Comment from Tomes Johnston

Excellent

This is yet another interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of work. It is strange that as Christians we still fear and celebrate pagan gods and demons.

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014

Thanks so much, Tomes - I don't believe in any of the silly things I write about at Halloween :-) Brooke

reply by Tomes Johnston on 09-Oct-2014

I didn't think you did. Take care.

Comment from daeneam

Excellent

So sorry for that lovable boy. Children are really emotional especially when they got hurt. My youngest cried when I saw her bruises and asked her where she get it. I just have to kiss it to calm her down and make her feel good.

You are so amazing, Brooke. You never run out of inspiration from dear Sawyer. c', mae

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014

Thanks so much, Mae. The great thing about a child's boo boo is that there are screams for one minute, and then it's time to get over it and get back to playing :-) Brooke

Comment from Donya Quijote

Excellent

Very interesting structure, creative. You know, I know this is full of Halloween frights, but the poem reminded so much of old Marley's visit to Scrooge. Oh, the things that drift through the cobwebs of exhausted mind. Do forgive me. A enjoyable read this night and it looks to me that Sawyer is quite the artist. Always a pleasure...

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014

Thanks so much, Donya. Sawyer isn't two and a half yet - he's advanced but not that advanced. LOL The drawing was made by Nora, who is two months short of turning six :-) Brooke

Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Excellent

This is filled with scary, concrete allusions to Halloween. It sounds like an old-fashioned haunted house. Sawyer probably had no idea his little accident would inspire such ghoulish images. (Great drawing by his friend, little Nora.) Love, Jeanie

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014

Jeanie, thank you :-) Poor little Sawyer, having his baby time cries memorialized for all to see. LOL :-) Brooke

Comment from royowen

Excellent

What a lovely poem, with lots of wonderful alliteration, Dean Kuch, copies you in a lot of his poems, Brooke. Written in great abcb rhyming, sounds great read out loud, a very high quality work indeed, I love it, well done, feeling a little jet lagged, a total of twenty eight hours of air travel, but arrived safely, blessings Roy.

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014

Roy, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Smoothiecool

Excellent

great use of words to allow the reader to see and feel the Halloween theme and how some portray it

good visual

good alliteration through verses

good enjambment to allow flow

good "A" "E" assonance through out

good rhythm

cheers Smoothiecool

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014

Smoothiecool, thank you so much :-) Brooke

reply by Smoothiecool on 09-Oct-2014

always welcome
but what can I say on such a great poet..SC >.Faye

Comment from sgalletti

Excellent

You definitely bring out the ghoulish spirit in this well written little ditty that flows so well. Do you get to go trick or treating with Sawyer this year? Can't wait to see how he dresses up. Loved the sing song meter throughout. Sue

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014

Thank you, Sue :-) Nope, I don't get to visit until early December :-) Brooke

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

Love this word useage with the
Torrents of tears,
scatters of screams, etc.
The bright red drawing goes really well with this Halloween inspired poem Brooke. I enjoyed, gave me a chuckle.

valda.

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014

Valda, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke

Comment from angelface2

Excellent

Why was I wondering where you were going with this? With Halloween being so close I should have known. All those clangs and screams. Haha. Nice one, Brooke. I hope Sawyer didn't hurt himself! Miss Sally

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2014

Thanks so much, Miss Sally - just the kind of hurt that merits one minute of screaming before it's time to play again. Just long enough to make Nora feel guilty. LOL :-) Brooke

Comment from Leigh Ann

Exceptional

Brooke, this could be the voice over for a commercial. Great form and alliteration, sis. Flows smoothly, and ends just right. You're my second 6 star rating this week. :)

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2014

Thank you so much, Leigh Ann, for your encouraging comments and generous sixth star :-) Brooke