My Book of Poems 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "And so I stay"a collection of my poetry
59 total reviews
Comment from Commando
Commendably written, Patty. A whole lot said in 12-words. And it appears that
you've found; "One of the many you excel in!" Awesome Artwork by CammyCards.
I'm outta 6's, Sweetheart!
Respectfully,
Bill
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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Commendably written, Patty. A whole lot said in 12-words. And it appears that
you've found; "One of the many you excel in!" Awesome Artwork by CammyCards.
I'm outta 6's, Sweetheart!
Respectfully,
Bill
Comment Written 04-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Bill. I'll take a virtual 6 any day. I'm glad you enjoyed this poetic form. I appreciate your kind words.
~patty~
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Your welcome, Beautiful. And I appreciate; "YOU."
Comment from royowen
My wife suffered with this condition for sometime, a while ago now, as a tribute to her determination, she overcame it by sheer will power, and took ruler ship of it, rather than allowing it to rule her. She still gets mild attacks, but overcomes it. Well done, excellent work, keep going experimenting with the manifold forms, I'm sure you'll win,blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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My wife suffered with this condition for sometime, a while ago now, as a tribute to her determination, she overcame it by sheer will power, and took ruler ship of it, rather than allowing it to rule her. She still gets mild attacks, but overcomes it. Well done, excellent work, keep going experimenting with the manifold forms, I'm sure you'll win,blessings, Roy
Comment Written 04-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate you sharing your wife's story with me. Good for her that she was able to overcome this debilitating disease. I appreciate your words of encouragement.
~patty~
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Most welcome Patty
Comment from Janet Foor
My sister-in-law is an agoraphobic so I am familiar with your dilemma. Sadly, she misses so much due to her fears.
Very nice QUINZAINE poem. I think you have created vivid imagery in just a few lines.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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My sister-in-law is an agoraphobic so I am familiar with your dilemma. Sadly, she misses so much due to her fears.
Very nice QUINZAINE poem. I think you have created vivid imagery in just a few lines.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 04-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and encouragement. I hope your sister-in-law can find some relief.
~patty~
Comment from MelB
Excellent syllable count and subject to write about. The outside world is a scary place, but I also know this is a real fear.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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Excellent syllable count and subject to write about. The outside world is a scary place, but I also know this is a real fear.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
~patty~
Comment from Joan E.
Hello, again. I was delighted to notice another example of your stretching your wings in new forms. Thank you for including the description of the Quinzaine, which I wasn't clear about until now. You vividly took on the persona of an agoraphobic person in your short poem and effectively added their accoutrements in the picture you selected. Well done! -Joan
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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Hello, again. I was delighted to notice another example of your stretching your wings in new forms. Thank you for including the description of the Quinzaine, which I wasn't clear about until now. You vividly took on the persona of an agoraphobic person in your short poem and effectively added their accoutrements in the picture you selected. Well done! -Joan
Comment Written 04-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much for continuing to read and review. I'm going to put the descriptions on all of my poetic forms to help the reviewers critique me. I'm so thankful for your encouragement - the artwork took a great deal of time to find. I appreciate your kind words,
~patty~
Comment from emptypage
Ahhhh.... you've come across an agoraphobic here. Interesting.
Well, I love the poem. Short, concise. The point is well made. When I think of all the words I could shove into cyberspace about my fear of being out... well, it wouldn't be a poem.
Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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Ahhhh.... you've come across an agoraphobic here. Interesting.
Well, I love the poem. Short, concise. The point is well made. When I think of all the words I could shove into cyberspace about my fear of being out... well, it wouldn't be a poem.
Very nicely done.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. As a fellow agoraphobic, I can feel your pain. I'm glad I found a short poetic form to pose the question. I felt safe exposing myself just a little bit.
~patty~
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written QUINZAINE poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery! I love the picture you used! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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This is a very well written QUINZAINE poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery! I love the picture you used! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 04-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments very much. Your encouragement is well accepted.
~patty~
Comment from Dean Kuch
This read like a perfect Quinzaine poem to me, Patty.
Your syllable counts are correct, and the topic you've chosen, agoraphobia, is a good one.
It's not unusual to worry sometimes. But when your fears keep you from getting out into the world, and you avoid places because you think you'll feel trapped and not be able to get help, you may have agoraphobia.
With agoraphobia, you might worry everywhere you go.
Public transportation (buses, trains, ships, or planes), large, open spaces (parking lots, bridges) or closed-in spaces (stores, movie theaters)
Crowds or standing in line, or just being outside your home alone
You may be willing to go just a handful of places. This cuts down on the chances of panic. You may even dread leaving your house.
Terrible.
Your poem's not terrible, Patty, but the situation (condition) it speaks of would be.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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This read like a perfect Quinzaine poem to me, Patty.
Your syllable counts are correct, and the topic you've chosen, agoraphobia, is a good one.
It's not unusual to worry sometimes. But when your fears keep you from getting out into the world, and you avoid places because you think you'll feel trapped and not be able to get help, you may have agoraphobia.
With agoraphobia, you might worry everywhere you go.
Public transportation (buses, trains, ships, or planes), large, open spaces (parking lots, bridges) or closed-in spaces (stores, movie theaters)
Crowds or standing in line, or just being outside your home alone
You may be willing to go just a handful of places. This cuts down on the chances of panic. You may even dread leaving your house.
Terrible.
Your poem's not terrible, Patty, but the situation (condition) it speaks of would be.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I suffer from a mild case of agoraphobia. Believe or not, its been worse since last election day! I do get out when I can, and in the summer, I'm looking forward to using the pool. I appreciate your kind words. Knowing that there are people out there that care makes the world look less scary,
~patty~
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Hey, don't mention it, Patty. You're very welcome.
Comment from Poetic Friend
Patty, this is quite profound in it brevity. There may be more people who are agoraphobic than we realize, especially since there is so much violence in our society. Your poem conveys the fears of the agoraphobic very well.
Thank you for covering this topic in a poem.
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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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Patty, this is quite profound in it brevity. There may be more people who are agoraphobic than we realize, especially since there is so much violence in our society. Your poem conveys the fears of the agoraphobic very well.
Thank you for covering this topic in a poem.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
~patty~
