A Book of Songs
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "The Barbers Refrain (Part 1)"Metre ... Ballads & Slant Rhyme
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Comment from TammyGail
What a wonderful poem ..
Your presentation is always great
This imagery was very nice
Thanks for the note how cool it is that you still have the tradition red and white poles for the Barbers shop.. That is almost a thing of the past where I live... It was a pleasure..
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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What a wonderful poem ..
Your presentation is always great
This imagery was very nice
Thanks for the note how cool it is that you still have the tradition red and white poles for the Barbers shop.. That is almost a thing of the past where I live... It was a pleasure..
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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Where a bit behind the times on this island...lol.
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Lol...
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Glad you enjoyed. I have a parts 2 and 3 to conclude with...keep an eye out...lol.
Comment from barkingdog
I like your repeat refrain:
Gentlemen what are you for, you know what we do,
The red and white is our coat of arms.
Come gentlemen sit fast, bad hair day don't get caught,
Feel the scissor and comb's healing balm.
From surgeon to beautician but a no to piercing and tattoos. Why not they are surgical in a sense? LOL
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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I like your repeat refrain:
Gentlemen what are you for, you know what we do,
The red and white is our coat of arms.
Come gentlemen sit fast, bad hair day don't get caught,
Feel the scissor and comb's healing balm.
From surgeon to beautician but a no to piercing and tattoos. Why not they are surgical in a sense? LOL
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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Quality, lol.
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:)BD
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lol.
Comment from ScarletClearwater
I really like the premise it was cute and serious at once. The repetition of the quatrains was a bit much for me and the reading a bit bumpy due to syllables, but other than that, I thought the work was great. I like the words you use, such as about the "balm" and "preen". Good imagery!
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I really like the premise it was cute and serious at once. The repetition of the quatrains was a bit much for me and the reading a bit bumpy due to syllables, but other than that, I thought the work was great. I like the words you use, such as about the "balm" and "preen". Good imagery!
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
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Excellent, much appreciated.
Comment from misscookie
I love this poem I heard so many stories
half flase .half true.
About time spent in those barbers chair.
Some stories shouldn't be told around young childer. After reading your poem some stories should not be told aropund children.Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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I love this poem I heard so many stories
half flase .half true.
About time spent in those barbers chair.
Some stories shouldn't be told around young childer. After reading your poem some stories should not be told aropund children.Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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Thank you...
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My pleasure.
Comment from rudion
I especially like the repeating verse in this as it adds more impact. Very clever and witty and very well-written. The poem is captivating throughtout and caused me to chuckle a time or two. Great job.
Rudion
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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I especially like the repeating verse in this as it adds more impact. Very clever and witty and very well-written. The poem is captivating throughtout and caused me to chuckle a time or two. Great job.
Rudion
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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Hopefully parts 2 and 3 will make you laugh also...many tahnks.
Comment from Ian Ayris
Mmm. Interesting. Love the patter. Wasn't sure about the repeated verse first of all, but by the time the third one kicked in, I was put in mind of the mesmeric rhythm of a barbers scissors. Nice touch.
Love the 'severing screams' and the back to basics attitude of the hair dressers response.
Original and fun. Thanks for the read.
Warmest regards,
Ian
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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Mmm. Interesting. Love the patter. Wasn't sure about the repeated verse first of all, but by the time the third one kicked in, I was put in mind of the mesmeric rhythm of a barbers scissors. Nice touch.
Love the 'severing screams' and the back to basics attitude of the hair dressers response.
Original and fun. Thanks for the read.
Warmest regards,
Ian
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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Glad you could understand it and it is called a refrain,hence the repetition.
Comment from c_lucas
Nowadays, you seldom see the barber's pole at hair sytlist's place of businesses. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
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Nowadays, you seldom see the barber's pole at hair sytlist's place of businesses. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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Thank you chalie...
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You're welcome, Bic. Charlie
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Sorry charlie...I thought it was chalie...typo...many apologies.
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No problem.
Comment from Herb
Quite the strange little narrative this poems has. A fell and mood here that I found dark and Gothic even (were you going for that?)
Look forward to seeing were this goes.
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Quite the strange little narrative this poems has. A fell and mood here that I found dark and Gothic even (were you going for that?)
Look forward to seeing were this goes.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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Well it was back in the day...
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
OK, this one I get and see the humor. We have the same symbol in the US. Perfect artwork for this one-quite humorous
Feel the scissor and comb's healing balm.
I like your repetition of this-sort of links things together.
Debbie
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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OK, this one I get and see the humor. We have the same symbol in the US. Perfect artwork for this one-quite humorous
Feel the scissor and comb's healing balm.
I like your repetition of this-sort of links things together.
Debbie
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
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Many thanks...
Comment from Chris Tee
This is indeed an absolutely gorgeous poem we have here old sport.
Yes it is the coat of arms here as well, the candy style red and white.
This could be a good song with the refrain stanzas
Well done with a splendid poem here old chap.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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This is indeed an absolutely gorgeous poem we have here old sport.
Yes it is the coat of arms here as well, the candy style red and white.
This could be a good song with the refrain stanzas
Well done with a splendid poem here old chap.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2011
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It`s a parody of an old song...
