The Enchanted Toyshelf
a modern sonnet about fairies at bedtime90 total reviews
Comment from Always Hope
When my baby doll can't sleep through the night,
when teddy bear wakes in dark shadow fears,
if the jack-in-the-box gives us all a fright,
we look for the fairy who's always near.
Jack-in-the-box will scare me till the day I die! That evil thing! I think if the cookie monster popper out, I'd feel the same. It's the music! Ack!
I loved the way you ended this piece. Beautifully written!
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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When my baby doll can't sleep through the night,
when teddy bear wakes in dark shadow fears,
if the jack-in-the-box gives us all a fright,
we look for the fairy who's always near.
Jack-in-the-box will scare me till the day I die! That evil thing! I think if the cookie monster popper out, I'd feel the same. It's the music! Ack!
I loved the way you ended this piece. Beautifully written!
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Yes, those things are an evil creation !!!! Thank you, Brooke
Comment from tony bronk
This certainly is a girls point of view but, I can appreciate that. I have a daughter and, a poem like this would have delighted her as a child and probably still would. Sorry if I sound chauvanistic but, it really is a feminine point of view. As a boy growing up in a small town and living near a woods and river where I spent most of my time with my buddies and catching snakes to chase and scare girls with, you might understand where I am coming from but, I am growing and appreciating thoughts like these all the more. I even watch "chic" movies with my wife more often now. I'm not sure why I went off like this but, it did stir some old memories for me and that is what I feel makes a good poem.It's hard to take the river, woods and snakes out from an over grown boy at times. tony p.s. I probably am not leaving a very good impression of myself with this review but, it is me ... well, at least still a Part of me. Boys are weird creatures.We lived the life of Tom Sawyer and all of the wild and imaginative mischieviousness of that sort. I can't believe thay I am sharing all of this with you. This poem has been very affective upon me.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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This certainly is a girls point of view but, I can appreciate that. I have a daughter and, a poem like this would have delighted her as a child and probably still would. Sorry if I sound chauvanistic but, it really is a feminine point of view. As a boy growing up in a small town and living near a woods and river where I spent most of my time with my buddies and catching snakes to chase and scare girls with, you might understand where I am coming from but, I am growing and appreciating thoughts like these all the more. I even watch "chic" movies with my wife more often now. I'm not sure why I went off like this but, it did stir some old memories for me and that is what I feel makes a good poem.It's hard to take the river, woods and snakes out from an over grown boy at times. tony p.s. I probably am not leaving a very good impression of myself with this review but, it is me ... well, at least still a Part of me. Boys are weird creatures.We lived the life of Tom Sawyer and all of the wild and imaginative mischieviousness of that sort. I can't believe thay I am sharing all of this with you. This poem has been very affective upon me.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Oh, I realize it is a girly poem LOL But that's OK, since it is my little girl who loves fairies, and I'm discovering I have fans who love fairies or who have daughters who love fairies. I have one fan, the younger sister of a writer on site, who is a 12 year old from Sri Lanka who prints out all my fairy poems - I dedicated a recent one to her, and now I learn that Ian's daughter Mollie loves my fairy poems, so I'm going to write a fairy poem that also appeals to her other interests in unicorns and dragons. The boys are just on their own on this one! LOL thank you, Brooke
Comment from Winslow
Dear Brooke,
Ah, the guardian fairy, the one whose stalwart heart protects and hovers always near. As I read this I thought of a fairy angel who may grow up with this girl and hover always near with stalwart heart when danger threatens.
Good poem.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Dear Brooke,
Ah, the guardian fairy, the one whose stalwart heart protects and hovers always near. As I read this I thought of a fairy angel who may grow up with this girl and hover always near with stalwart heart when danger threatens.
Good poem.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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what a lovely thought - a fairy who grows with the child - that sounds like a great idea for a story!! You should write it :-) Thanks so much, Brooke
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Be my guest, Brooke. If I wrote it, the story would be about a gremlin who grows up with the boy. (LOL) You know, the one with willful heart who leads the boy astray, who grows up with the lad and continues to
cause countless problems.
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I've never actually written a story since an adult - I think my dialogue sucks. LOL
Everyone always comes out sounding like a proper grammarian. ;-) Your gremlin story sounds fun!!
