The Gardens at Weatherbury
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written chapter about meeting the management that is in charge of the maintenance of the garden at Weatherbury, it seems it will be an interesting task for the young Nicholas.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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A very well-written chapter about meeting the management that is in charge of the maintenance of the garden at Weatherbury, it seems it will be an interesting task for the young Nicholas.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Hooray! ;) ;) So glad you enjoyed this one, Sandra - we'll see what else is in store for Nicholas (and the garden inhabitants)! ;) :) LOL! Yvette
Comment from Alex Rosel
I like this. The prose flows with an easy style, and it doesn't contain any superfluous "word fluff" :)
Here are a few points you might like to consider:
He raised an eyebrow at my eagerness to accept the key. -- To me, this seems misplaced in the narrative since it has been stated Sir Phillipe has already handed you the key. At this point, I would think you'd be displaying excitement at having the key, not eagerness to accept it.
piercing green eyes pinned me with a gimlet stare -- I like this description. Very effective :)
But the further I went, the more I just kept walking, -- This is a picky point. Farther applies to physical distance, and further applies to metaphorical distance. In this case, since you are actually walking, farther is applicable.
I look forward to reading more -- and fantasy isn't a favored genre of mine!
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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I like this. The prose flows with an easy style, and it doesn't contain any superfluous "word fluff" :)
Here are a few points you might like to consider:
He raised an eyebrow at my eagerness to accept the key. -- To me, this seems misplaced in the narrative since it has been stated Sir Phillipe has already handed you the key. At this point, I would think you'd be displaying excitement at having the key, not eagerness to accept it.
piercing green eyes pinned me with a gimlet stare -- I like this description. Very effective :)
But the further I went, the more I just kept walking, -- This is a picky point. Farther applies to physical distance, and further applies to metaphorical distance. In this case, since you are actually walking, farther is applicable.
I look forward to reading more -- and fantasy isn't a favored genre of mine!
Comment Written 16-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Thanx for the review and the input, Alex, always so very appreciated!! ;) ;) Touched up those two issues. :) ;) Glad you're looking forward to more -- Nicholas and Constantine (and Rosa!) are glad to have you on-board! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment from Sylvia Page
Hello Yvette.
I have to go back and read from the beginning I feel. Why didn't Sir Phillipe detail his work? Was he aware that the gnome loved to play tricks on the groundskeepers? Maybe that is how he decides who is best for the job. I can see that this is going to be full of adventure in the later chapters. You did a good job building the background.
Best,
Sylvia
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Hello Yvette.
I have to go back and read from the beginning I feel. Why didn't Sir Phillipe detail his work? Was he aware that the gnome loved to play tricks on the groundskeepers? Maybe that is how he decides who is best for the job. I can see that this is going to be full of adventure in the later chapters. You did a good job building the background.
Best,
Sylvia
Comment Written 16-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Ahhhh...all very good questions, Sylvia! And I look forward to exploring all of them as our story continues... :) :) Thanx for stopping in for the review and would love for you to read the prologue and then jump on board! ;) ;) Take care! ;) ;) Yvette :)
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Just read the prologue ...
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Intriguing. So the gnome still hinks he's the groundskeeper. Doesn't he know Nick has been hired to replace him? Or is that why he's giving him a hard time, making things disappear, etc.? I normally don't read fantasy, but the gnome has got me curious. :)
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Intriguing. So the gnome still hinks he's the groundskeeper. Doesn't he know Nick has been hired to replace him? Or is that why he's giving him a hard time, making things disappear, etc.? I normally don't read fantasy, but the gnome has got me curious. :)
Comment Written 16-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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naaaah -- I re-phrased that so that it is clearer, Phyllis (thanx for letting me know it did not read as I intended!) ... Nicholas is the Groundskeeper... Constantine just helps with 'garden management' - LOL! ;) ;) Thanx for the review, ma'am!! ;) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from barkingdog
Isn't this going to be fun? A gnome, a thorny bush that can grasp a person to stop them from entering the garden and joy that G. Thrasher is gone.
Lots to wonder why about. Thus reason to keep reading.
Curiosity aroused.
:) e
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Isn't this going to be fun? A gnome, a thorny bush that can grasp a person to stop them from entering the garden and joy that G. Thrasher is gone.
Lots to wonder why about. Thus reason to keep reading.
Curiosity aroused.
:) e
Comment Written 15-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Hooray for the arousal of curiosity!! ;) ;) So glad you enjoyed this one, Ellen -- please know that Nicholas and Constantine (oh, and Rosa!!) do so appreciate your support! ;) Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Janilou
What a fascinating story. I will have to go back and read the rest of the book. Your story pulled me right in. Well done. I didn't see any errors or edits needed. Loved the artwork. A perfect match!
Great story.
All the best,
Jan
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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What a fascinating story. I will have to go back and read the rest of the book. Your story pulled me right in. Well done. I didn't see any errors or edits needed. Loved the artwork. A perfect match!
Great story.
All the best,
Jan
Comment Written 15-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Thanx so much for this awesome review, Jan, and I'm so very glad it seems to have 'hit home' with you!! ;) ;) Have a great week ahead! ;) ;)
Comment from Brenda Henderson
I love this. It has great potential to become a series of classic children's books. It is whimsical and funny and quite a charming and engaging read. I can already hear children everywhere pleading to be read the next chapter! Excellent story!
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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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I love this. It has great potential to become a series of classic children's books. It is whimsical and funny and quite a charming and engaging read. I can already hear children everywhere pleading to be read the next chapter! Excellent story!
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Comment Written 15-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Hooray! :) So glad you enjoyed this one, Brenda -- your support is greatly appreciated! ;) ;) Yvette
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You're Welcome Yvette!
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Yvette. So now we have something a little different from the last few writings from your "pen." As I am reading this phrase popped up: "how hard could it be to water plants?" It occurred to me if that question popped up, it must be harder than I thought. I also had this thought. Anyone can WRITE a story if they know some English words. "Creating" a story is quite a different deal. Knowing English is just not enough. I hope your son didn't have too rough a time at the dentist today. Z
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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Hello Yvette. So now we have something a little different from the last few writings from your "pen." As I am reading this phrase popped up: "how hard could it be to water plants?" It occurred to me if that question popped up, it must be harder than I thought. I also had this thought. Anyone can WRITE a story if they know some English words. "Creating" a story is quite a different deal. Knowing English is just not enough. I hope your son didn't have too rough a time at the dentist today. Z
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Comment Written 15-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Thanx for asking, Z -- was a rough day yesterday (in addition to wisdoms, they had to dig out an 'unerupted' baby tooth that had begun pushing up in the front lower jaw) he was pretty miserable, but, thankfully, he seems to be a bit more 'movable' today... :) :) Still on only soft stuff, but he can focus and stuff... :) :)
And thanx for this review -- glad you find this one a bit interesting! ;) :) Take care out there and have a wonderful week! :) Yvette
