Fire Inside
A short poem162 total reviews
Comment from bonnie composanto
This is a beautifully written 5-7-5 emotional poem. The picture adds so much imagery to the beautiful words which you have written. Nice job.
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This is a beautifully written 5-7-5 emotional poem. The picture adds so much imagery to the beautiful words which you have written. Nice job.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2012
Comment from mystery poet
I felt that you sought out the embers of love
that you hoped was simply buried by someone
from the past. Nice imagery and perfect art.
The last line is intense and poignant. Much luck.
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I felt that you sought out the embers of love
that you hoped was simply buried by someone
from the past. Nice imagery and perfect art.
The last line is intense and poignant. Much luck.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2012
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
A good write and you did well to have been your first attempt at writing this kind of poem. Keep up the good work,and thanks for sharing.Mary
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A good write and you did well to have been your first attempt at writing this kind of poem. Keep up the good work,and thanks for sharing.Mary
Comment Written 12-Jun-2012
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Fire Inside' is an exceptionally well-written and deliciously sensuous piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.
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'Fire Inside' is an exceptionally well-written and deliciously sensuous piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2012
Comment from Judian James
Hi there Vincent and welcome to FanStory! I don't usually cruise the top of page one, but I recognized you as a new name here, so I thought I'd have a read and review. This is very nice and I love the second line pointing out that the other's fire was going out as well ... a spark and still warm embers ignite in the dark! NICE!
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Hi there Vincent and welcome to FanStory! I don't usually cruise the top of page one, but I recognized you as a new name here, so I thought I'd have a read and review. This is very nice and I love the second line pointing out that the other's fire was going out as well ... a spark and still warm embers ignite in the dark! NICE!
Comment Written 12-Jun-2012
Comment from Zeek31415
Good poem. I like how it builds up each line. First it starts with a spark, then it turns to embers, and finally it becomes a fire. The only thing that bothered me a bit was lighting a spark because I consider a spark to be something already lit. I enjoyed the poem regardless! Nice one!
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Good poem. I like how it builds up each line. First it starts with a spark, then it turns to embers, and finally it becomes a fire. The only thing that bothered me a bit was lighting a spark because I consider a spark to be something already lit. I enjoyed the poem regardless! Nice one!
Comment Written 12-Jun-2012
Comment from misscookie
The picture sets the mood for your poem.
I found it to nbe a very strong poe m of a few words.
There is a firely message within this poem.
Thank you for sharing. message
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The picture sets the mood for your poem.
I found it to nbe a very strong poe m of a few words.
There is a firely message within this poem.
Thank you for sharing. message
Comment Written 12-Jun-2012
Comment from poems4u
Excellent lines put together!!! I like the 5-7-5 format, when you have the word-limit, but if words are chosen well it can say a lot. This poem definitely has done that in 3 lines. It also concludes well with "fire in the dark". Very meaningful, well chosen words.
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Excellent lines put together!!! I like the 5-7-5 format, when you have the word-limit, but if words are chosen well it can say a lot. This poem definitely has done that in 3 lines. It also concludes well with "fire in the dark". Very meaningful, well chosen words.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2012
Comment from rjuselius
"You light a lost spark
You pour embers from your heart
You're fire in the dark"
well done! it seems like a "professional" wrote this piece of poetic art! you shouldbevery proud.
thank youfor sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
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"You light a lost spark
You pour embers from your heart
You're fire in the dark"
well done! it seems like a "professional" wrote this piece of poetic art! you shouldbevery proud.
thank youfor sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
Comment Written 12-Jun-2012
Comment from hollyinvesuvianite
Vincent, this is truly brilliant! Please accept a virtual six. Great image chosen to accompany the perfect word phrasing. I know what you mean- it is harder than it seems, but you really have the ability! Great work! Holly
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Vincent, this is truly brilliant! Please accept a virtual six. Great image chosen to accompany the perfect word phrasing. I know what you mean- it is harder than it seems, but you really have the ability! Great work! Holly
Comment Written 12-Jun-2012
