Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

solid use of abcb rhyming
effective use of listing/repetition
excellent use of enjambment
wonderful illustrative examples
great consonance in moonbeams on a balmy
this is a wonderful love poem, my friend :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014

Thanks, Brooke

The diet must be kicking in - I was awfully tempted towards 'I love you more than carrot cake.'

Steve

reply by adewpearl on 04-Oct-2014

I must admit, I have a very very short list of people I love more than carrot cake :-) and yes, on certain days, that cake might squeak them out ;-)

reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014

:O)

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

Shakespeare set the bar quite high with 'Shall I compare thee to a summer's day'! Your list of comparisons is pretty good though! I particularly like the finish. Even the eternal rolling in of the tides cannot swamp your love. Bravo! Rhyme and rhythm faultless as usual. The extra syllables add vigour to the wilder analogies of the second stanza.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014

I'm blushing a little. Another reviewer mentioned 'Shall I count the ways....'

Thanks for the expert reading and review.

Steve

Comment from tdragonfly

Excellent

Someone is lucky to have you in their life. What a tribute to your love. Easy read with a good rhythm. Nice selection of photo to go with the poem.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014

Thank you.

I have read this to my wife and she did approve and even asked for a repeat performance, so something works!

Steve

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

A bit mushy for my usual tastes, Steve, though I'm 'guilty' of the occasional mushy one too, especially if a challenge for a contest, as here.

'Mush' of the top order, my friend. :-)

Good luck and best wishes, Ray

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014

Thanks, Ray. I'll take 'mush of the top order' as a compliment.

I'll sing back - in fact I already have!

Steve

Comment from CHIGYSISKI

Excellent

Nice poem. Great entry for the contest. My favorite lines were:
I love you more than oceans'
crashing waves upon the shore.
Though the seas roll on forever,
Oh, I'll always love you more.

Well done and best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014

Thanks for the warm review and best ishes.

Steve

Comment from rosehill (Wendy)

Excellent

Nicely done Mr. Steve. A lovely message of eternal regard and respect using vivid imagery. The only thing that is not spot on is the second to last line which has one teeny extra bump in it. I'd remove the word "the" and let it roll as smoothly as the waves. Nice read with my morning coffee. - Wendy

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014

Thanks, Ms Wendy!

The diet must be kicking in - I was awfully tempted towards 'I love you more than carrot cake.'

Steve

Comment from N.K. Wagner

Exceptional

Have you submitted this to a greeting card company yet, Steve? Hallmark is always looking for new verses, and this is a great one. :) nancy

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014

Nancy, thanks for the kind words, the six stars and especially the suggestion. A couple of other reviewers have made the Hallmark comparison, but I hadn't actually thought of submitting it to them - I'm off to google them now.

Steve

reply by N.K. Wagner on 05-Oct-2014

Good luck! :) Nancy

reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014

Seems hallmark don't accept anything unsolicited. They do run regular contests that you can enter and winners get prize money and mayb published in a card.
There are other card companies that do take submissions - will look them up tomorrow...

Steve

Comment from mikemagine

Excellent

Wonderful poem, my friend! I see zero flaws and I wish I could write this easily(Not saying you just snapped your fingers and it just materialized, though).

You ARE a poet!

Mike

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014

Thanks, Mike.

Actually this one did flow fairly easily, as many of my best pieces do.

Steve

reply by mikemagine on 04-Oct-2014

Sure thing, Steve. Cool! So it DID flow rather well! That's an awesome experience, eh?

Mike

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

Lovely love poem with good use of descriptive language, rhyming and imagery. You have captured the essence of love so well in your poem. It flows so well, too. Good luck in the contest. Faye

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from flamingstar

Excellent

Beautifully done. Love the repetition of "I love you..." My favorite line is "I love you more than oceans' crashing waves upon the shore." And the sweet ending.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve