Though Autumn Wears...
a modified pantoum160 total reviews
Comment from flylikeaneagle
adewpearl: Awesome poetry and well deserving of the all time best! Do you publish your books of poetry? I like the time's passive herd, widow's frock and garlands in her hair. The brown and bare show the season of fall before it becomes black and white of winter.
I will be learning a lot from you. Signing up for your class today. God bless the work of your words in Jesus Name. Soli deo Gloria!
flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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adewpearl: Awesome poetry and well deserving of the all time best! Do you publish your books of poetry? I like the time's passive herd, widow's frock and garlands in her hair. The brown and bare show the season of fall before it becomes black and white of winter.
I will be learning a lot from you. Signing up for your class today. God bless the work of your words in Jesus Name. Soli deo Gloria!
flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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flylikeaneagle, thank you so much :-) I look forward to seeing you in class :-) Brooke
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
Best love it, it's an inevitable yearly event here. Looks like you did a nice job with the form too. I enjoyed the personification, and like the term, 'Herd.' Kenny
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Best love it, it's an inevitable yearly event here. Looks like you did a nice job with the form too. I enjoyed the personification, and like the term, 'Herd.' Kenny
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Kenny, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from ReaThomas
I love autumn. It's my favourite season, and I love how you have described it here - that spectacular but all-too-brief spell, right before winter. Super writing.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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I love autumn. It's my favourite season, and I love how you have described it here - that spectacular but all-too-brief spell, right before winter. Super writing.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Rea, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Charlieboy123
Indian summer leafs fall from a golden aspen, a silver maple, a red oak testifying summers end and autumn has returned. Your words are deep cold and yet warm and romantic.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Indian summer leafs fall from a golden aspen, a silver maple, a red oak testifying summers end and autumn has returned. Your words are deep cold and yet warm and romantic.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Thank you for your positive comments, Charlie. Since they are positive, is there a reason for the 4 rating?? Brooke
Comment from Gargantuan2
I had just noticed on my daily walk, that the leaves had started changing for the coming season. I am loath to think that winter is coming again since last year was a fairly long one. This poem does justice to the thought of ending our short summer, however. Thanks for that :)
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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I had just noticed on my daily walk, that the leaves had started changing for the coming season. I am loath to think that winter is coming again since last year was a fairly long one. This poem does justice to the thought of ending our short summer, however. Thanks for that :)
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, Gargantuan - there are some states with many many inches of snow already, and it's still the first half of September. I cannot stand another winter like last year. I really can't. Brooke
Comment from Delahay
A beautiful tribute to Autumn in all her glory. Just before the year fades into the bleakness of winter, Autumn breaks out in bright colors as if defying death with a show of light.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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A beautiful tribute to Autumn in all her glory. Just before the year fades into the bleakness of winter, Autumn breaks out in bright colors as if defying death with a show of light.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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WardHays, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I'm afraid autumn never really had much of a chance this year. I don't think many of our leaves have changed yet and it's already suppose to be freezing in the next couple days. Up north had snow flurries. Great job with this friend and I loved that you wrote on 9/11. Such a sad day but it's things like the pretty leaves that can give us hope once more.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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I'm afraid autumn never really had much of a chance this year. I don't think many of our leaves have changed yet and it's already suppose to be freezing in the next couple days. Up north had snow flurries. Great job with this friend and I loved that you wrote on 9/11. Such a sad day but it's things like the pretty leaves that can give us hope once more.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, ExperiencingLiphe - yep, I was just listening to weather forecasts and shivering. Brooke
Comment from Smoothiecool
I like the way you use every second line in each stanza to start the next
good visual to portray message
good enjambment to allow flow in stanzas
good rhyme theme through out
good use of "E" "O" assonance through out
good use of alliteration through out
cheers smoothiecool
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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I like the way you use every second line in each stanza to start the next
good visual to portray message
good enjambment to allow flow in stanzas
good rhyme theme through out
good use of "E" "O" assonance through out
good use of alliteration through out
cheers smoothiecool
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Faye, for your thoughtful and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
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most welcome..SC >.Faye
Comment from djsaxon
Impeccable rhyme as always and a wonderful statement. I am almost surprised that you drew upon frock and clock in two consecutive stanzas but that is never no mind. The thrust remains terrific. Cheers - DJ
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Impeccable rhyme as always and a wonderful statement. I am almost surprised that you drew upon frock and clock in two consecutive stanzas but that is never no mind. The thrust remains terrific. Cheers - DJ
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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DJ, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dom G Robles
Broke, your poem is beautiful. I love it. The figures of speech in the beginning and the succeeding and the images presented are keen and adorable. Before seeing who he author is, I had the feeling that it was from Brooke, lady. Thanks for sharing. Dom
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Broke, your poem is beautiful. I love it. The figures of speech in the beginning and the succeeding and the images presented are keen and adorable. Before seeing who he author is, I had the feeling that it was from Brooke, lady. Thanks for sharing. Dom
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Dom, for your encouragement and generosity :-) Brooke