The Honey-Do-List
It takes teamwork...63 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
Ha, what a fun poem this is, Bill. I really enjoyed the circularity of your poem and how what started out to be time of leisure ended up being a lot more work than planned for, so back to work you go.
Excellent social commentary, and a fun read today.
Gloria
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2020
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Ha, what a fun poem this is, Bill. I really enjoyed the circularity of your poem and how what started out to be time of leisure ended up being a lot more work than planned for, so back to work you go.
Excellent social commentary, and a fun read today.
Gloria
Comment Written 17-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2020
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Hello Gloria,
Thank you for your review, I appreciate it.
I basically wrote this poem in anticipation that it could possibly be of some benefit to those men that are considering retirement in the near future. I have been retired for many years.
I read that a large percentage of divorces happen shortly after the man retires due to many different factors. It's a sad situation.
Thanks again...Bill
Comment from Diana L Crawford
Ha! This is a very cute satire poem about the woeful side of retirement! Pretty sad when you're happier at work! LoL!
Thanks for sharing!!
xoxo
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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Ha! This is a very cute satire poem about the woeful side of retirement! Pretty sad when you're happier at work! LoL!
Thanks for sharing!!
xoxo
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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Hello Diana,
Thanks for your comments, I appreciate it. It is as you said and from what I have read and seen in my community there are "many" that are happier at work. And, many of those that do take early retirement end in divorce within 2 years according to what the experts say.
Take care Diana...Bill
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Yikes! LoL! That?s horrible! I had no idea. :)
Comment from BeasPeas
This is so true. Most of the time now-a-days the woman has two jobs, although it IS getting better. I see it with my kids. Husbands are more willing to help around the house. Carrying our own weight in a relationship sure does smooth ruffled feathers. Have fun in your retirement and give the lady a helping hand. Marilyn
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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This is so true. Most of the time now-a-days the woman has two jobs, although it IS getting better. I see it with my kids. Husbands are more willing to help around the house. Carrying our own weight in a relationship sure does smooth ruffled feathers. Have fun in your retirement and give the lady a helping hand. Marilyn
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2020
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Hello Marilyn,
Thank you for your excellent review and insight on this matter. As you said, it's just a matter of working as a team and helping one another as much as possible.
Have a great day my friend...Bill
Comment from Lil' Mormon Boy
Bill, I dearly loved the Storyline of this poem, because frankly, I am getting ready to retire at the end of this year.
Your poem, for me, was sometimes hard to read because the rhythm was pretty choppy. The rhymes were good and I didn't think they sounded forced. But I truly think, with a little work, it could be a masterpiece.
Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2020
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Bill, I dearly loved the Storyline of this poem, because frankly, I am getting ready to retire at the end of this year.
Your poem, for me, was sometimes hard to read because the rhythm was pretty choppy. The rhymes were good and I didn't think they sounded forced. But I truly think, with a little work, it could be a masterpiece.
Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2020
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Thank you for your great review and I agree with you completely.
It is choppy in a few stanzas. I knew that going in but I just couldn't pull the words out. I have changed it a little since your review.
Actually, I wrote this one for fun. I retired 19 years ago from Fort Knox. I built a woodworking shop in my backyard one year before I retired and I have spent many hours there in the past years especially during the winter months. That shop has probably saved my marriage of 53 years. It allows both of us to have some "alone time."
I wish you the best of luck in your retirement. However, please remember those two words above "alone time." LOL...Take care and God bless you...Bill
Comment from nomi338
Amen brother! My wife retired a few months before me and we were both sick and tired of the grind. My job was relatively easy and stress free, but after some fifty years of working, even the easist job was too much, or so I thought. We carefully planned things out so that we could handle the financial part of things, then the grand children fell on hard times and decided that living with grandma and grand pa was a pretty good idea. I am just about ready to rejoin the work force.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2020
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Amen brother! My wife retired a few months before me and we were both sick and tired of the grind. My job was relatively easy and stress free, but after some fifty years of working, even the easist job was too much, or so I thought. We carefully planned things out so that we could handle the financial part of things, then the grand children fell on hard times and decided that living with grandma and grand pa was a pretty good idea. I am just about ready to rejoin the work force.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2020
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Hello Nomi,
Thank you my friend for your wonderful review and rating, I appreciate it very much.
Believe me brother, I hear what you're saying. Retirement isn't for everybody, after awhile it gets old. Especially, when the bills start to pile up and you ain't got the cash to cover them.
Besides that, I've always believed that if a man has his health and he wants to work then he should regardless of his age.
Take care of yourself, my friend and have a great week...Bill
Comment from Craigitar
Ha ha! I like this. Fortunately, I managed to retire and remain mostly unmolested by my wife--I say 'mostly' because every once in a while she comes up with a 'Honey-do' that cuts into my life of leisure. However, I've heard of the exact situation you've so well penned here. Great writing, pleasurable and entertaining poem!
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2020
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Ha ha! I like this. Fortunately, I managed to retire and remain mostly unmolested by my wife--I say 'mostly' because every once in a while she comes up with a 'Honey-do' that cuts into my life of leisure. However, I've heard of the exact situation you've so well penned here. Great writing, pleasurable and entertaining poem!
