Comment from Nescher Pyscher

Good

I don't think I understood this, Al.

I'm guessing this is being written in one language and translated into English?

It reads like a stream-of-consciousness piece abot a tidal wave. Was that intentional?

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2006

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006

THANKS FOR FULLY PACKED UNWANTED ASSUMPTIONS, GUESSES OR PRESUMPTIONS I DO NOT GENERALLY ENCOURAGE, I AM SORRY YOU ARE ABSOLUTELY WRONG, THOUGH I NEVER WONDER.

Comment from GregoryC

Excellent

Fine meter and thoughts conveyed in a short but power-packed poem. You bring to life the "...fading ol' dark days." Nicely done.

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2006

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006

THANKS A LOT FOR THIS NICE REVIEW I DO APPRECIATE.

Comment from Ambrosia_Babe

Excellent

Whilst this poem displays technical expertise and is true to form-
I am afraid that I and a few others I have polled, have no idea what it is actually trying to say, as it makes no sense ( to we the polled).

Therefore in writing this revised review, I make note of the fact that whilst technical skill is without exception, it is redundant given that the poem is senseless.

Perhaps a narrative in the comments section would assist the masses like myself to understand and comprehend what it is you are trying to express.

Regards AB :)

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2006

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006

THANKS FOR ASSUMPTIVE REVIEW.

reply by Ambrosia_Babe on 19-Aug-2006

hi Al,

Honest injuins, I asked four other people independantly if they understood the poem, and all said very similar things that were negative by way of understanding. Two of them reviewers in the top 50.

Im sorry you don't like my review, but that is the truth and as the reviewer that is my call to make. I have reviewed other poems you have written and not had any problem understanding them. This one is just- not one of them.


Maybe if reviewers were more honest about the works they review instead of being sycophants, you would get a few more truths, other than just mine to have to contend with.

Regards AB :)

reply by the author on 20-Aug-2006

Never mind, it happens. Thanks.

Comment from Kingsland

Good

although you have a fairly goodpiece of poetry here
it really was hard to find a good flow in the piece
that is why I gave it four stars
this was my pleasure to read and review... John

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2006

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006

THANKS.

Comment from chelsmor

Excellent

Faiths find sunshine glow sprout genes

I love that line the most. This to me is a poem of hurricane strength, nature's power at reducing man and his home to slivers, but hope dawns again with the passing of the storm. Well written with perfect accompanying illustration.
I look forward to looking at the rest of the book.

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2006

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006

THANKS A LOT FOR THIS PROFESSIONAL REVIEW I DO APPRECIATE MUCH.

THANK YOU ONCE AGAIN FOR SHOWING YOUR INTEREST IN MY WORKS.

Comment from mayflowerbg

Excellent

Hi, ACW!

A wave strikes, kills people and destroys;
C alamity over, life begins its cycle again;
W riters and poets remember and sing.

Interesting format, waka-like.

M.

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2006

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006

THANKS A LOT FOR THIS NICE ACROSTIC AND POETIC REVIEW I APPRECIATE VERY MUCH.

Comment from qmusnsailor

Excellent

I really love your concept of 57575777. It really flows nicely and makes perfect sense to me. I continue to hope that I will read more of your works in the future.

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2006

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006

THANKS FOR THIS REVIEW.

THANK YOU ONCE AGAIN FOR SHOWING YOUR INTEREST IN MY WORKS.

Comment from empress2k

Excellent

A some what abstract nevertheless great poem. I had to read it a few times to get into it. Which is fine. Very interesting style of writing. Much told in just a few lines.

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2006

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006

THANKS A LOT FOR THIS REVIEW I DO APPRECIAT MUCH.

Comment from DLHenderson

Good

I immediately see that this is technically a quality work.

I like how you start the poem strong, and i really like the way it picks up steam.

Especialy the lines
"Marooned hearts cry help for hours.
Calm now, see day light."

The more i read this poem the more i enjoy the lyrical quality and the emotions you put out there.

I can't however get past the second to last line.

"Faiths find sunshine glow sprout genes."

It breaks up the really nice rythm you've made and it leads us in a direction i'm not sure the poem wanted to go.

Don't get me wrong, i really enjoyed this song, but this line just chops it up too much for me.

Daniel

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2006

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006

THANKS.

Comment from azulazul

Good

ALCREATOR WRITER,
Welllllllll, you have a good poem,
short and powerful
I think that you need commas some
where to make sense of it all.
It will be heard to read as is.
Cheers,
Azulazul

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2006

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006

THANK YOU.