Adam (A Fall From Grace)
Adam`s fall in the Garden of Eden60 total reviews
Comment from skye
Wonderful jump off for another layer to the truth.
The plan was always for Adam to "fall". They were commanded to "multiply and replenish the earth". That was not possible while in a state of innocence in the garden.
So we inhabit the world, tested and tried to choose the right, make choices, and ultimately return to our God.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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Wonderful jump off for another layer to the truth.
The plan was always for Adam to "fall". They were commanded to "multiply and replenish the earth". That was not possible while in a state of innocence in the garden.
So we inhabit the world, tested and tried to choose the right, make choices, and ultimately return to our God.
Excellent.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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Thanks so much for reading and reviewing...I am so glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
Comment from Matthew M.
This is a good poem about the fall of man and then his redemption through Jesus.
Here are some other comments I had as I read:
I never really thought of Adam eating the fruit decided to take on the vision of the deceiver. That is a interesting thought.
Yes, the ego trip is truly what it was, that Adam wanted to be like God.
It is good that God created a way out from the fallen beings that men are.
Overall, a good poem with a good message.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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This is a good poem about the fall of man and then his redemption through Jesus.
Here are some other comments I had as I read:
I never really thought of Adam eating the fruit decided to take on the vision of the deceiver. That is a interesting thought.
Yes, the ego trip is truly what it was, that Adam wanted to be like God.
It is good that God created a way out from the fallen beings that men are.
Overall, a good poem with a good message.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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Thanks so much for reading and reviewing...I am so glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
Comment from Flamingbush
Absolutely brilliant, in my opinion. It's nice to see the man accept the blame for his role in the fall, rather than putting it all on Eve - though it was a joint transgression. I like the theme of becoming a different image than expected. Some of my favorite lines (there are a lot of them):
the original Prometheus who would make me an effigy of his own fallen self
I took an ego trip
I did not recoil, instead I chose to have my eyes opened
blinded by his lies; a forgery of the divine image
And of course, there's my favorite part at the end:
We are the lost sheep, He is our Shepherd.
We are the fallen, He is our Savior.
We were condemned to die, He is the way to eternal life. For He is truth. He is Jesus Christ, the Son of God.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2013
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Absolutely brilliant, in my opinion. It's nice to see the man accept the blame for his role in the fall, rather than putting it all on Eve - though it was a joint transgression. I like the theme of becoming a different image than expected. Some of my favorite lines (there are a lot of them):
the original Prometheus who would make me an effigy of his own fallen self
I took an ego trip
I did not recoil, instead I chose to have my eyes opened
blinded by his lies; a forgery of the divine image
And of course, there's my favorite part at the end:
We are the lost sheep, He is our Shepherd.
We are the fallen, He is our Savior.
We were condemned to die, He is the way to eternal life. For He is truth. He is Jesus Christ, the Son of God.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much for the six stars...I truly appreciate them and I am so glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
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You're very welcome. Thanks for sharing this.
Comment from Walu Feral
Amen, my friend! What a great picture you have painted of one of the saddest events of all time. I really liked this piece. Cheers Fez.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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Amen, my friend! What a great picture you have painted of one of the saddest events of all time. I really liked this piece. Cheers Fez.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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Thanks so much for reading and reviewing...I am so glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
Comment from chasennov
The poem about Adam is very well written and the analogy quite obvious. Using Adam as a constant in this sense works very well in the poem where it aids with the rounding of the body and the structure is also supported very well. Nicely proportioned and well presented with a fine extension on the grammar. Well done. Kind regards.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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The poem about Adam is very well written and the analogy quite obvious. Using Adam as a constant in this sense works very well in the poem where it aids with the rounding of the body and the structure is also supported very well. Nicely proportioned and well presented with a fine extension on the grammar. Well done. Kind regards.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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Thanks so much for reading and reviewing...I am so glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
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You're welcome to the review.
Comment from EMB
Well, this is written in the format of a poem, but this is really a great prose, narrated by Adam, that has been formatted like poetry. This was good writing, but I'm thinking it really should be listed as a spiritual essay of some kind.
Very nice.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2013
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Well, this is written in the format of a poem, but this is really a great prose, narrated by Adam, that has been formatted like poetry. This was good writing, but I'm thinking it really should be listed as a spiritual essay of some kind.
Very nice.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing...I appreciate your words and I am glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
Comment from Rondeno
The mighty cadences of this poem recall the majesty of the King James Bible. There are also Classical allusions thrown in there, too.
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The mighty cadences of this poem recall the majesty of the King James Bible. There are also Classical allusions thrown in there, too.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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Thanks so much for reading and reviewing...I am so glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
Comment from 9999pool
A tragic story indeed for the fall of man in Adam # 1. We have been banish from heaven to learn our lessons on Earth. But how many can truly claim that we have been honest and true ion our approach to learning those lesson. The devil is always playing us out as a punishment.
Life offers 'a body of evidence' of what lessons need to be learnt and overcome. have we. Finally we have to look up to God and Jesus for our salvation.
Like our first forefathers, starting all over again and yet the test will proved to a very tough one.
Excellent imagery and descriptive prose to tell the story. Chers, Ritchie.
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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2013
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A tragic story indeed for the fall of man in Adam # 1. We have been banish from heaven to learn our lessons on Earth. But how many can truly claim that we have been honest and true ion our approach to learning those lesson. The devil is always playing us out as a punishment.
Life offers 'a body of evidence' of what lessons need to be learnt and overcome. have we. Finally we have to look up to God and Jesus for our salvation.
Like our first forefathers, starting all over again and yet the test will proved to a very tough one.
Excellent imagery and descriptive prose to tell the story. Chers, Ritchie.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2013
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Hi Ritchie,
I really don`t think we will ever learn. Sure when something tragic and really big like the earthquake in Haiti for example happens we all come together for a while...but then we go back to doing what we usually do...ignore the problems until something jolts us awake...we have a problem overlooking ourselves...thanks so much for reading and reviewing...I really appreciate your insightful comments...blessings.
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Hi Idamarty.
Your comments are so true. We cannot blame ourselves cos everyday is so busy even on a BORING day, LOL.
If you have read my "Ancora Imparo - I am still Learning" and the sequel 'A Body of Evidence", and this poem of yours is PART 3, then it will all tied up the loose ends with a very good case study for mankind, LOL.
Thx for sharing. Blessings, Ritchie.
Comment from mizzkris20
Wow!! This is awesome! Thank you for sharing your work with us. I really enjoyed reading your work. It def gives me something to think about. Again, awesome job!
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2013
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Wow!! This is awesome! Thank you for sharing your work with us. I really enjoyed reading your work. It def gives me something to think about. Again, awesome job!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much for the six stars...I truly appreciate them and I am so glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
Comment from eowyn0003
I rally have nothing to say except BRILLIANT! DAZZLING! If I could but write lick this I would be able to shout to the world like you have in this poem. This is one of the things I pray for. Thank you.
Lura
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2013
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I rally have nothing to say except BRILLIANT! DAZZLING! If I could but write lick this I would be able to shout to the world like you have in this poem. This is one of the things I pray for. Thank you.
Lura
Comment Written 08-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much for the six stars...I truly appreciate them and I am so glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
