The Apple Path
The path to the orchard.50 total reviews
Comment from Tootsie55
This was a good read and I loved the layout and picture. Wish you well in the contest. One question...I bought a peck...what is a peck also should it be b(r)ought
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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This was a good read and I loved the layout and picture. Wish you well in the contest. One question...I bought a peck...what is a peck also should it be b(r)ought
Comment Written 26-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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Thank you so much for the marvelous review and generous six stars, dear Louise. I put a note at the bottom of the page in authors note, a peck is approximately 12 pounds of apples. I would pay the orchard owner and lug them home after picking them myself. From there, I made pies and applesauce. Im so pleased you enjoyed my Apple Path story in a poem.
Sending you and Geoff my best today as always,
Sal xoxo
Comment from Michele Harber
This is a sweet and pleasant poem and, having just taken my first-ever apple-picking trip this month, I fully understand the lure of the orchard (and the fresh-baked pie to follow). Your rhymes and near rhymes work. However, in the second stanza, you rhymed the first, second and fourth lines. The minute you rhyme the first two lines, it sets up an expectation for the next two lines to rhyme with one another as well. To avoid that, and get back to the abab pattern you'd established in the rest of the poem, you just need to change "was I," in the first line of the stanza, to "I was." That way, the only expectation is for the second and fourth lines to rhyme, which they do. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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This is a sweet and pleasant poem and, having just taken my first-ever apple-picking trip this month, I fully understand the lure of the orchard (and the fresh-baked pie to follow). Your rhymes and near rhymes work. However, in the second stanza, you rhymed the first, second and fourth lines. The minute you rhyme the first two lines, it sets up an expectation for the next two lines to rhyme with one another as well. To avoid that, and get back to the abab pattern you'd established in the rest of the poem, you just need to change "was I," in the first line of the stanza, to "I was." That way, the only expectation is for the second and fourth lines to rhyme, which they do. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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Thank you for the excellent review and helpful critique, Michelle. It is so appreciated. Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
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You're very welcome, Sally, and my best to you as well.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This made me think of my maternal grandmother, when she was alive, and her best recipe ever for shredded apple pies. I think with these lines: A girl on a strategic mission, was I,
apples were calling, their taunting reply.
I would try it this way:
A girl on a strategic mission was I;
apples were calling a taunting reply.
Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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This made me think of my maternal grandmother, when she was alive, and her best recipe ever for shredded apple pies. I think with these lines: A girl on a strategic mission, was I,
apples were calling, their taunting reply.
I would try it this way:
A girl on a strategic mission was I;
apples were calling a taunting reply.
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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Thank you, dear Crystal . You?re a smart cookie. I appreciate the excellent review and helpful critique. I have employed them and it looks great. Thanks, again.
Sal xo
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You're welcome :D
Comment from Bill Pinder
Thanks for sharing this poem about making a prize-winning apple pie for the fair. Sounds like that might be based on an actual experience. I'll bet that pie was very good!
Bill
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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Thanks for sharing this poem about making a prize-winning apple pie for the fair. Sounds like that might be based on an actual experience. I'll bet that pie was very good!
Bill
Comment Written 26-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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Aren?t apple pies just the best. I?m plotting one right now. Thanks for the wonderful review and kind compliments. It is so appreciated.
Sending you my best today as well,
Sal :+)
Comment from Sara R.
I love this poem. Perfect for this time of the season. I want to go home and gather some apples and bake one. I hope you can bake one soon too. My family and I will be going to an apple orchard soon. Can't wait.
Sara R.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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I love this poem. Perfect for this time of the season. I want to go home and gather some apples and bake one. I hope you can bake one soon too. My family and I will be going to an apple orchard soon. Can't wait.
Sara R.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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Thank you, dear Sara. I?m so glad you enjoyed my tribute to apples and contest entry. It is so appreciated.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xo
Comment from robyn corum
Sally,
What a fabulous 'take a walk' poem. hahaha Though I'm not sure it's fair for you to enter the contest you INSPIRED! hahahaha
That's quite an achievement, you know. *smile*
This was a lot of fun! Thanks!
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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Sally,
What a fabulous 'take a walk' poem. hahaha Though I'm not sure it's fair for you to enter the contest you INSPIRED! hahahaha
That's quite an achievement, you know. *smile*
This was a lot of fun! Thanks!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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Thank you, Robin. I?m so glad you enjoyed my tribute to apples and apple pie. It is so appreciated.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xo
Comment from lyenochka
Loved your apple story poem! Not only did you give us the story of an apple picking adventure which was rewarded with pie, you also made me think of the path of life on earth and how rewarding it is to give thanks to God and receive His prize in Heaven.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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Loved your apple story poem! Not only did you give us the story of an apple picking adventure which was rewarded with pie, you also made me think of the path of life on earth and how rewarding it is to give thanks to God and receive His prize in Heaven.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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So true. We lived in New York and I picked apples every year and made pies and sauce. I miss it so. The orchard I visited regularly went on and on. It was hard to find my way back. Thank you for the lovely review. I wish you apples.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xo
Comment from Gail Denham
Super and you're smart to make use of that second pie. I often end up with two pies and have to find someone to give the second pie - to. We cannot eat that much pie. I chop up some apples and freeze them - thus have enough for more pies. I make a great crust (recipe from an older grandma of a friend) - it gets rave reviews - but those come from folks who like pie.
Very nice pie - makes my mouth water.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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Super and you're smart to make use of that second pie. I often end up with two pies and have to find someone to give the second pie - to. We cannot eat that much pie. I chop up some apples and freeze them - thus have enough for more pies. I make a great crust (recipe from an older grandma of a friend) - it gets rave reviews - but those come from folks who like pie.
Very nice pie - makes my mouth water.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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Thank you, Gail. I?m glad you enjoyed my apple tribute and contest entry. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xo
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your poem is very well-written, descriptive, and delightful. Your smoothly flowing creation tells a charming story of acquiring the apples, using them wisely, then the reward--a ribbon-winning pie.
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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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Your poem is very well-written, descriptive, and delightful. Your smoothly flowing creation tells a charming story of acquiring the apples, using them wisely, then the reward--a ribbon-winning pie.
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Comment Written 26-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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Thank you, Janice dear. I?m so appreciative of the wonderful review and kind compliments. It means so much to me.
Sal xo
Comment from country ranch writer
Apples sure are delicious any way they are prepared. I love apple pie too so good and yummy when made into apple pies and applesauce.
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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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Apples sure are delicious any way they are prepared. I love apple pie too so good and yummy when made into apple pies and applesauce.
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Comment Written 26-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2019
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Amen. We share a deep bond. Apple pie is the world best comfort food. Thanks so much for the kind review. May apple pie be yours,
Sal xo
