White the World
a poem in rhyming couplets139 total reviews
Comment from Goodauthor
A lovely write, as are they all. They flow is like a river runs smoothly to the crescendo of the poem. I enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2014
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A lovely write, as are they all. They flow is like a river runs smoothly to the crescendo of the poem. I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2014
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Goodauthor, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You're welcome.
Comment from me_tudor
Another delightful poem, although I don't want to think about snow. It's already colder than it normally is here in my part of the world.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2014
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Another delightful poem, although I don't want to think about snow. It's already colder than it normally is here in my part of the world.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2014
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me_tudor, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from misscookie
Another wonderful poem from a friend
who God's has been to write one better than the last.
Each time I read one of your poems it pots a smile on my face.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2014
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Another wonderful poem from a friend
who God's has been to write one better than the last.
Each time I read one of your poems it pots a smile on my face.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2014
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Miss Cookie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I like your winter poem. I like the personification of winter. The picture is perfect. No changes. I like the repeated line "Where Winter's waved her [magic] wand." Good job and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2014
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I like your winter poem. I like the personification of winter. The picture is perfect. No changes. I like the repeated line "Where Winter's waved her [magic] wand." Good job and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2014
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jannypan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Gert sherwood
Brooke How I love your clever rhymes of how the snow twirls and swirls.
When the winter's snow Queen waves her wand
Very magical
Gert
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2014
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Brooke How I love your clever rhymes of how the snow twirls and swirls.
When the winter's snow Queen waves her wand
Very magical
Gert
Comment Written 15-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2014
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Gert, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
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smiles
Gert
Comment from playinaround
This is a true tongue twister, Brook. It paint a beautiful and mystical picture of winter. I really love the rhythm and the flow. Outstanding once again!
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This is a true tongue twister, Brook. It paint a beautiful and mystical picture of winter. I really love the rhythm and the flow. Outstanding once again!
Comment Written 15-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2014
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playinaround, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Dawn Munro
Uh oh, NOoooo! (LOL) Easy for some folks to say (who don't live in c-c-c-old places). *grin* Nah - I'm kiddin'. Your poem reminds me just how pretty Winter really is. :) (But Christmas eve is soon enough, OKAY?)
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2014
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Uh oh, NOoooo! (LOL) Easy for some folks to say (who don't live in c-c-c-old places). *grin* Nah - I'm kiddin'. Your poem reminds me just how pretty Winter really is. :) (But Christmas eve is soon enough, OKAY?)
Comment Written 15-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2014
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Dawn, thank you so much :-) Yep, it's pretty, but I detest it. I'm so ready to live some place where I never have to see snow in person again. LOL - I just write about its being pretty to try to convince myself that I'm not totally miserable :-) Brooke
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Hahahahaha! I hear THAT! :0)
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If you happen to know a guy who lives in the tropics or the desert who is looking for a wife, put in a good word :-)
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Hahahaha - actually, I do know more than one...:)
Comment from nomi338
I am so sure that the beautiful pearls bestowed upon the world where Winter's wand did whirl. May be a beautiful sight to behold, but they can never compare with the glitter and the glare of Southern California's gold. LOL. Sorry, You inspired me to make that comparison.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2014
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I am so sure that the beautiful pearls bestowed upon the world where Winter's wand did whirl. May be a beautiful sight to behold, but they can never compare with the glitter and the glare of Southern California's gold. LOL. Sorry, You inspired me to make that comparison.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2014
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Thank you, nomi, for the laugh and the review - my daughter, who lives in Encino, teases me about her superior sunny weather all the damned time :-) Brooke
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hi there Brooke. I don't know how the weather back there is doing, but your poem pretty well described here in Utah where I live. We are at 6000 feet and while the valley got an inch, we piled up 13"...This is a delightful poem, and the meter and rhyme are spot on
Bear
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2014
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Hi there Brooke. I don't know how the weather back there is doing, but your poem pretty well described here in Utah where I live. We are at 6000 feet and while the valley got an inch, we piled up 13"...This is a delightful poem, and the meter and rhyme are spot on
Bear
Comment Written 15-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2014
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Bear, thank you so much, my generous friend. It's always great to hear from you. We only got a coating, enough to have to scrape my windshield :-) Brooke
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Brooke
This one of your very best. I love it! You bring winter magic close to the heart. Because really, winter isn't as bad as we like to believe it is.
This is a great tongue-twister, fun to read aloud, with perfect meter, terrific rhymes, and nice alliteration.
I especially like these examples of alliteration,
"soft the sound as snow is swirling" ...very nice!
"Where the Winter's waved her wand" ... good imagery!
The repetition of "where the Winter's waved her wand" is effective.
Your poem ties itself up in a colourful bow!
I especially love all these rhymes,
"pearling/swirling/whirling/twirling"
As we grumble about the snow, you have winter wearing a string of pearls! That's what I call genius.
"White the world with glittered pearling"
Good personification of Winter,
"where Winter's waved her magic wand."
This is perfect for the coming blasts. I'll try to remember it when I'm outside shovelling in January!
Nicely penned! I'm so glad they allowed me to use another of my six stars.
hugs
Kimbob............thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2014
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Hi Brooke
This one of your very best. I love it! You bring winter magic close to the heart. Because really, winter isn't as bad as we like to believe it is.
This is a great tongue-twister, fun to read aloud, with perfect meter, terrific rhymes, and nice alliteration.
I especially like these examples of alliteration,
"soft the sound as snow is swirling" ...very nice!
"Where the Winter's waved her wand" ... good imagery!
The repetition of "where the Winter's waved her wand" is effective.
Your poem ties itself up in a colourful bow!
I especially love all these rhymes,
"pearling/swirling/whirling/twirling"
As we grumble about the snow, you have winter wearing a string of pearls! That's what I call genius.
"White the world with glittered pearling"
Good personification of Winter,
"where Winter's waved her magic wand."
This is perfect for the coming blasts. I'll try to remember it when I'm outside shovelling in January!
Nicely penned! I'm so glad they allowed me to use another of my six stars.
hugs
Kimbob............thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 15-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2014
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Kimbob, thanks so much - I detest snow - it's dangerous, it's inconvenient, it's cold, it's accompanied by power outages and being stuck in my apartment - but I try to remind myself it's pretty LOL And I do love the muffled sounds. All that said, the first man who offers to sweep me away to a tropical paradise, I'm his! LOL :-) Brooke