Comment from KelinaJ
A lovely image selection. I like the smile the child has for her "baby". Good presentation and the color scheme works well with the image color tones. Good use of rhythm and rhyme. The lines flow well. A sweet scene of the fairy making everything okay again by chasing the fright away. Wonderful.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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A lovely image selection. I like the smile the child has for her "baby". Good presentation and the color scheme works well with the image color tones. Good use of rhythm and rhyme. The lines flow well. A sweet scene of the fairy making everything okay again by chasing the fright away. Wonderful.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Kelina, yes, I was so pleased to find this picture! Thanks so much, Brooke
Comment from brightside1099
I like this. I think it would be a great poem to read to any small child who fears the dark. I especially like the idea that you have a tendency to believe in fairies and the magic they bring. Me too.
BB
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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I like this. I think it would be a great poem to read to any small child who fears the dark. I especially like the idea that you have a tendency to believe in fairies and the magic they bring. Me too.
BB
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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I'm glad you're a fellow fairy lover - it is a good thing to be!!! Thanks, Brooke :-)
Comment from Summer Falls
This has a sweet and magical quality about it. The ability of fairies calming fears is a beautiful sentiment. The poem flowed well. Good job!
summergirl
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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This has a sweet and magical quality about it. The ability of fairies calming fears is a beautiful sentiment. The poem flowed well. Good job!
summergirl
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Thank you for this gracious response, Brooke
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You're welcome!
Comment from rmdelta
Brooke,
Another very well written poem, Brooke. What a great poem to read to a child. Gentle, filled with wonder, imaginary friends and best of all, their very own special fairy. Well done, Brooke
Reggie
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Brooke,
Another very well written poem, Brooke. What a great poem to read to a child. Gentle, filled with wonder, imaginary friends and best of all, their very own special fairy. Well done, Brooke
Reggie
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Reggie, the cool thing is that I have readers who actually do read these fairy poems to their children! Thanks so much, Brooke :-)
Comment from Hitcher
You are so good at these Sonnets Brooke it makes me nervous about giving them ago myself friend. That was great, the flow, story and visuals were an absolute pleasure. Very nice!
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You are so good at these Sonnets Brooke it makes me nervous about giving them ago myself friend. That was great, the flow, story and visuals were an absolute pleasure. Very nice!
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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And you had better watch out as I just received a gift of a book on how to write sonnets!! Once I really know how to do it you are in bigger trouble. LOL Thanks ever so much for your kind compliment - and if you just want to keep writing your steamy poems, we ladies are not going to complain. ;-) Brooke
Comment from mildredmolanki
Hi I enjoyed your poem, which as we get closer to christmas helps bring back the child in all of us. Good attached artwork to set the atmosphere and theme. Your picture reminds me of Emily in the childrens program Bagpuss...ever watch it. It's creator died this week sadly, but htose stories brought the world of toys and faries alive for me when I was a child. Kind regards, MM
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Hi I enjoyed your poem, which as we get closer to christmas helps bring back the child in all of us. Good attached artwork to set the atmosphere and theme. Your picture reminds me of Emily in the childrens program Bagpuss...ever watch it. It's creator died this week sadly, but htose stories brought the world of toys and faries alive for me when I was a child. Kind regards, MM
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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No, I do not know Bagpuss, but now you have me most curious!
Thank you so much for your lovely review, Brooke
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Bagpuss was a very famous kids show from (I think) the 70's in the UK. Bagpuss was a pink and yellow cloth cat who lived in Emilys toyshop and came to life when the shop was quiet along with all the other toys, to get up to there tricks and fix up the broken toys brought in for repair. Only Emily knew the truth of course. It was set in an old world era, where little girls still had long hair and ribbons and frilly dresses. My whole generation generation loved it. Look it up some time and you'll see the likeness to your poem. Kind regards, MM
Comment from Fleedleflump
This is beautiful Brooke, and it lulled me into a happy smile. Lovely alliteration, and a subtle, wistful melody underlying the words. Truly, for me, this is one of your best. I'm only sorry I don't have a six to give you.
Mike
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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This is beautiful Brooke, and it lulled me into a happy smile. Lovely alliteration, and a subtle, wistful melody underlying the words. Truly, for me, this is one of your best. I'm only sorry I don't have a six to give you.
Mike
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Mike, thank you for your most generous response - what kind things to say. Brooke
