The Letter
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "The Letter - Part One"...a family saga
51 total reviews
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is a great beginning to a story Patty. Sadly too many people put off revealing their true feelings for someone until it is too late. I am hooked. I'm sure it will be very interesting. Nancy
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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This is a great beginning to a story Patty. Sadly too many people put off revealing their true feelings for someone until it is too late. I am hooked. I'm sure it will be very interesting. Nancy
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Hi Nancy; thank you so much for reading. I hope the rest of the story will continue to hold your attention,
~patty~
Comment from His Grayness
Wow, this is indeed "high impact" in content and overall subject matter. Certainly, it is very rare to read a story such as this and I'm delighted that some positive outcomes have been blessed upon this author. I hope my six stars continue to keep her smiling. I am! Blessings always: HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Wow, this is indeed "high impact" in content and overall subject matter. Certainly, it is very rare to read a story such as this and I'm delighted that some positive outcomes have been blessed upon this author. I hope my six stars continue to keep her smiling. I am! Blessings always: HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Hi Vance; thank you so much for the lovely review. I'm honored by your words and thoughts on this story. I hope you will continue to read as this piece moves along,
~patty~
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello my friend this is very well written you draw the readers in from the start the mystery of the letter delivered by special delivery and then what the letter contains I look forward to the next instalment I enjoyed regards Jill
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Hello my friend this is very well written you draw the readers in from the start the mystery of the letter delivered by special delivery and then what the letter contains I look forward to the next instalment I enjoyed regards Jill
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Hi Jill; thank you so much for the lovely review. I'm so glad you liked this installment, and I hope you will like what is still to come,
~patty~
Comment from bookishfabler
Seems more like she needs a glass of wine or a stiff drink other than coffee. Unless it's morning. I see you started writing about this woman who pissed everyone off. Good job
hugs Heidi
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Seems more like she needs a glass of wine or a stiff drink other than coffee. Unless it's morning. I see you started writing about this woman who pissed everyone off. Good job
hugs Heidi
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Hi Heidi; she is drinking coffee because its early, and...if you notice, my characters are always drinking coffee or tea. I'm not sure - maybe because I've always got a coffee cup in my hand. LOL!
~patty~
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
How strange is this! After all those years, she now tells you how she really felt about you. Some people have a lot to answer for the way they put their siblings down as it leaves scars in later life.
Is that the end of the story, or is it to continue, Patty.
"Sorry to disturb ya so early(,) ma'am.
and its been years since - it's
Blessings,
Margaret
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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How strange is this! After all those years, she now tells you how she really felt about you. Some people have a lot to answer for the way they put their siblings down as it leaves scars in later life.
Is that the end of the story, or is it to continue, Patty.
"Sorry to disturb ya so early(,) ma'am.
and its been years since - it's
Blessings,
Margaret
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Hi Margaret; thank you for reading and catching my nits. I've gone back and fixed them.
the story will continue, but each new story will be a different character (relative). I'm not sure how I will connect them all at this time, but eventually the mosaic of the pieces will make a whole.
Do you think I should add 'to be continued' to the end of this story?
~patty~
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Yes, then we'll know if there's going to be more.
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Done! Thanks for the tip
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written story and a lesson to all of us. Life is too short to live with bad feelings towards one another. Make peace with each other while we can. When one is dead it cannot be done.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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A very well-written story and a lesson to all of us. Life is too short to live with bad feelings towards one another. Make peace with each other while we can. When one is dead it cannot be done.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Hi Sandra; thank you so much for reading this piece. I'm glad you saw the lesson and appreciated the story line. I appreciate the encouraging review,
~patty~
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh I truly ;love it. This is the base of what could prove an interesting meeting of people and to find out why the mother in law felt she could not tell her sheloved her is to be discovered
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Oh I truly ;love it. This is the base of what could prove an interesting meeting of people and to find out why the mother in law felt she could not tell her sheloved her is to be discovered
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Hi Barb; thank you so much for the lovely review. I think the upcoming stories will be the different characters' reaction to the news and their thoughts - what do you think?
~patty~
Comment from c_lucas
It is far better to express your love when you are alive, than posthumously. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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It is far better to express your love when you are alive, than posthumously. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Hi there; thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your kind words of encouragement, and I'm glad you enjoyed the story,
~patty~
Comment from Rasmine
Hello,
I found a typo: Though my mother in law (mother-in-law) had money, she rarely shared with anyone, so I was confused, to say the least.
I liked this sentence: I wasn't bringing up the kids right; I didn't dress just so, and heaven forbid if I put on a few pounds!
TC
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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Hello,
I found a typo: Though my mother in law (mother-in-law) had money, she rarely shared with anyone, so I was confused, to say the least.
I liked this sentence: I wasn't bringing up the kids right; I didn't dress just so, and heaven forbid if I put on a few pounds!
TC
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Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Hi TC; thank you for stopping by to read and review. I've fixed the typo and I'm happy that you found the story entertaining.
I appreciate your positive and encouraging review,
~patty~
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Just goes to show that you can never truly know how other people view us. Interesting piece, peeking behind that curtain. Quite emotional too.
The sight of what looked like a policemen's cap - policeman's.
Whatever this was; it wasn't good. - you only need a comma here rather than a semi-colon.
Sorry to disturb ya' - you don't need the apostrophe here. It's a dialectal substitute rather than an abbreviation or contraction.
I don't rightly know, but if you'll sign here- this is a dialectal change from ya for you to you'll. Normally we don't do this when we have particular patterns.
Though my mother in law had money, - probably best to use the hyphenated mother-in-law here.
All the best
GMG
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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Hi there,
Just goes to show that you can never truly know how other people view us. Interesting piece, peeking behind that curtain. Quite emotional too.
The sight of what looked like a policemen's cap - policeman's.
Whatever this was; it wasn't good. - you only need a comma here rather than a semi-colon.
Sorry to disturb ya' - you don't need the apostrophe here. It's a dialectal substitute rather than an abbreviation or contraction.
I don't rightly know, but if you'll sign here- this is a dialectal change from ya for you to you'll. Normally we don't do this when we have particular patterns.
Though my mother in law had money, - probably best to use the hyphenated mother-in-law here.
All the best
GMG
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Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Hi GMG; I sincerely appreciate your thoughtful and concise review. I went and changed the nits, and I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
Thanks again, for your help,
~patty~
