Driving the Distance
Contest Entry: Free Verse - Some Rhyme -76 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Mrs. KT I liked you opening sentence to you poem
driving away from time
then you led us into of what you wanted you future to be and forget the past
I like you thoughts you and original style of writing
Gert
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2008
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Hello Mrs. KT I liked you opening sentence to you poem
driving away from time
then you led us into of what you wanted you future to be and forget the past
I like you thoughts you and original style of writing
Gert
Comment Written 23-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2008
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Hello Gert!
So pleased you stopped by and enjoyed my offering! Thank you! diane
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diane you are so welcome
Have a plesant evening.
Gert
Comment from FrankieT
KT, nicely done and expressed.
Written clearly and with feelings.
Good descriptive words and phrases. Bueno. :o)
FrankieT
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KT, nicely done and expressed.
Written clearly and with feelings.
Good descriptive words and phrases. Bueno. :o)
FrankieT
Comment Written 23-Jul-2008
Comment from Kingsland
your first line, driving away from time
I sat here and tried to figure out how you can do that
I wasn't successful in finding an answer
I really liked the way you put this poem together
it leads the reader on a journey
a journey that most can relate to
you used good imagery and phrasing in this verse
this was my pleasure to have read and reviewed it... John
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2008
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your first line, driving away from time
I sat here and tried to figure out how you can do that
I wasn't successful in finding an answer
I really liked the way you put this poem together
it leads the reader on a journey
a journey that most can relate to
you used good imagery and phrasing in this verse
this was my pleasure to have read and reviewed it... John
Comment Written 23-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2008
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Hi John....That's right: you can't. You can't drive away or walk away or dismiss it in any way, shape or form...It all becomes part of the journey...Thanks so much for your kind review and for stopping by....diane
Comment from potepoet
I like this, teh cyclic implication by teh repeated open and closing stanzas; the repetition to propell forward.
From time to years becoming more detiled as the memory is focused. . . places, regrets then faces.
The instances of feelings. . . then the driving stanza:
"At every curve
At every bend
The lines of truth
Merge and intersect
With no discernible end".
I liked these parts, I felt others could be made tighter and more raw than flowery poetics to fit the tone more.
Overall, I liked it though. It evoked universal feelings.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2008
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I like this, teh cyclic implication by teh repeated open and closing stanzas; the repetition to propell forward.
From time to years becoming more detiled as the memory is focused. . . places, regrets then faces.
The instances of feelings. . . then the driving stanza:
"At every curve
At every bend
The lines of truth
Merge and intersect
With no discernible end".
I liked these parts, I felt others could be made tighter and more raw than flowery poetics to fit the tone more.
Overall, I liked it though. It evoked universal feelings.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2008
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Hello! Wasn't going for "tighter or more raw" and I am not sure what you mean by "flowery poetics," but thanks for stopping by diane
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I respect that. . . your aim was more emotional expression than artistry(?) I guess that's what I mean by flowery poetics. . . parts were emotional expression sans overarching artisitc elements but the poem had pleanty of artistic spots, just a few areas reverted to emotional appeal. . . overall an enjoyable read just trying to offer minor suggestions of improvement as per reviewing standards :)
Comment from lawriemac
So very good.
Starting afresh, leaving old memories behind.
You have a way with words tyhat I can only dream of having.
Another gifted poem from a gifted writer.
I cannot recommend anything that would enhance this poem, it is a great piece of poetic artistry.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2008
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So very good.
Starting afresh, leaving old memories behind.
You have a way with words tyhat I can only dream of having.
Another gifted poem from a gifted writer.
I cannot recommend anything that would enhance this poem, it is a great piece of poetic artistry.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2008
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So pleased that you enjoyed my offering; thank you for stopping by. I also appreciate your kind words. Take Care...diane
Comment from EricMentzer
This is a poem that really makes you think. It seems at though you are giving up yet letting go. Or maybe you are using your memories to keep things fresh. I hope I got the meaning that you intended with this. It is always interesting to read free verse.
Great Job,
Eric
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This is a poem that really makes you think. It seems at though you are giving up yet letting go. Or maybe you are using your memories to keep things fresh. I hope I got the meaning that you intended with this. It is always interesting to read free verse.
Great Job,
Eric
Comment Written 23-Jul-2008
Comment from nitad
But hanging onto the past
Is like trying to capture
A mirror's reflection
Or hold back fallen tears;
- Great writing! These four lines nailed me...
I was reading it aloud before I saw your author's notes and I can see why you recommend it. A thought, provoking poem that should resonate with many.
Well done!
Nita
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2008
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But hanging onto the past
Is like trying to capture
A mirror's reflection
Or hold back fallen tears;
- Great writing! These four lines nailed me...
I was reading it aloud before I saw your author's notes and I can see why you recommend it. A thought, provoking poem that should resonate with many.
Well done!
Nita
Comment Written 23-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2008
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Hey Nita! I love to read poetry aloud - just sounds better! Thank you so much for your kind review and for stopping by...diane
Comment from boberto
Ah, cast away the old---bring on the new. Think I'd try it on a better day and highway. Not sure how well the verse
fits the artwork---not for me to judge. But, I like the verse.
The words express emotion. Luck in the contest.
boberto
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Ah, cast away the old---bring on the new. Think I'd try it on a better day and highway. Not sure how well the verse
fits the artwork---not for me to judge. But, I like the verse.
The words express emotion. Luck in the contest.
boberto
Comment Written 23-Jul-2008
Comment from RaymondJohn
What a message. I wondered where you were going with it until the very end. I don't know if going it completely alone is the right answer, either. It's nice to have someone to talk to once in a while. Best. Ray.
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What a message. I wondered where you were going with it until the very end. I don't know if going it completely alone is the right answer, either. It's nice to have someone to talk to once in a while. Best. Ray.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2008
Comment from amadan01
This poem speaks to me of a brave person making difficult choices in order to grow and change. I like the metaphor of the drive as the journey and the thoughts as signposts in a way that could distract if allowed to. Very good.
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This poem speaks to me of a brave person making difficult choices in order to grow and change. I like the metaphor of the drive as the journey and the thoughts as signposts in a way that could distract if allowed to. Very good.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2008
