Twelve Little Grains of Sparkly Sand
counting rhyme in 8/6/8/6 meter119 total reviews
Comment from Michaelk
I loved it. The best part was the fact that their fates were so varied. Not every one was a happy ending nor was each one sad. My favorite was number eight, where the grain of sand got to sit on a castle and see the world from higher than one inch off the ground for the first time. I never thought about the life of a grain of sand before. This was quite a different perspective.
Great poem, great rhyme and rhythm. Wonderfully vivid descriptions.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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I loved it. The best part was the fact that their fates were so varied. Not every one was a happy ending nor was each one sad. My favorite was number eight, where the grain of sand got to sit on a castle and see the world from higher than one inch off the ground for the first time. I never thought about the life of a grain of sand before. This was quite a different perspective.
Great poem, great rhyme and rhythm. Wonderfully vivid descriptions.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Michael, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from GracieAnn
Brooke, your countdown is fun and engaging. It speaks of how loneliness is resolve if we are patient and open to going to a new place. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Brooke, your countdown is fun and engaging. It speaks of how loneliness is resolve if we are patient and open to going to a new place. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, GracieAnn :-) Brooke
Comment from krys123
Brooke,
Tactful alliteration's("sparkly sands"2x's)("sands so small")("beach balls bounce")("burying a boy"), resourceful inventive and creative imagination, excellent descriptive and expressive imagery(" Two grains were worried that their lives were getting kind of drab, till one walked off with no goodbyes, his new best friend, a crab.") Superb rhyming (neither forced nor labored), outstanding picture that represents the poem and exceptional rhythm that smoothly flows throughout the writing. These are some of the traits and qualities that I found within your writing.
An excellent piece of poetry that helps with the mathematical learning of a child's addition. Very well formulated and an excellent composition.
Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always Brooke.
Alex
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Brooke,
Tactful alliteration's("sparkly sands"2x's)("sands so small")("beach balls bounce")("burying a boy"), resourceful inventive and creative imagination, excellent descriptive and expressive imagery(" Two grains were worried that their lives were getting kind of drab, till one walked off with no goodbyes, his new best friend, a crab.") Superb rhyming (neither forced nor labored), outstanding picture that represents the poem and exceptional rhythm that smoothly flows throughout the writing. These are some of the traits and qualities that I found within your writing.
An excellent piece of poetry that helps with the mathematical learning of a child's addition. Very well formulated and an excellent composition.
Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always Brooke.
Alex
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Alex, thank you so much :-) I always appreciate your thoughtful reading of my poems. Brooke
Comment from bhogg
A very pleasant, feel good poem. I really like the counting aspect of the post which really zipped me right through. Of course always enjoy a chance to share Sawyer! Bill
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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A very pleasant, feel good poem. I really like the counting aspect of the post which really zipped me right through. Of course always enjoy a chance to share Sawyer! Bill
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Bill, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Eternal Muse
Brooke, this was such a beautuful verse. These grains of sand become alnost human. I felt so bad for the last one that was left all alone, and rejoiced when a wave brought him new friends.
Lovely picture of Sawyer having a ball with his sand castle.
One of my favorite verses is about four grains that renained below "where toes trod on their heads." lol.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Brooke, this was such a beautuful verse. These grains of sand become alnost human. I felt so bad for the last one that was left all alone, and rejoiced when a wave brought him new friends.
Lovely picture of Sawyer having a ball with his sand castle.
One of my favorite verses is about four grains that renained below "where toes trod on their heads." lol.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Yelena, thank you, my friend :-) I like the toes verse too LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from Glasstruth
In some ways this poem shows the passage of time. It's constant as the waves and a child's scoop is. Very entertaining. Nice rhyming. Was wondering how the last grain would go. I should've known. There's never just one wave. Superb! Les
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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In some ways this poem shows the passage of time. It's constant as the waves and a child's scoop is. Very entertaining. Nice rhyming. Was wondering how the last grain would go. I should've known. There's never just one wave. Superb! Les
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Les, thank you so very much, my generous friend :-) Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
I liked you started this counter with twelve, Brooke, because it gave me two more wonderful verses to read and enjoy. You give such great exits for each grain of sand, and I love the ending when he gets a wavedul of new friends.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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I liked you started this counter with twelve, Brooke, because it gave me two more wonderful verses to read and enjoy. You give such great exits for each grain of sand, and I love the ending when he gets a wavedul of new friends.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Karyn, I originally posted it late last night with Ten but then two more, the beach balls and the gull, came to me, so this morning I changed it to twelve LOL :-) Thanks so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Genya
Just love your counting songs. Have read quite a few of them, but this one really stood out for me. Just loved this. 10 little grains of sand. All but one disappeared...then a lapping wave swept new grains toward his home. Superb. Children will love this. Genya
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Just love your counting songs. Have read quite a few of them, but this one really stood out for me. Just loved this. 10 little grains of sand. All but one disappeared...then a lapping wave swept new grains toward his home. Superb. Children will love this. Genya
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Genya, thank you so much for your generous sixth star and thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
Comment from judiverse
So charming. You are teaching kids to count. These are memorable stories of what happens to each grain of sand. Each has a different and interesting history. Clever idea of the one grain of sand becoming best friends with a crab. Excellent humor, and the rhyme and flow are irresistible. Great for reading aloud. judi
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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So charming. You are teaching kids to count. These are memorable stories of what happens to each grain of sand. Each has a different and interesting history. Clever idea of the one grain of sand becoming best friends with a crab. Excellent humor, and the rhyme and flow are irresistible. Great for reading aloud. judi
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Judi, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Gert sherwood
Brooke,
what a precious poem about 12 grains of sparkling sand and how delightful a gently lapping wave
swept new grains toward his the last grain o sand.
Gert
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Brooke,
what a precious poem about 12 grains of sparkling sand and how delightful a gently lapping wave
swept new grains toward his the last grain o sand.
Gert
Comment Written 23-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2014
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Gert, thank you so much :-) Brooke
