Windows To The Past
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "The old Cowpoke"Poems about the old West.
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Comment from c_lucas
An interesting piece. Cowboys don't die. They just fade away. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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An interesting piece. Cowboys don't die. They just fade away. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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That's true I think. Thank you Charlie for the fun comment. Enjoy the day!xx Nancy
Comment from krys123
Hi Nancy;
-I really like the way you written your colloquial humor about a cowpoke and his varying possessions which includes, especially, his loyal and best friend, his horse. You also make a great perspective on this cowpokes relationship to his belief in the Lord. I really like that metaphor you use is you write how this cowboy is preparing for himself to die issue write: "There is peace in the valley o'er yonder I am told, together (him and his horse) we'll reach it someday." I very much and also Enjoyed the effectiveness of simple humor of this cowboy's reflection of going to heaven: : there's no need to hurry... we may have to wait till horses(correction and typo) came why we can't go." This makes me believe and become convinced of a typical Cowboy's humor.
-Very good rhyming and a rhythm that is written in a trochee formatted style of 11 syllable lines followed by tetrameter.
-Very well done Nancy as I really was entertained by this and also thank you for sharing.
Have a good one
Alex
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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Hi Nancy;
-I really like the way you written your colloquial humor about a cowpoke and his varying possessions which includes, especially, his loyal and best friend, his horse. You also make a great perspective on this cowpokes relationship to his belief in the Lord. I really like that metaphor you use is you write how this cowboy is preparing for himself to die issue write: "There is peace in the valley o'er yonder I am told, together (him and his horse) we'll reach it someday." I very much and also Enjoyed the effectiveness of simple humor of this cowboy's reflection of going to heaven: : there's no need to hurry... we may have to wait till horses(correction and typo) came why we can't go." This makes me believe and become convinced of a typical Cowboy's humor.
-Very good rhyming and a rhythm that is written in a trochee formatted style of 11 syllable lines followed by tetrameter.
-Very well done Nancy as I really was entertained by this and also thank you for sharing.
Have a good one
Alex
Comment Written 26-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2016
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It is something an old cowboy might say, relating that he and the horse is worn out, but he wasn't going anywhere without the horse. LOL Thanks for the review and stars Alex. Have a great day! xx Nancy
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You are sincerely welcome Nancy.
Alex
Comment from Domino 2
Hi, Nancy.
Typo in last line, should read [horse's].
Excellent cowboy dialect, as he ponders 'the grass is greener', but despite his poverty, he considers peace of mind and the familiar are more important, including his best friend, his tatty horse.
I thought he may be alluding to Heaven on the other side of the gate, before I thought about, 'rewards will be few.'
You're particularly good at cowboy themes, and this is an excellent read.
Cheers, Ray xx
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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Hi, Nancy.
Typo in last line, should read [horse's].
Excellent cowboy dialect, as he ponders 'the grass is greener', but despite his poverty, he considers peace of mind and the familiar are more important, including his best friend, his tatty horse.
I thought he may be alluding to Heaven on the other side of the gate, before I thought about, 'rewards will be few.'
You're particularly good at cowboy themes, and this is an excellent read.
Cheers, Ray xx
Comment Written 26-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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That's the way I had it, but three other people told me it was horses and my little dictionary doesn't clarify it at all.
The jury is out on that I guess. LOL Just a bit of fun and relief for those who love rhyme. Thanks for the review Ray! xx Hugs Nancy
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Sorry, Nancy. I meant, 'horses', plural, but you have a semi-colon in the word that needs editing out. Ray xx
Comment from Janet Foor
'm glad you muse whispered in you ear Nancy. This was a fun poem to read. While there is a little humor, there is also wisdom in your words. Well done.
Blessings
janet
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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'm glad you muse whispered in you ear Nancy. This was a fun poem to read. While there is a little humor, there is also wisdom in your words. Well done.
Blessings
janet
Comment Written 26-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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Thank you for the delightful review Janet. xx Nancy
Comment from Pantygynt
I rather liked this because ithink the meaning is pretty clear. This cowboy knows he jus hast to keep on going. He can't afford to stop (retire) so he has to wait for the day when horses can fly (when he's dead) in order to find his promised land of peace. A touching little piece.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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I rather liked this because ithink the meaning is pretty clear. This cowboy knows he jus hast to keep on going. He can't afford to stop (retire) so he has to wait for the day when horses can fly (when he's dead) in order to find his promised land of peace. A touching little piece.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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I was thinking both he and his horse would be too tired by then the horse would have to fly him there. LOL Thank you for the thoughtful review Jim. xx Nancy
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem in character of the cowboy represent all of us who value earthly things more than the spiritual and spirit of God that waits to receive our souls.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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A very well-written poem in character of the cowboy represent all of us who value earthly things more than the spiritual and spirit of God that waits to receive our souls.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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I just imagine when you are that poor... things can be important.
He thinks if he has to make it to that yonder valley they can't make it unless the horse can fly. Both being that old. LOL Thanks for the review Sandra. xx Nancy
Comment from djeckert
this was an enjoyable read. The last line I think should just be horses without the apistrophe, I think Im not a punctuation nazi, but It kind of took me aback for the last line. Otherwise nicely done and funny. I enjoyed your notes as well. God surely blesses
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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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this was an enjoyable read. The last line I think should just be horses without the apistrophe, I think Im not a punctuation nazi, but It kind of took me aback for the last line. Otherwise nicely done and funny. I enjoyed your notes as well. God surely blesses
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Comment Written 26-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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You are correct. I have fixed that. Thank you very much for stopping by. Have a lovely day. Nancy
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I like it... I like anything cowboy. :)
Several things to fix:
I'm jest an old cowboy, who's near to [trails] end. <-- trail's end, apostrophe
There's peace in the valley [o're] yonder I'm told, <-- over = o'er
there's no need to [hurry-we] may have to wait <-- a dash is TWO hyphens: hurry--we
till [horse's] can fly we can't go. <-- Plural of horse is horses, with no apostrophe.
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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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I like it... I like anything cowboy. :)
Several things to fix:
I'm jest an old cowboy, who's near to [trails] end. <-- trail's end, apostrophe
There's peace in the valley [o're] yonder I'm told, <-- over = o'er
there's no need to [hurry-we] may have to wait <-- a dash is TWO hyphens: hurry--we
till [horse's] can fly we can't go. <-- Plural of horse is horses, with no apostrophe.
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Comment Written 26-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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Thank you Phyllis. All stupid mistakes huh> Will I ever learn to catch them first? LOL Thanks for the help! Hugs. Nancy
