Cautionary Tales
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Comment from GeorgieBoy
I cannot comment on the poetry itself, as I am not expert at the art of poetry. I can just say that this was priceless and all too true. When can children just 'be' This poem will be one I will remember for days.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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I cannot comment on the poetry itself, as I am not expert at the art of poetry. I can just say that this was priceless and all too true. When can children just 'be' This poem will be one I will remember for days.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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No need to be an expert - you have just commented with your joyful reaction - that's what it's all about.
Steve
Comment from Dawn Munro
Steve, this is, beyond a shadow of a doubt, brilliant. Your command of language, meter and rhyme are faultless and the premise is hysterical! Poor child - what a way to go! (LOL)
Pure entertainment in this story-in-a-poem. :0)
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Steve, this is, beyond a shadow of a doubt, brilliant. Your command of language, meter and rhyme are faultless and the premise is hysterical! Poor child - what a way to go! (LOL)
Pure entertainment in this story-in-a-poem. :0)
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Dawn.
Yep, no need to go searching for a message in this one - it's just for fun!
Steve
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LOL. It was great!
Comment from krys123
Steve;
I like the story with in a poem very much for the story was written very well and quite unique. Your imagination was truly inventive and also very ingeniously creative throughout.
The writing was meticulously distinct and neither forced nor labored while your rhythm flowed smoothly throughout your writing. The rhythm even help with your rhythmic flow.
And, my Lord, your imagery was truly fantastic and demonstratively descriptive as well as abundantly expressive throughout your writing: "On grandma who is 92, Had seen such horrors in the blitz As half her family blown to bits, And now remarked "Please have the grace to detonate some other place."
Thank you so much for sharing and posting and may all your future writings be as good as this one.
Alex
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Steve;
I like the story with in a poem very much for the story was written very well and quite unique. Your imagination was truly inventive and also very ingeniously creative throughout.
The writing was meticulously distinct and neither forced nor labored while your rhythm flowed smoothly throughout your writing. The rhythm even help with your rhythmic flow.
And, my Lord, your imagery was truly fantastic and demonstratively descriptive as well as abundantly expressive throughout your writing: "On grandma who is 92, Had seen such horrors in the blitz As half her family blown to bits, And now remarked "Please have the grace to detonate some other place."
Thank you so much for sharing and posting and may all your future writings be as good as this one.
Alex
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Alex. I am glad you enjoyed this funny story in a poem.
Steve
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You are so sincerely welcome, Steve
Comment from Cajungirl
Your story in a poem is simply delightful. I enjoyed the read very much. Seems like I know this Suzy and her poor daughter or it just may be someone just like her. LOL
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Your story in a poem is simply delightful. I enjoyed the read very much. Seems like I know this Suzy and her poor daughter or it just may be someone just like her. LOL
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Thank you!
Haven't seen you around for a while.....
Steve
Comment from Dawny53
A very funny and entertaining write that was a pleasure to read and I am enjoyed every word of it! Stanzas 2 and 3 are my favorite.. I love your sense of humor and it's so nice to see one here at fan story.. just not enough funny stuff! Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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A very funny and entertaining write that was a pleasure to read and I am enjoyed every word of it! Stanzas 2 and 3 are my favorite.. I love your sense of humor and it's so nice to see one here at fan story.. just not enough funny stuff! Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Dawny.
Plenty of funny stuff in my portfolio if you ever have the time to go poking around in there.
Steve
Comment from Just2Write
I absolutely loved this. Simply the best 'Storey poem' that I have read in a long, long time. Not a thing to fix or change, this is READY.
Rose.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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I absolutely loved this. Simply the best 'Storey poem' that I have read in a long, long time. Not a thing to fix or change, this is READY.
Rose.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Rose, for the onderfully generous review and six stars.
Suzy takes her place alongside KayCee in my book of Cautionary Tales
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Steve
Comment from jmdg1954
Very, very creative I must say. It is an enjoyable read, excellent rhyming scheme that made all the sense in the world, the cadence had a good bounce that allowed the reader to move along and get into a syncopated rhythm.
Well composed... John
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Very, very creative I must say. It is an enjoyable read, excellent rhyming scheme that made all the sense in the world, the cadence had a good bounce that allowed the reader to move along and get into a syncopated rhythm.
Well composed... John
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Thanks, John.
Long poems had better flow or the reader will soon get bored.
Steve
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Steve,
Before I got to the ending, I was feeling like an inferior mother, lol. This was so much fun to read, filled with terrific rhymes that made sense to the story. (Don't you hate when people just toss in the rhymes for rhyme sake.) Okay, kiddo, you brightened up my day and, therefore, have earned a sixer. You're a good humor writer and I hope to see more.
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Hi Steve,
Before I got to the ending, I was feeling like an inferior mother, lol. This was so much fun to read, filled with terrific rhymes that made sense to the story. (Don't you hate when people just toss in the rhymes for rhyme sake.) Okay, kiddo, you brightened up my day and, therefore, have earned a sixer. You're a good humor writer and I hope to see more.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Lou, thanks so much for the thoughtful review and the six stars.
Yes, it makes me cringe sometimes to see the forced rhymes used.
Suzy takes her place alongside KayCee in my book of Cautionary Tales There will definitely be more...
Steve
Comment from evilynne
That is all too funny and totally gross in the end. I have no idea of whether this is of any poetic form but to me it reads just fine because I couldn't stop laughing.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2014
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That is all too funny and totally gross in the end. I have no idea of whether this is of any poetic form but to me it reads just fine because I couldn't stop laughing.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2014
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Thank you! The laugh is what it's all about.
Steve
Comment from misscookie
At first the photo got my attention for I once worked for Mircosoft. LOL
Them I began to read your interesting poem
The ending I didn't expect. yet you inspried me to write a poemGon't know when it will be posted. Title "toxic chilswren" This wasa a great read I gavr no more stars.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2014
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At first the photo got my attention for I once worked for Mircosoft. LOL
Them I began to read your interesting poem
The ending I didn't expect. yet you inspried me to write a poemGon't know when it will be posted. Title "toxic chilswren" This wasa a great read I gavr no more stars.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Cookie.
Good luck with your poem.
Steve
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you are very welcome. and than for those kind words. have a blessed evening
