Windows To The Past
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Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
"The need is always nagging there; it's torture on life's path. A gentle soul who lost control and bought addictions wrath." - This ending couplet is superb as it speaks volumes about addiction without judgment, simply facts. This is a wonderful piece and I think you should go back to writing your western as you certainly have a flair for this style.
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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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"The need is always nagging there; it's torture on life's path. A gentle soul who lost control and bought addictions wrath." - This ending couplet is superb as it speaks volumes about addiction without judgment, simply facts. This is a wonderful piece and I think you should go back to writing your western as you certainly have a flair for this style.
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Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Monica! Thank you so much for the review and generous stars. :<) Nancy
Comment from Dawny53
Excellent storytelling! I've got a pretty good idea of the author.. I think I'd know this talent anywhere! I thought you came off rhythm a bit in the third stanza.. but rereading it again I find it works well. You did an awesome job describing Louie and his addiction.. just an all in all fine read!
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Excellent storytelling! I've got a pretty good idea of the author.. I think I'd know this talent anywhere! I thought you came off rhythm a bit in the third stanza.. but rereading it again I find it works well. You did an awesome job describing Louie and his addiction.. just an all in all fine read!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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LOL Dawny! Thank you so much for the review and generous six stars. I appreciate it! :<) Nancy
Comment from Pyrrho
Except for the forced rhyme, jail/pail, this is superbly written and shows an artful use of meter, and a difficult one at that. Well done you.
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Except for the forced rhyme, jail/pail, this is superbly written and shows an artful use of meter, and a difficult one at that. Well done you.
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Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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That rhyme was planned not forced. LOL Thank you for the review!
:<) Nancy
