Dear Painter
Gazing beyond the frame148 total reviews
Comment from cupa tea
I do not think I could have found so much to say about that painting. Nicely done. It has a decent flow and its discussion is intregging.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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I do not think I could have found so much to say about that painting. Nicely done. It has a decent flow and its discussion is intregging.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Thank you cupa tea for reading and commenting in this work.
Comment from jeslaf
What was your intention
when you painted
this bride
off center?
LOVE THIS, love it, love it--works for the literal artist/painting, for me individually, and for the Church universal (two screwed up broads, both beloved just the same :). Brilliant!
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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What was your intention
when you painted
this bride
off center?
LOVE THIS, love it, love it--works for the literal artist/painting, for me individually, and for the Church universal (two screwed up broads, both beloved just the same :). Brilliant!
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Thank you, jeslaf, always a great supporter of my work.
Comment from ponderman
I loved your poem because unlike the picture I understand exactly what you mean. I use to try toor is figure out 'modern art' as if it were a puzzle but I quit because I never could figure anything out. The art lovers of the world should unite and band together forcing modern artist to ex;pain just what the hell they were thinking when they painted it! Now, the artist is dead and we will never know! I am certainly glad I don't care what he was thinking that would be torturous. But enough silliness, your poem is beautifully written, your poetic phrases are lovely. "scribbler of souls" "intricacy of your heart" -- wonderful! I also loved the way your poem had a wonderful timing with the words, "It provokes me. It dares me. It incites me... -- great! It helps me as the reader to feel the same mood of perplexity as you pondered the painting trying to figure it out. I enjoyed reading and experiencing your poem very much.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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I loved your poem because unlike the picture I understand exactly what you mean. I use to try toor is figure out 'modern art' as if it were a puzzle but I quit because I never could figure anything out. The art lovers of the world should unite and band together forcing modern artist to ex;pain just what the hell they were thinking when they painted it! Now, the artist is dead and we will never know! I am certainly glad I don't care what he was thinking that would be torturous. But enough silliness, your poem is beautifully written, your poetic phrases are lovely. "scribbler of souls" "intricacy of your heart" -- wonderful! I also loved the way your poem had a wonderful timing with the words, "It provokes me. It dares me. It incites me... -- great! It helps me as the reader to feel the same mood of perplexity as you pondered the painting trying to figure it out. I enjoyed reading and experiencing your poem very much.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Your comments touch me, especially this phrase "It helps me as the reader to feel the same mood of perplexity as you pondered the painting trying to figure it out." As a wanna be writer, is my duty to touch the reader.
Comment from Marathonwriter
Your first verse captured how I feel when reading many of the poems on fanstory. I often feel like an intruder in the well of genious. I also liked how you explained your conclusion about the painting is maybe a deviation. We all look at things in our own way. It's what makes us all unique. Thanks for sharing your honesty and good luck in the contest.
Chris
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Your first verse captured how I feel when reading many of the poems on fanstory. I often feel like an intruder in the well of genious. I also liked how you explained your conclusion about the painting is maybe a deviation. We all look at things in our own way. It's what makes us all unique. Thanks for sharing your honesty and good luck in the contest.
Chris
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Hi Chris, I like this comment of yours "We all look at things in our own way. It's what makes us all unique." Thank you!
Chris
Comment from fayesh
I think you picked a fine painting, but you could have actually said more about the its content other than "this bride off center." What about the other images, the colors, the dream-like projections of those images. A number of the images reflect a biographical element.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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I think you picked a fine painting, but you could have actually said more about the its content other than "this bride off center." What about the other images, the colors, the dream-like projections of those images. A number of the images reflect a biographical element.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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I know fayesh, there are so many more elements to ponder on. Unfortunately that would be a much longer and complex poem. You are absolutely right. There are many stunning elements in this painting.
Comment from warbler
This is a wonderful poem and the language flows very well. I particularly enjoyed the verse that reads,"Today at the end of day I wonder if what I look at is necessarily
what I see". Lovely. The only thing I might change is in the first verse where you say,"peek for a while in the intricacy" to say "peek for a while into the intricacy".
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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This is a wonderful poem and the language flows very well. I particularly enjoyed the verse that reads,"Today at the end of day I wonder if what I look at is necessarily
what I see". Lovely. The only thing I might change is in the first verse where you say,"peek for a while in the intricacy" to say "peek for a while into the intricacy".
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Thank you, warbler. I agree with you. "into the intricacy of your heart" is much better than the original one. Done!
Comment from chelabella
I really enjoyed this look into the painting. I wrote a poem once based on a painting of Picasso's wife. I love the short lines. They make one read more slowly and ponder your questions. My favorite lines; "scribbler of souls" and "unveiled verse". Also, you drew her in a crooked line
to match the location of your heart. One question, should "in the intricacy" read "into the intricacy". That's what my eyes saw, then looked again. This would be the last line if it were my poem -- It's just a deviation
from my own within. Great poem.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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I really enjoyed this look into the painting. I wrote a poem once based on a painting of Picasso's wife. I love the short lines. They make one read more slowly and ponder your questions. My favorite lines; "scribbler of souls" and "unveiled verse". Also, you drew her in a crooked line
to match the location of your heart. One question, should "in the intricacy" read "into the intricacy". That's what my eyes saw, then looked again. This would be the last line if it were my poem -- It's just a deviation
from my own within. Great poem.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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"Into the intricacy" is a much better line than mine. I will change it. Thank you, dear poet.
Comment from joemass
G'day
This is a very thoughtful, free-roaming exercise in interpretation and exploration of possibilites. There are one or two places, e.g. the last three lines of the first stanza and the lasst two lines of the seventh, where I think your language could be improved a bit but that would heighten rather than alter the sense of your writing.
Good job!
Joemass
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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G'day
This is a very thoughtful, free-roaming exercise in interpretation and exploration of possibilites. There are one or two places, e.g. the last three lines of the first stanza and the lasst two lines of the seventh, where I think your language could be improved a bit but that would heighten rather than alter the sense of your writing.
Good job!
Joemass
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Thank you joemass for reading and commenting in this work.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Dear Painter" is an excellent piece of writing. This talented poet asks so many rhetorical questions that it's virtually impossible to know what the artist was thinking when he painted the definitely crooked bride. It was a pleasure to read and review a work of this caliber.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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"Dear Painter" is an excellent piece of writing. This talented poet asks so many rhetorical questions that it's virtually impossible to know what the artist was thinking when he painted the definitely crooked bride. It was a pleasure to read and review a work of this caliber.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Your comments really touch my heart and inspires me to write better, each time. Thank you, duchess.
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You're more than welcome. Keep writing as you have talent.
All the very best,
the Duchess
Comment from MadHatter182
This poem is written very well. It is very easy to follow especially for someone who is new, or just unfamiliar with poetry.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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This poem is written very well. It is very easy to follow especially for someone who is new, or just unfamiliar with poetry.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Thank you MadHatter182 for getting acquainted with my work.
