
by Alcreator Litt Dear
Hello my friend
Interesting poem about growing up. Babies do feel safe in the womb and life is full of years, some happy and others sad. That's life.
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A Baby Wants Joy
by Alcreator Litt Dear
Hello my friend
Interesting poem about growing up. Babies do feel safe in the womb and life is full of years, some happy and others sad. That's life.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
Comment from forestport12
So much to be said about the comfort and peace in the womb. So many metaphors. I like how you draw that contrast and comparison with the womb and growing pains of life that often come with a rebellious attitude.
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So much to be said about the comfort and peace in the womb. So many metaphors. I like how you draw that contrast and comparison with the womb and growing pains of life that often come with a rebellious attitude.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
Comment from Rmocruz
Increses (increases) check to see if this a type-o.
I enjoyed reading your pleasant, spiritual three-line poem, as well as the excellent photo-art selection.
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Increses (increases) check to see if this a type-o.
I enjoyed reading your pleasant, spiritual three-line poem, as well as the excellent photo-art selection.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
Comment from Bluesatinbutterfly
I feel I may have to ponder a while on this poem, which is a good thing, if something makes me think it also makes me curious to know more, also a good thing, thank you.
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I feel I may have to ponder a while on this poem, which is a good thing, if something makes me think it also makes me curious to know more, also a good thing, thank you.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This is good. You are articulating the chronology and evolution of our offspring. You certainly have it right. Who wouldn't cry after coming out of a safe place like the womb where they constantly feed on our parts.
LOL. Great picture.
NB: fourth line (increses s/b increases) you slipped.
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This is good. You are articulating the chronology and evolution of our offspring. You certainly have it right. Who wouldn't cry after coming out of a safe place like the womb where they constantly feed on our parts.
LOL. Great picture.
NB: fourth line (increses s/b increases) you slipped.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2020
