The Sonnet Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Ashes of Lost Hope"a poetic collage of my sonnets
109 total reviews
Comment from Kaze
Beautiful poem... it's very eloquent, and the message powerful. Unrequited love is one of the most difficult kind of relationships to deal with--not having one's love returned can't haunt you for a long time. By the way, where in eastern europe are you from? I read your profile and saw that you are published. I would love to publish my poetry book, but I don't really know how to get started, and I don't want to destroy my bank account with total self publishing. Any thought?
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Beautiful poem... it's very eloquent, and the message powerful. Unrequited love is one of the most difficult kind of relationships to deal with--not having one's love returned can't haunt you for a long time. By the way, where in eastern europe are you from? I read your profile and saw that you are published. I would love to publish my poetry book, but I don't really know how to get started, and I don't want to destroy my bank account with total self publishing. Any thought?
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
Comment from Rar22
Oooh, beautiful sonnet with clever, precise language and a universal significance. I particularly relate to the first two stanzas; one of my favorite lines is "Eyes blinded by your sun, I whirled in red." This line alone holds vivid imagery and powerful metaphorical meaning. Great work :)
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Oooh, beautiful sonnet with clever, precise language and a universal significance. I particularly relate to the first two stanzas; one of my favorite lines is "Eyes blinded by your sun, I whirled in red." This line alone holds vivid imagery and powerful metaphorical meaning. Great work :)
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
Comment from Nicollette
This is a truly beautiful piece of work. Exceptionally moving, I particulary liked
'My knight, where did you hide your silver lyre?
The bells of love rang in my mind alone
What legacy had I through fortune's ire?
Love's ashes buried 'neath the graveyard stone.'
So romantic, best of luck in the contest.
kind regards
Nicollette
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This is a truly beautiful piece of work. Exceptionally moving, I particulary liked
'My knight, where did you hide your silver lyre?
The bells of love rang in my mind alone
What legacy had I through fortune's ire?
Love's ashes buried 'neath the graveyard stone.'
So romantic, best of luck in the contest.
kind regards
Nicollette
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
this is a very good piece of work, it is well written well presented and the artwork compliments the words well there are no amendments or adjustments needed
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this is a very good piece of work, it is well written well presented and the artwork compliments the words well there are no amendments or adjustments needed
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
Comment from Valerie Julia Ann
Unrequited love is beautiful, and can last a lifetime.
"Your verse was fire" sounds like literary seduction.
Your poem is so very lovely, and I read it several times for beauty's sake. I couldn't find anything wrong with it, and I searched, hoping that I could find just one little thing to critique.
I hope you win. Valerie
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Unrequited love is beautiful, and can last a lifetime.
"Your verse was fire" sounds like literary seduction.
Your poem is so very lovely, and I read it several times for beauty's sake. I couldn't find anything wrong with it, and I searched, hoping that I could find just one little thing to critique.
I hope you win. Valerie
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
Comment from sara-beth
This is really well done. You've kept to the form, and the language is old fashioned; perfect for this style. The very last line is my favorite,"and sharp the quill that pierced my very depth!" Awesome.
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This is really well done. You've kept to the form, and the language is old fashioned; perfect for this style. The very last line is my favorite,"and sharp the quill that pierced my very depth!" Awesome.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
Comment from yachtworknz
Yeltel-Nice choice of artwork, and great poem.
I especially like this bit-
Twas not true passion that you have revealed?
Was I not scorched by heat? Your verse was fire!
Why was the truth so cleverly concealed?
How aptly do you scribe without desire...
Cheers
Scott
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Yeltel-Nice choice of artwork, and great poem.
I especially like this bit-
Twas not true passion that you have revealed?
Was I not scorched by heat? Your verse was fire!
Why was the truth so cleverly concealed?
How aptly do you scribe without desire...
Cheers
Scott
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
Comment from Nicnac
Brilliant imagery.
You have painted a lovely mental image from your well written poem. Nice flow and rhyme.
"Love's ashes buried 'neath the graveyard stone." --Very moving!
This storytelling poem is a pleasure to read.
Fabulous entry, Yeltel.
~Nic
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Brilliant imagery.
You have painted a lovely mental image from your well written poem. Nice flow and rhyme.
"Love's ashes buried 'neath the graveyard stone." --Very moving!
This storytelling poem is a pleasure to read.
Fabulous entry, Yeltel.
~Nic
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
Comment from allborn66
It is a very beautiful poem. It is very well written, and has a great flow. It is emotional. The painting is perfect, excellent choice.
Barbara
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It is a very beautiful poem. It is very well written, and has a great flow. It is emotional. The painting is perfect, excellent choice.
Barbara
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
Comment from wierdgrace
i love these old fashion stories in a poem, and the picture is wonderful, I love the sonnet. thank you so much for sharing.
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i love these old fashion stories in a poem, and the picture is wonderful, I love the sonnet. thank you so much for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
