My Favorite Tree
Children's Poetry Contest (163 words)81 total reviews
Comment from Robert Louis Fox
This poem is a nice depiction of the tree climbing experience to share with a child. The elements are common creatures one might encounter in a tree climbing adventure. You poem story has a full arc climbing up and back down to 'normal' life. Keep up the good work! Best regards, BobFox
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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This poem is a nice depiction of the tree climbing experience to share with a child. The elements are common creatures one might encounter in a tree climbing adventure. You poem story has a full arc climbing up and back down to 'normal' life. Keep up the good work! Best regards, BobFox
Comment Written 30-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Thank you Bob for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from kiwisteveh
Janet, I enjoyed your rather simple tale of a day spent in a favourite tree. Simple is good in this case since we are looking for a poem suitable for young children.
The poem flows smoothly and the rhyme is strong, both good points for this type of poem. The series of natural events you describe contribute movement, sound and even humour. Well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Janet, I enjoyed your rather simple tale of a day spent in a favourite tree. Simple is good in this case since we are looking for a poem suitable for young children.
The poem flows smoothly and the rhyme is strong, both good points for this type of poem. The series of natural events you describe contribute movement, sound and even humour. Well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
Comment Written 30-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Thank you Steve for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
How lovely. I hope you win the competition because I thought this poem was so much fun. Children would love it I'm sure. When I was a child climbing a tree was my favourite pursuit, Giddy
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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How lovely. I hope you win the competition because I thought this poem was so much fun. Children would love it I'm sure. When I was a child climbing a tree was my favourite pursuit, Giddy
Comment Written 30-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Thank you Giddy for your most encouraging review and good wishes.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from lightink
You capture a child's perspective so well in this piece! The delight and fear! I loved the parade of different creatures! I have one suggestion:
Probably the punctuation of this line would be a bit better this way:
Where I spotted an ant. Oh my! No! There were three!
It took my a while to grasp the meaning with the present punctuation!
Other than that, it's a lovely poem!
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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You capture a child's perspective so well in this piece! The delight and fear! I loved the parade of different creatures! I have one suggestion:
Probably the punctuation of this line would be a bit better this way:
Where I spotted an ant. Oh my! No! There were three!
It took my a while to grasp the meaning with the present punctuation!
Other than that, it's a lovely poem!
Comment Written 30-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Thank you for your encouraging review. I will go back and look at the punctuation. I think you are right, and exclamation point or two might make it clearer. Thank you again.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your poem for children. I liked the rhyme. The picture is perfect. Your lines flow smoothly.
[suggestion and only that---file 13 trash if you wish]
He was looking around and surprised to see me.
He was looking around and [so] surprised to see me.
Good job and best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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I enjoyed your poem for children. I liked the rhyme. The picture is perfect. Your lines flow smoothly.
[suggestion and only that---file 13 trash if you wish]
He was looking around and surprised to see me.
He was looking around and [so] surprised to see me.
Good job and best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I will look at the line and see if it can keep with the da, da, DUM meter. Thanks again.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from happykat4
My grandchildren wanted to know if they could climb our tree in the spring and see if the squirrels would come up there too. They enjoyed the poem. I did tell them our tree was to big and to high to climb on. They t going to ask their parents if they could climb in the trees at their house. (Those are not bid enough) My grandchildren are 3,5,7. Best of luck in the contest. (They also liked the squirrel picture.) Thanks for sharing. Kat
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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My grandchildren wanted to know if they could climb our tree in the spring and see if the squirrels would come up there too. They enjoyed the poem. I did tell them our tree was to big and to high to climb on. They t going to ask their parents if they could climb in the trees at their house. (Those are not bid enough) My grandchildren are 3,5,7. Best of luck in the contest. (They also liked the squirrel picture.) Thanks for sharing. Kat
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Thank you Kat for your encouraging review. Yes, 3, 5 and 7 are definitely too small for a big tree. We had all sizes in our yard, so my children did a natural progression.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from AnnaLinda
Jmf4119,
Well, you are truly a talented poet and I really enjoyed reading your children's poem and entry. Wow! The life of a squirrel in perfect flow and rhyme and so
divine.
Loved these lines: "When I spied a red cardinal looking perplexed.
An old woodpecker noisily pecked on my tree
He was looking around and surprised to see me."
This is a wonderful poem for children. It's lively and interesting and
it has plenty of great imagery and I loved all the birds you including
in your poem as well.
Perfect!
Linda
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Jmf4119,
Well, you are truly a talented poet and I really enjoyed reading your children's poem and entry. Wow! The life of a squirrel in perfect flow and rhyme and so
divine.
Loved these lines: "When I spied a red cardinal looking perplexed.
An old woodpecker noisily pecked on my tree
He was looking around and surprised to see me."
This is a wonderful poem for children. It's lively and interesting and
it has plenty of great imagery and I loved all the birds you including
in your poem as well.
Perfect!
Linda
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Thank you Linda for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I am so pleased that you liked it.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hahaha, nicely done, Janet. Very nice! This was a really cute, and well rhymed poem, featuring many fowl and furry forest friends.
You may want to add a comma in the following line where indicated, just for clarities sake:
I climbed this way and that(,) up my favorite tree..."
By the way, Blue Jays are really mean! We've got a HUGE male in our back yard who runs off all the smaller birds from our feeder. I think he feel HE owns the thing, lol.
Great work with this! Kids'll love it.
~Dean ;)
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Hahaha, nicely done, Janet. Very nice! This was a really cute, and well rhymed poem, featuring many fowl and furry forest friends.
You may want to add a comma in the following line where indicated, just for clarities sake:
I climbed this way and that(,) up my favorite tree..."
By the way, Blue Jays are really mean! We've got a HUGE male in our back yard who runs off all the smaller birds from our feeder. I think he feel HE owns the thing, lol.
Great work with this! Kids'll love it.
~Dean ;)
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Thank you Dean for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I did add the (,) to that first line. Thank you. And, you are right, Blue Jays are mean and not at all timid. One even swooped down and pecked at out cat. I wish I had had a video. Really scared the cat. LOL
Blessings
Janet
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Yep, they're the foul, fowl bullies of the avian community, for sure, Janet!
You are more than welcome.
~Dean :)
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Yep, they're the foul, fowl bullies of the avian community, for sure, Janet!
You are more than welcome.
~Dean :)
Comment from Judvan2
Great poem for kids. The beat, rhyme and imagery is perfect for them, and me. I thought is was fun, and have had days in the woods just like that as a child. No expectations, just day dreaming through the day. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Great poem for kids. The beat, rhyme and imagery is perfect for them, and me. I thought is was fun, and have had days in the woods just like that as a child. No expectations, just day dreaming through the day. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Thank you for your encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from c_lucas
Tree climbing is all part of growing up. Such is one of life's little pleasures. This is very well written with very good imagery. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Tree climbing is all part of growing up. Such is one of life's little pleasures. This is very well written with very good imagery. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2016
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
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You're welcome, Janet. Charlie