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2020
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Thank you for your excellent review, I appreciate it. Good luck to you in your retirement. I've managed to survive 18 years of retirement, so far.
You'll do fine as long as you don't let that "honey-do-list" turn into a "Oh no-you don't-list." That sure cuts down on the activities that us guys enjoy most...LOL...Thanks again...Bill
Comment from royowen
We've managed to work out our space, although Elaine retired earlier than me, by the time I retired, she had her post retirement activities all worked out, but I've well and truly worked, and we have similar interests, but not the same. A very wonderful and lighthearted way of looking at things Bill, excellent writing my friend, great work, articulate, smooth and abcb rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2020
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We've managed to work out our space, although Elaine retired earlier than me, by the time I retired, she had her post retirement activities all worked out, but I've well and truly worked, and we have similar interests, but not the same. A very wonderful and lighthearted way of looking at things Bill, excellent writing my friend, great work, articulate, smooth and abcb rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2020
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Hello Roy,
Thank you Roy for your great review, I appreciate it.
Retirement can be a wonderful thing if everything is planned out well ahead of time, especially your finances. However, I have several friends that have retired and discovered it just wasn't for them or their wives so they went back to work.
Thank you Roy for your thoughts...God bless you and your family during all these trying times. For your country, first the fires and now this Corona-virus...God help us all...Bill
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Thank you Bil, and for your country,
Comment from l.raven
Hi Bill, LMBO you....I can see it now...you on the couch...and her on the war path...I think it's hard
when things change like that...couples get into a routine..and after so many years...it hard to break...
it's like the parts of a machine...they work fine until
something changes in them...and it messes up the works...LOL...your too funny...I love your poem sweet guy...and truly the perfect picture...well done my sweet friend...love Linda xxoo
well!!!..I am now in Florida...mom should be home and out of rehab tomorrow...they won't let anyone go in the place....and I don't blame them...it's all old people...
my eyes are doing better...first surgery is healing...but it's taking it's time...but the doc said to limit my reading for awhile...so I do take long breaks from it...I finally posted something...yeahhhhhh....want to get back to it...but it may take some time...so how are you doing?...getting ready to move out?...LOL...I hope your having better weather...it's hot down here...well...take care and stay safe...xxoo
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2020
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Hi Bill, LMBO you....I can see it now...you on the couch...and her on the war path...I think it's hard
when things change like that...couples get into a routine..and after so many years...it hard to break...
it's like the parts of a machine...they work fine until
something changes in them...and it messes up the works...LOL...your too funny...I love your poem sweet guy...and truly the perfect picture...well done my sweet friend...love Linda xxoo
well!!!..I am now in Florida...mom should be home and out of rehab tomorrow...they won't let anyone go in the place....and I don't blame them...it's all old people...
my eyes are doing better...first surgery is healing...but it's taking it's time...but the doc said to limit my reading for awhile...so I do take long breaks from it...I finally posted something...yeahhhhhh....want to get back to it...but it may take some time...so how are you doing?...getting ready to move out?...LOL...I hope your having better weather...it's hot down here...well...take care and stay safe...xxoo
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2020
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Well Hello Girl Friend,
It's been a very long time since we have reviewed each others poems and I have really missed that.
Thank you for your wonderful review and rating, you know I appreciate it. It's been so long since I've posted anything I almost forgot how to do it...LOL...I'm glad it made you laugh.
Thanks again my friend...I will send you a PM...Take care of your eyes girl...Bill
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Hey You, so good to hear from you...the post I just put out...was my first this year...but I love your poems...they make me laugh...I keep going back and rereading them...LOL...last night I read a little longer...and my eye started hurting...so I will have to do like the doc said...for a short while...and stop...well...we take at you soon..pm...you take care...and you are so welcome...love to ya...xxoo
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
The Honey-Do-List
by Cedar
Hello my friend
LoL poor thing..I can't blame him for going back to work. What a nightmare. She is the wife from hell. Well done.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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The Honey-Do-List
by Cedar
Hello my friend
LoL poor thing..I can't blame him for going back to work. What a nightmare. She is the wife from hell. Well done.
Gypsy
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Hello Gypsy,
I thank you for your great review and I'm glad you got a giggle from it. Have a great week...Bill
Comment from joycetreasures
Cedar,
Your poem, "Honey Do List" is very funny, yet I can see why anyone would return to work. Yes, most of us look forward to retirement, including me (8 years). I like how you made your poetry lines rhyme. Your image for your poem is on point. Your poem structure was good and I didn't see any needed revisions. I felt your pain. Also, I enjoyed reading this one. Good job.
Keep writing:-)
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Cedar,
Your poem, "Honey Do List" is very funny, yet I can see why anyone would return to work. Yes, most of us look forward to retirement, including me (8 years). I like how you made your poetry lines rhyme. Your image for your poem is on point. Your poem structure was good and I didn't see any needed revisions. I felt your pain. Also, I enjoyed reading this one. Good job.
Keep writing:-)
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2020
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Hello Joy,
I actually wrote this poem many years ago. I've been retired for 19 years now due to (in part) to being diagnosed with MG which is basically the same as MS.
Have a great week my friend...Bill
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Hi Bill,
You have a good week also. Stay safe.
