The Dance
He took my hand and we began70 total reviews
Comment from MelB
Hi Janet, very nice abab rhyme, and ending in rhyming couplets. A wonderful poem about the dance. Sometimes, a girl does have to dream just a little bit!
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Hi Janet, very nice abab rhyme, and ending in rhyming couplets. A wonderful poem about the dance. Sometimes, a girl does have to dream just a little bit!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Thank you Mel for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from kahpot
An excellent poem great words with rhyme and flow telling of romance from start to marriage a great read and story thank you for sharing and good luck with your competition****kahpot
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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An excellent poem great words with rhyme and flow telling of romance from start to marriage a great read and story thank you for sharing and good luck with your competition****kahpot
Comment Written 24-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I greatly appreciate your comments.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from CD Richards
This is a lovely poem. It's probably just as well your real hubby can't dance. If he cooks, dresses well, and likes to shop, then you probably wouldn't have stood a chance; or so the theory goes!
The rhyme and rhythm are delightful, as is the story you tell. If I hadn't given away my last six in my last review, you would have had it. So sorry, but thanks for a really enjoyable sonnet, and best of luck in the contest. Craig
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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This is a lovely poem. It's probably just as well your real hubby can't dance. If he cooks, dresses well, and likes to shop, then you probably wouldn't have stood a chance; or so the theory goes!
The rhyme and rhythm are delightful, as is the story you tell. If I hadn't given away my last six in my last review, you would have had it. So sorry, but thanks for a really enjoyable sonnet, and best of luck in the contest. Craig
Comment Written 24-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Thank you Craig for your thoughtful and encouraging and fun review. I greatly appreciate your comments and the virtual six.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from WalkerMan
Yes, a long, happy relationship does in some ways resemble a dance, even if one or both partners literally cannot dance. Your sonnet expresses that very well.
The watermarked illustration, though apt, can bite you, however. It is what the paid image vending sites call a "comp image" disallowed for public display by their Terms of Service (ToS), which I know because I have purchased the royalty-free (RF) rights to use images in my book from Shutterstock and other such sites. If you found this image on a "free" image site, it was set apart from their free RF images because many "free" sites partner with the non-free ones to cover their expenses. In any case, you have two legal options -- purchase the rights to use the non-watermarked version of the image you chose, and credit it where used as that site requires, or find another of similar theme elsewhere. As it is their livelihood as well as source of compensation for their photographer members, paid image sites WILL prosecute image copyright violations (and that can be hugely expensive). Accordingly, please act on this warning before they do.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Yes, a long, happy relationship does in some ways resemble a dance, even if one or both partners literally cannot dance. Your sonnet expresses that very well.
The watermarked illustration, though apt, can bite you, however. It is what the paid image vending sites call a "comp image" disallowed for public display by their Terms of Service (ToS), which I know because I have purchased the royalty-free (RF) rights to use images in my book from Shutterstock and other such sites. If you found this image on a "free" image site, it was set apart from their free RF images because many "free" sites partner with the non-free ones to cover their expenses. In any case, you have two legal options -- purchase the rights to use the non-watermarked version of the image you chose, and credit it where used as that site requires, or find another of similar theme elsewhere. As it is their livelihood as well as source of compensation for their photographer members, paid image sites WILL prosecute image copyright violations (and that can be hugely expensive). Accordingly, please act on this warning before they do.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Thank you Mike for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I appreciate your comments and the watermarked illustration information concerns. The site I used said it was 'free' but I understand your concern and appreciate the photographer livelihood issue.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from nomi338
This poem resonates with me on so many levels. My wife who loved to dance never tried to dance professionally as women of short stature were discouraged from trying to become professionals back when she was young. I have two left feet and a very poor sense of rhythm. This is strange because I used to sing, even professionally for a short time. So you see, you and my wife have much in common, while your husband and I also have something in common.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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This poem resonates with me on so many levels. My wife who loved to dance never tried to dance professionally as women of short stature were discouraged from trying to become professionals back when she was young. I have two left feet and a very poor sense of rhythm. This is strange because I used to sing, even professionally for a short time. So you see, you and my wife have much in common, while your husband and I also have something in common.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I greatly appreciate your comments.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A very good poem. I notice that you write a lot of love poems. You must be a lucky lady to have someone in your life that inspires you so.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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A very good poem. I notice that you write a lot of love poems. You must be a lucky lady to have someone in your life that inspires you so.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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Thank you for you thoughtful and encouraging review.
I am a lucky lady -- he does inspire me and I like to think I inspire him. But like everyone else, we have our struggles to overcome.
Life is not perfect, but, life is good.
Blessings
Janet
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Comment from Vijay Kumar V
This is a beautiful phrase, "
We whirled around in harmony each day --
a symphony of wonder filled the skies."
I love the flow captivating the reader.
A great entry for the contest
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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This is a beautiful phrase, "
We whirled around in harmony each day --
a symphony of wonder filled the skies."
I love the flow captivating the reader.
A great entry for the contest
Comment Written 24-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
I greatly appreciate your comments.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Rlegel99
Poem about love using dance. This poem flows like one of those dances on the tv show. I give it a 9. The artwork works well with this piece. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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Poem about love using dance. This poem flows like one of those dances on the tv show. I give it a 9. The artwork works well with this piece. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. Hey...thanks for the 9. I am honored. haha
I greatly appreciate your comments.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a gorgeous love poem, Janet. The metaphor of love as a ballroom dance is perfect as a great synchronization is necessary in those oh so vigorous spins.
Excellent rhymes and imagery and I wish you all the best in the contest.
gloria
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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This is a gorgeous love poem, Janet. The metaphor of love as a ballroom dance is perfect as a great synchronization is necessary in those oh so vigorous spins.
Excellent rhymes and imagery and I wish you all the best in the contest.
gloria
Comment Written 24-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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Thank you Gloria for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
I greatly appreciate your comments and good wishes.
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Blessings
Janet
Comment from MsPetra
This is a very well written poem. I really liked the last two lines. You've done a great job with this. Please keep writing. I am looking forward to future offerings from you.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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This is a very well written poem. I really liked the last two lines. You've done a great job with this. Please keep writing. I am looking forward to future offerings from you.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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Thank you MsPetra for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
I greatly appreciate your comments.
Blessings
Janet
