In Ivy
a ghazal61 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
Hi Andre, this was a lovely love poem using the ivy, a plant I love myself. It's an unusual form your poem, but I liked it a lot. I know this is not a satisfactory review, but the truth is that I don't know a lot about poetry. I wish you good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Hi Andre, this was a lovely love poem using the ivy, a plant I love myself. It's an unusual form your poem, but I liked it a lot. I know this is not a satisfactory review, but the truth is that I don't know a lot about poetry. I wish you good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Thank you, Ulla, for your satisfactory review of this unusual form of poetry and for wishing me the best in the contest. I love ivy!
Comment from Hitcher
This one made me smile friend, You have introduced a new form of poetry to me so thank you for that. You have managed to write a love poem and include an image of a dog avoid crapping on the grass (hence my smile). Definitely a poem that should hold its own stand out. Good look mate : ))
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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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This one made me smile friend, You have introduced a new form of poetry to me so thank you for that. You have managed to write a love poem and include an image of a dog avoid crapping on the grass (hence my smile). Definitely a poem that should hold its own stand out. Good look mate : ))
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Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Thank you, Hitcher, for your review. I hated as a kid stepping in dog crap in the ivy. Even today, so many dog walkers have dogs do their business in neighbors' ivy and that homeowners have put up KEEP OFF signs around their ivy. I'm glad my poem made you smile.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
I loved this and find ivy very beautiful despite having run ins with poison ivy! This is a wonderful work as I would expect from you, wonderful Ghazal, I am very impressed kindest regards Meia xx
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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I loved this and find ivy very beautiful despite having run ins with poison ivy! This is a wonderful work as I would expect from you, wonderful Ghazal, I am very impressed kindest regards Meia xx
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Thank you, Meia, for your review! I miss the ivy that grew in my front yard of my Reseda, CA home forty years ago. Thanks again.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt Ghazal. Love starts at home from a young age. When children don't learn to love, they will not be able to love in the right way when they're grown.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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A very well-written heartfelt Ghazal. Love starts at home from a young age. When children don't learn to love, they will not be able to love in the right way when they're grown.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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That's right, Sandra, love starts at home. Thank you for your review of my heart-felt Ghazal.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Sis, a well written set of couplets forming a ghazal, a form I jave not heard of. Although some of the couplets are not terribly romantic for a love poem, your lat two couplets are most appropriate.
"A hastily picked Mother's Day bouquet:
a calla lily entwined in ivy."
Mom grasps the gift. "Nothing is as pretty,
'Dre, as a posy embraced in ivy."................. Having said that, you do specifically say it is a Love of Ivy. Subtle. Well written and good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Hi Sis, a well written set of couplets forming a ghazal, a form I jave not heard of. Although some of the couplets are not terribly romantic for a love poem, your lat two couplets are most appropriate.
"A hastily picked Mother's Day bouquet:
a calla lily entwined in ivy."
Mom grasps the gift. "Nothing is as pretty,
'Dre, as a posy embraced in ivy."................. Having said that, you do specifically say it is a Love of Ivy. Subtle. Well written and good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Thank you, Dorothy, for your review and for wishing me good luck in the contest. With ivy, both the romantic and the unromantic are tangled in it. Thanks.
Comment from apky
Although I'm a lover of reading poems, I'm no poet and lack all the nuances and craft tips to offer to you. But you're such an accomplished poet, you probably need no assistance, from what I've read so far.
Your Ivy Love poem was well suited to the ghazal lyric poem with the fixed number of verses and the repeated rhyme. And as is typical of the ghazal, you chose the theme of love between a mother and child. This could even fit in if set to music.
Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Although I'm a lover of reading poems, I'm no poet and lack all the nuances and craft tips to offer to you. But you're such an accomplished poet, you probably need no assistance, from what I've read so far.
Your Ivy Love poem was well suited to the ghazal lyric poem with the fixed number of verses and the repeated rhyme. And as is typical of the ghazal, you chose the theme of love between a mother and child. This could even fit in if set to music.
Well done.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Oh, thank you, apky, for your review. There are poets today who put their ghazals to music. Thanks for the suggestion.
Comment from rama devi
Well done. Touching emotional overtones. Fine use of internal rhymes. Fine couplet style and flow. Fine presentation too. Dialog-driven style is unique and well done. Mom must've loved it!
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Well done. Touching emotional overtones. Fine use of internal rhymes. Fine couplet style and flow. Fine presentation too. Dialog-driven style is unique and well done. Mom must've loved it!
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Oh, thank you, Rama, for your review. I wish my mother was still alive to read my poem.
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She can read it over your shoulder from the subtle realms, dear friend! :-)))
Comment from RGstar
Not your typical love poem, but I am giving this a six for innovation. Love the short bursts, and the repeating of Ivy, works to a key.
Bravo.
A lyrical poem indeed.
Good luck with this.
My best wishes.
RG
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Not your typical love poem, but I am giving this a six for innovation. Love the short bursts, and the repeating of Ivy, works to a key.
Bravo.
A lyrical poem indeed.
Good luck with this.
My best wishes.
RG
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Oh, thank you, RG, for your generous, six star review. I will continue exploring different poetic forms around the world. Thanks also for your best wishes.
Comment from mvbrooks
Fascinating poem form --thanks for introducing it.
A thought -- why does each set start with a quotation mark--but only the last two couplets have the closing quotation mark? Is this part of the poem's style requirements? thanks.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Fascinating poem form --thanks for introducing it.
A thought -- why does each set start with a quotation mark--but only the last two couplets have the closing quotation mark? Is this part of the poem's style requirements? thanks.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Thank you, mvbrooks, for your generous review. The quotation marks are to record the conversations of my mother. Usually in ghazals, the poet is doing the talking. In a contemporary example I read, the poet?s mother did the talking. The poet put quotation marks around her words to separate them from descriptions of her actions. Thanks again.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a good ghazal poem for the Love Poem contest.
Well written with a good message and the picture is beautiful and a perfect match.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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This is a good ghazal poem for the Love Poem contest.
Well written with a good message and the picture is beautiful and a perfect match.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Thank you, Sharon, for your review of my ghazal and wishing me good luck in the contest. I appreciate it.
