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Love Poem contest entry88 total reviews
Comment from nancy_e_davis
That is a lot of love there Steve. A very wonderful love declaration.
"I love you more than springtime
when the lilacs are in bloom. (A thought for meter)
I love you more than roses
with their redolent perfume.
I love you more than moonbeams
on a balmy summer's night.
I love you more than fireflies,
magic stars of twinkling light.
Those last two lines are original! I like that! Well done Good entry for the contest. Nancy
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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That is a lot of love there Steve. A very wonderful love declaration.
"I love you more than springtime
when the lilacs are in bloom. (A thought for meter)
I love you more than roses
with their redolent perfume.
I love you more than moonbeams
on a balmy summer's night.
I love you more than fireflies,
magic stars of twinkling light.
Those last two lines are original! I like that! Well done Good entry for the contest. Nancy
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Thanks, nancy.
Yes, I wanted to avoid trotting out the same old comparisons.
The diet must be kicking in - I was awfully tempted towards 'I love you more than carrot cake.'
Steve
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Man, That would be a huge statement! Haha.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Big sigh...oh, what a romantic and tender poem, a true classic. Love poems should be such declarations, in my mind anyway, and you spoke the language of love here, in a wonderful cadence and beautiful imagery. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Big sigh...oh, what a romantic and tender poem, a true classic. Love poems should be such declarations, in my mind anyway, and you spoke the language of love here, in a wonderful cadence and beautiful imagery. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Dawn.
The diet must be kicking in - I was awfully tempted towards 'I love you more than carrot cake.'
Steve
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Wow - THAT's a love! (LOL) (Good for you - oh, carrot cake and cream cheese icing...did you HAVE to? LOL)
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Sadly, yes.
Good news on the Sunday weigh in - down 3Kg (7 lb to you)
definitely cream cheese icing on the far horizon.
Steve
Comment from humpwhistle
Pardon me, while I mop my eyes.
Really, Steve, very touching. And I suspect heartfelt, too.
The last two lines amount to a little word riddle for me.
I don't quite understand what the 'though' is though-ing.
Then, when I decide 'forever' and 'always' mean the same thing, I come up with 'I'll love you more for as long as the seas roll.' Fine. But I'm still left with that pesky 'though'.
Don't mind me, Steve. Must be something I ate.
Good luck, my friend.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Pardon me, while I mop my eyes.
Really, Steve, very touching. And I suspect heartfelt, too.
The last two lines amount to a little word riddle for me.
I don't quite understand what the 'though' is though-ing.
Then, when I decide 'forever' and 'always' mean the same thing, I come up with 'I'll love you more for as long as the seas roll.' Fine. But I'm still left with that pesky 'though'.
Don't mind me, Steve. Must be something I ate.
Good luck, my friend.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Whatever it was, don't eat any more of it - it's turning your brain to mush! And speaking of mush -
Although the waves go on forever, my love goes on even further than that!
Thanks as always.
Steve
Comment from Just2Write
This is such a touching piece of love poetry, Steve. It is fresh and pure, and sure to melt the heart of the person it is written for.
Loved the easy, breezy flow of this and the way it warms the soul of the reader.
All lines simple, and yet, so full with sincerity.
Rose.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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This is such a touching piece of love poetry, Steve. It is fresh and pure, and sure to melt the heart of the person it is written for.
Loved the easy, breezy flow of this and the way it warms the soul of the reader.
All lines simple, and yet, so full with sincerity.
Rose.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Rose.
I was originally going to go even lighter and funny -
The diet must be kicking in - I was awfully tempted towards 'I love you more than carrot cake.'
Steve
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I love carrot cake - It should never be forbidden on a diet - It's got carrots, which are good for you. LOL. The humour used in your poem is perfect. Subtle, and doesn't hit you over the head. R.
Comment from PatVallesMangan
This Love Poem has magnificent descriptions of the extent of the love of the author. Some of my favorites were "I love you more than springtime when the sweet flowers bloom" and more than "moonbeams on a balmy summers night." These are powerful images that evoke strong feelings and yet the love is beyond all of this. The picture goes very well with the ones that this poem delights our minds with! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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This Love Poem has magnificent descriptions of the extent of the love of the author. Some of my favorites were "I love you more than springtime when the sweet flowers bloom" and more than "moonbeams on a balmy summers night." These are powerful images that evoke strong feelings and yet the love is beyond all of this. The picture goes very well with the ones that this poem delights our minds with! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Hi, Pat. Welcome to FanStory and thank you for the warm words on my love poem.
Steve
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Steve,
This is such an authentic sounding love poem that I can't help but think it is based on a special woman in your life.
Love the originality of this: I love you more than monuments,
their words engraved in stone.
Nicely done. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Hi Steve,
This is such an authentic sounding love poem that I can't help but think it is based on a special woman in your life.
Love the originality of this: I love you more than monuments,
their words engraved in stone.
Nicely done. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Yeah, all of my women are special! ;O)
Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from chasennov
Love Poem contest entry "More" This is a lovely love poem you have created here. I liked the formulation and I thought the structure was done quite neatly. Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Love Poem contest entry "More" This is a lovely love poem you have created here. I liked the formulation and I thought the structure was done quite neatly. Well done.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Thank you!
Steve
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You are welcome, Steve.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
That is love. you caught it using the eyes of the earth.
Sounds and descriptions that only man can understand.
Love the rhymes and the flow
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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That is love. you caught it using the eyes of the earth.
Sounds and descriptions that only man can understand.
Love the rhymes and the flow
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Thanks, barb. Glad you enjoyed my love poem.
Steve
Comment from gypsycaravan
I love you more than fireflies,
magic stars of twinkling light.
These were my favorite lines in your poem. Magic stars was a good analogy.
The poem is lovely with its multiple comparisons and nice artwork to accompany. Good work.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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I love you more than fireflies,
magic stars of twinkling light.
These were my favorite lines in your poem. Magic stars was a good analogy.
The poem is lovely with its multiple comparisons and nice artwork to accompany. Good work.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Thanks, GC. Glad you enjoyed my love poems.
I was trying to get something fresh and new into the comparisons.
Steve
Comment from ann marie mazz
good morning steve
you have met the challenge
your entry is very much poetry in the truest fashion
I loved the voice and tone
your words flowed
a healthy love is ever present
and yes
poetic voice tone and language are too
I very much enjoyed how you turned your thought and word around in your ending line
that was a very nice touch
thank you for sharing your poetic talent
good luck with the contest
ann marie
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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good morning steve
you have met the challenge
your entry is very much poetry in the truest fashion
I loved the voice and tone
your words flowed
a healthy love is ever present
and yes
poetic voice tone and language are too
I very much enjoyed how you turned your thought and word around in your ending line
that was a very nice touch
thank you for sharing your poetic talent
good luck with the contest
ann marie
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Ann Marie, thanks a lot for the thoughtful reading of my poem and generous review.
I believe you are the only reviewer to comment on the switch in the last line. I originally had those lines earlier in the poem, but moved them just to make a strong ending.
Steve
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hi steve
you are most welcome
I always say
I am a better reader than writer
and yes
I read the entry
I never just comment for points
that is never my style
that to me dishonors any composer when an entry isn't read
be proud of your entry
good luck with the contest
ann marie
