For a Dream
Kyrielle Sonnet71 total reviews
Comment from Irish Rain
Well this is just lovely Miss Jeni. Bundling moonbeams for dreams!! I could use some of that magic tonight, (flu)...I've never written a Kyrielle sonnet, it's beautiful!!! Blessings...
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Well this is just lovely Miss Jeni. Bundling moonbeams for dreams!! I could use some of that magic tonight, (flu)...I've never written a Kyrielle sonnet, it's beautiful!!! Blessings...
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Thank you, dear Irish Rain. I'm happy that you liked this, and hope that you get over your flu in record time. Thank you for your support of my poetic efforts today.
Best,
jeni
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Thank you! Have a nice weekend!
Comment from Thal1959
Very good, Luna. The rhymes are very good, although some might point out a few are near rhymes, but that's OK with me because the work. The rhythm, a tetrameter, works well with once exception - "The moon protects world and its dreams," The MOON/proTECTS/world AND/its DREAMS. The third iam is clumsy because one has to enunciate "and" over the more dominant "world." But other than that, the whole work is fine.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Very good, Luna. The rhymes are very good, although some might point out a few are near rhymes, but that's OK with me because the work. The rhythm, a tetrameter, works well with once exception - "The moon protects world and its dreams," The MOON/proTECTS/world AND/its DREAMS. The third iam is clumsy because one has to enunciate "and" over the more dominant "world." But other than that, the whole work is fine.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Thanks for your review and honest comments, Thal. I appreciate what you pointed out to me, and am glad that you enjoyed the poem. Thank you for your support of my poetic efforts today.
Best,
jeni
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Always a pleasure, Luna.
Comment from kriver
Hi,
I think this is a nice poem.
It seems to flow smoothly.
I was glad for the author's
notes because I didn't know anything about this type of poetry.
Over all it is a good write.
Best regards,
K River
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Hi,
I think this is a nice poem.
It seems to flow smoothly.
I was glad for the author's
notes because I didn't know anything about this type of poetry.
Over all it is a good write.
Best regards,
K River
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much!
Best,
Luna
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
I like your refrain of "I bundle moonbeams for a dream." A clever turn of words. It speaks to your love of the moon and fantasy.
What is your story about why you like the moon so much? I admire you for having such a common thread throughout much of your work. I'm all over the place.
Lovely poem,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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I like your refrain of "I bundle moonbeams for a dream." A clever turn of words. It speaks to your love of the moon and fantasy.
What is your story about why you like the moon so much? I admire you for having such a common thread throughout much of your work. I'm all over the place.
Lovely poem,
Rhonda
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Rhonda, I am a Cancer and thus a moonchild. I have been obsessed with the moon all my life. I also like Greek and Roman mythology, and Luna is the name for the Roman Goddess of the moon. Hope this clears it up and I thank you so much.
Thank you for your support of my poetic efforts today.
Best,
jeni
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I was wondering if you were Cancer! Yes, I'm familiar with Greek and Roman mythology as well. No wonder I love your work so much. I'm Scorpio!
Comment from RobertaLee
Rather fascinating form I have not encountered before, and nicely presented. The first stanza was a bit difficult to catch the rhythm, and the first line of the last stanza is awkward enough to throw off the flow of the whole stanza.
This must have been a bit of work to get it right well done.
Smiles.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Rather fascinating form I have not encountered before, and nicely presented. The first stanza was a bit difficult to catch the rhythm, and the first line of the last stanza is awkward enough to throw off the flow of the whole stanza.
This must have been a bit of work to get it right well done.
Smiles.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Dear Roberta. I'm glad that you liked the form, and am sorry that you found the meter awkward. Yes, it was a bit of work. Thank you for your support of my poetic efforts today.
Best,
jeni
Comment from Dan-C
Sometimes i wish I could "bundle moonbeamsfor a dream" I look forward to reading your prose. I am blown away by your talent every time. Keep it up.
Dan
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Sometimes i wish I could "bundle moonbeamsfor a dream" I look forward to reading your prose. I am blown away by your talent every time. Keep it up.
Dan
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the compliments Dan, I'm so flattered I'm blushing right now! Thank you for your support of my poetic efforts today.
Best,
jeni
Comment from rjuselius
this is an exquisite piece of poetry dear jeni! a well formed land on poetically found miracle. as i have stated probably many times, is that i love your blessed fairytale creatures! nice one my friend!
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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this is an exquisite piece of poetry dear jeni! a well formed land on poetically found miracle. as i have stated probably many times, is that i love your blessed fairytale creatures! nice one my friend!
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Dearest bekka,
I'm glad that you enjoyed this poetry piece, dear. I do know that you love my fairytale creatures. Thank you for your support of my poetic efforts today.
Best,
jeni
Comment from Janet Foor
A lovey Kyrielle Sonnet Jeni. Vivid imagery of dreamlike magnitude. I enjoyed the ride with you through the night sky.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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A lovey Kyrielle Sonnet Jeni. Vivid imagery of dreamlike magnitude. I enjoyed the ride with you through the night sky.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Hi, Janet, thanks for the kind review. Thank you for your support of my poetic efforts today.
Best,
jeni
Comment from mbroyles2
"I bundle moonbeams for a dream"
Absolutely beautiful!
Such a wonderful portrayal of lovely fairies singing and exquisite nocturnal dreams.
A true joy to read.
Michael
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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"I bundle moonbeams for a dream"
Absolutely beautiful!
Such a wonderful portrayal of lovely fairies singing and exquisite nocturnal dreams.
A true joy to read.
Michael
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Dear Michael,
I'm so very happy that you enjoyed reading this poem so much. Thank you for your support of my poetic efforts today.
Best,
jeni
Comment from Douglas Paul
You did a good job with this form, Luna. I really like your repeating line. I also really like "Our Mother Moon, the night time queen". Well done
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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You did a good job with this form, Luna. I really like your repeating line. I also really like "Our Mother Moon, the night time queen". Well done
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Dear Douglas Paul, I'm really happy that you liked the repeat and told me which line you liked. That helps for future writing. Thank you for your support of my poetic efforts today.
Best,
jeni
