I Wandered the Desert
rhyming quatrains in 6/5/6/5140 total reviews
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is a beautiful and sentimental poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. It reminds me of the poem I wandered lonely as a cloud. This was very well done indeed.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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This is a beautiful and sentimental poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. It reminds me of the poem I wandered lonely as a cloud. This was very well done indeed.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Tomes, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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My pleasure once again
Comment from Aussie
So many people say "God will open the door," not true - we are the ones who open doors, God is out playing golf. I think this is the first faith poem you have written (I have read) I liked your explanation of Faith - it is up to us what happens in our lives and not to blame God when things go wrong. He is perfect we are still a work in progress. Blessings, K.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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So many people say "God will open the door," not true - we are the ones who open doors, God is out playing golf. I think this is the first faith poem you have written (I have read) I liked your explanation of Faith - it is up to us what happens in our lives and not to blame God when things go wrong. He is perfect we are still a work in progress. Blessings, K.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much, Kay. Actually, I enter the contest every time and even won it once :-) Brooke
Comment from visionary1234
Hmmm ... don't know if I'm interpreting this one correctly, Brooke, but could I be detecting a slight tongue-in-cheek comment upon 'religious' poetry here. God, I hope so! (If not, you'll probably never speak to me again).
:)Sharyn
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Hmmm ... don't know if I'm interpreting this one correctly, Brooke, but could I be detecting a slight tongue-in-cheek comment upon 'religious' poetry here. God, I hope so! (If not, you'll probably never speak to me again).
:)Sharyn
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much, Sharyn. My message is that too many people think all they have to do is pray in order to get whatever it is they want. I truly believe one has to scatter the seeds if one expects a garden to grow. God is not sitting about waiting to do everything for us just because we ask :-) Brooke
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Then I'm on board with that! for sure!!!
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Comment from mfowler
Your poem seems to be telling us that sometimes we pray for the things we want, but not necessarily need. Maybe our prayer to reach the highest mountain and touch the sky, isn't the one which God wants for us. Also I read into it that we pray for something eg flowers in a garden, but we don't work at the things we need to do to match the prayer. Your metaphors have me puzzling. It's probably patently obvious, but I hope I'm partially right. Good faith poem, Brooke!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Your poem seems to be telling us that sometimes we pray for the things we want, but not necessarily need. Maybe our prayer to reach the highest mountain and touch the sky, isn't the one which God wants for us. Also I read into it that we pray for something eg flowers in a garden, but we don't work at the things we need to do to match the prayer. Your metaphors have me puzzling. It's probably patently obvious, but I hope I'm partially right. Good faith poem, Brooke!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much, mfowler, for your very insightful reading of this poem. You are completely right :-) Brooke
Comment from Liandra
These words remind me of a 'lost soul' searching for heaven and not realising it is within waiting to be recognised.
Perfect rhyme - easy to read and understand. The artwork is perfect for this writing.
:) Liandra
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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These words remind me of a 'lost soul' searching for heaven and not realising it is within waiting to be recognised.
Perfect rhyme - easy to read and understand. The artwork is perfect for this writing.
:) Liandra
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Liandra, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from padumachitta
Hi. I've been away. This is a great poem to come back too. Ofcourse it is well written:-) But,it is the gentle, thourough way you got an important message across...God helps those who help themselves. I agree...though I have no god...if we wantlife to change,then we muzt be willing to do the work and change..with positive intention...or God, whichever works for you....
Ooooops, preaching to the chior i think:-)
padumachitta
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Hi. I've been away. This is a great poem to come back too. Ofcourse it is well written:-) But,it is the gentle, thourough way you got an important message across...God helps those who help themselves. I agree...though I have no god...if we wantlife to change,then we muzt be willing to do the work and change..with positive intention...or God, whichever works for you....
Ooooops, preaching to the chior i think:-)
padumachitta
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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padumachitta, thank you so very much, my friend :-) I appreciate your insightful understanding of the poem and your generous rating :-) Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
An excellent poem for the faith contest, Brooke. Your lesson is a wonderful one and I enjoyed the flow of your 8-5-8-5 verses. Best wishes in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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An excellent poem for the faith contest, Brooke. Your lesson is a wonderful one and I enjoyed the flow of your 8-5-8-5 verses. Best wishes in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Karyn, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Just Pete
A most original theme in this one. Rhyming is perfect the poem flows well. I half expected to find "And the moral of this story is..." at the end. Full marks for originality and I wish you the best of luck.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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A most original theme in this one. Rhyming is perfect the poem flows well. I half expected to find "And the moral of this story is..." at the end. Full marks for originality and I wish you the best of luck.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Pete, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from comanalbert
I guess we always look for the right things in the wrong places or worse still, we wish things we don't need when what we need is right next to us. That is why we'll never be happy...
Great work of art, thank you!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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I guess we always look for the right things in the wrong places or worse still, we wish things we don't need when what we need is right next to us. That is why we'll never be happy...
Great work of art, thank you!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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comanalbert, thank you so much for your most thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brooke,
I really like your poem for the Faith Poetry Contest. I love reading your work because it's always wonderful. I can't get over how cute Sawyer is as bunny. (:
Kat
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Hi Brooke,
I really like your poem for the Faith Poetry Contest. I love reading your work because it's always wonderful. I can't get over how cute Sawyer is as bunny. (:
Kat
Comment Written 22-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014
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Kat, thanks so much :-) And yes, he sure is a cutie. Brooke
