Gloom Soon Passes
trochaic meter in 7/8/7/8122 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Your standard and slant rhymes for a good meter that shows the circle of life. All things pass and than some return to give beauty and fun.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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Your standard and slant rhymes for a good meter that shows the circle of life. All things pass and than some return to give beauty and fun.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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Joan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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Any time, Brooke.
Joan
Comment from ReaThomas
This is an unusual rhythm, which I really enjoyed. I especially love how you describe dandelion seeds - I think dandelion clocks are one of the loveliest things in nature. Lovely writing.
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This is an unusual rhythm, which I really enjoyed. I especially love how you describe dandelion seeds - I think dandelion clocks are one of the loveliest things in nature. Lovely writing.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
Comment from poetbear
This is so magical.
Teaches an important lesson.
Reads and flows well.
Make sense.
Let's hope he doesn't grow up too soon.
Being a child doesn't last long enough.
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This is so magical.
Teaches an important lesson.
Reads and flows well.
Make sense.
Let's hope he doesn't grow up too soon.
Being a child doesn't last long enough.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
Comment from mikemagine
New beginnings...lose an important job...maybe there's better one not far down the prov. road...divorce proceedings? Maybe, just maybe there's a chance of reconciliation...
Emotions...Seasons...Illnesses...Losses...with the help of things and people provided by God...they DO pass...
Mike
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New beginnings...lose an important job...maybe there's better one not far down the prov. road...divorce proceedings? Maybe, just maybe there's a chance of reconciliation...
Emotions...Seasons...Illnesses...Losses...with the help of things and people provided by God...they DO pass...
Mike
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
Comment from Ekim777
Woven into the fabric of this stern meter gleam some brilliant images such as; "Bubbles burst as they are slashed/By the blades of grass that slashed them." From the outset is there not a hint of Biblical intent. "Lest an ear of corn fall into the earth and die,/It abideth alone/ But if it die/ It bringeth forth much fruit."-Ekim777
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Woven into the fabric of this stern meter gleam some brilliant images such as; "Bubbles burst as they are slashed/By the blades of grass that slashed them." From the outset is there not a hint of Biblical intent. "Lest an ear of corn fall into the earth and die,/It abideth alone/ But if it die/ It bringeth forth much fruit."-Ekim777
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
Comment from Dave Russell
This was so enjoyable Brooke! I loved the analogy of the grieving stems in the first verse. I also thought that the description of "floating rainbows" was such a cleaver one. I played with my son with his monster bubble wand many times, and I think that the floating rainbow description is awesome.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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This was so enjoyable Brooke! I loved the analogy of the grieving stems in the first verse. I also thought that the description of "floating rainbows" was such a cleaver one. I played with my son with his monster bubble wand many times, and I think that the floating rainbow description is awesome.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Dave, thank you so much for your generous and gracious response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Brooke,
You do a good job exploring how sad it can be watching flowers die. The second stanza really surprised me. Bubbles slashed by blades of grass. Wow - that is really violent. However, you did a good job tying in bubbles with nature.
The next two stanzas reflect optimism (which you are known for)and left me feeling uplifted. Actually, I don't have that problem because our flowers are still blooming and will do so throughout the winter.
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Hi Brooke,
You do a good job exploring how sad it can be watching flowers die. The second stanza really surprised me. Bubbles slashed by blades of grass. Wow - that is really violent. However, you did a good job tying in bubbles with nature.
The next two stanzas reflect optimism (which you are known for)and left me feeling uplifted. Actually, I don't have that problem because our flowers are still blooming and will do so throughout the winter.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Lou, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from TamzinWhite
I think there are so good lines in here.
Very uplifting and inspiring. Understanding life and mishaps, nature of ebb and flow of it all.
Thanks for a great read, again!
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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I think there are so good lines in here.
Very uplifting and inspiring. Understanding life and mishaps, nature of ebb and flow of it all.
Thanks for a great read, again!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Tamzin, thank you so much for your generous and gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from angelface2
Lovely poem, Brooke. Good rhythm as always. I love reading your poems. They always seem to give me a lift and make me smile. Keep writing. Hugs! Miss Sally
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Lovely poem, Brooke. Good rhythm as always. I love reading your poems. They always seem to give me a lift and make me smile. Keep writing. Hugs! Miss Sally
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Miss Sally, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from trimple
You will fare well with this wonderful look at how fleeting the dandelion and bubble is.
What joy a child brings to both him and those that watch.
lovely
trimple
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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You will fare well with this wonderful look at how fleeting the dandelion and bubble is.
What joy a child brings to both him and those that watch.
lovely
trimple
Comment Written 26-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, Tracey :-) Brooke
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