Rain is Falling
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Comment from flamingstar
If I were still working with my preschoolers, I'd start every Circle Time with a poem like this! Great visual effects and magical sounds. I love the word "plop"!
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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If I were still working with my preschoolers, I'd start every Circle Time with a poem like this! Great visual effects and magical sounds. I love the word "plop"!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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flamingstar, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Brooke,
Pure magic! If this one doesn't win there is no justice left in this world. Mind you, I am with Granpa on this. Them damn things is just weeds.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Dear Brooke,
Pure magic! If this one doesn't win there is no justice left in this world. Mind you, I am with Granpa on this. Them damn things is just weeds.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Reg, thank you so much :-) I appreciate your generous sixth star and you contest encouragement - from your lips to voters' ears. LOL
Brooke
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Brooke,
you know I'm a true fan of your counting poems... but then you hit me with the biology factor and the quirky magic that only Grandparents can bring to children's lives... well, that, for me, lifted the whole fun story to another level of excellence.
Totally enjoyed every line of this entertaining poem... I know the children would absolutely love this... as my smile was plastered on, from start to finish... And then some.
All the very best in this contest... yes, I meant for all the other contestants having to try and out do this one... smile))))))
with our thoughts we create,
the pleasures in life,
James xx
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Hi Brooke,
you know I'm a true fan of your counting poems... but then you hit me with the biology factor and the quirky magic that only Grandparents can bring to children's lives... well, that, for me, lifted the whole fun story to another level of excellence.
Totally enjoyed every line of this entertaining poem... I know the children would absolutely love this... as my smile was plastered on, from start to finish... And then some.
All the very best in this contest... yes, I meant for all the other contestants having to try and out do this one... smile))))))
with our thoughts we create,
the pleasures in life,
James xx
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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James, thank you so very much :-) I appreciate your generous sixth star and truly appreciate your comments. Brooke :-)
Comment from Pyrrho
How the Hades do you do it? Do you think in metric thoughts once you get started? I know I do; particularly the aabccb rhyme scheme.
But to write in what is essentially iambi tetrameter Which would yield eight syllables a line but consistently hold it to seven is just plain brilliant. (of course I did not count but I did notice most od the time when I read through a one-syllable-accented-foot)
The content is also just plain cheery.
I cannot assess this as less than outstanding.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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How the Hades do you do it? Do you think in metric thoughts once you get started? I know I do; particularly the aabccb rhyme scheme.
But to write in what is essentially iambi tetrameter Which would yield eight syllables a line but consistently hold it to seven is just plain brilliant. (of course I did not count but I did notice most od the time when I read through a one-syllable-accented-foot)
The content is also just plain cheery.
I cannot assess this as less than outstanding.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Pyrrho, for your generous sixth star and thoughtful comments :-) Since this poem is in trochaic meter, with the stress on the first line - DAdum DAdum, it is easier to do 7 beats per line than it would be with iambic. Brooke
Comment from Leineco
OMG! You drew me in so incredibly quickly with that wonderful opening stanza! You had me grinning with the pure joy your
. . .drop by drop,
one two three four five six plop --
(what child wouldn't simply adore reciting those lines??? . . .LOL, or for that matter, what adult?)
The alliteration in the worm section was also great fun :-)
The introduction of wizards was both beautiful writing and wonderfully imaginative!
They've made gold while we were gone --
dandelions coat the lawn.
I even like the grama/grampa difference of opinion (LOL) - too cute!
As always, your meter and rhyme are impeccable - but somehow this one really made a play for the childlike side of my grown-up heart :-)
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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OMG! You drew me in so incredibly quickly with that wonderful opening stanza! You had me grinning with the pure joy your
. . .drop by drop,
one two three four five six plop --
(what child wouldn't simply adore reciting those lines??? . . .LOL, or for that matter, what adult?)
The alliteration in the worm section was also great fun :-)
The introduction of wizards was both beautiful writing and wonderfully imaginative!
They've made gold while we were gone --
dandelions coat the lawn.
I even like the grama/grampa difference of opinion (LOL) - too cute!
As always, your meter and rhyme are impeccable - but somehow this one really made a play for the childlike side of my grown-up heart :-)
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Leineco, thank you so very much for your absolutely wonderful comments and your generous sixth star. You've left me with a huge smile :-) Brooke
Comment from Lastamen
Alright, we'll just have to photoshop Sawyer into a shot of rain or something for the next piece that I know is coming on Snow, or leaves falling!!! This a delightful and wonderfully imaginative entry. Just make certain you keep the star of this show front and center and learn how to photoshop. Well done.
Till the last amen
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Alright, we'll just have to photoshop Sawyer into a shot of rain or something for the next piece that I know is coming on Snow, or leaves falling!!! This a delightful and wonderfully imaginative entry. Just make certain you keep the star of this show front and center and learn how to photoshop. Well done.
Till the last amen
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Lastamen, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from tdragonfly
A very nice rhyme for children making it fun to earn to count. They have visions of magic and wizards and all things fun resulting from a rain storm. A gloomy day transforms into a smile.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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A very nice rhyme for children making it fun to earn to count. They have visions of magic and wizards and all things fun resulting from a rain storm. A gloomy day transforms into a smile.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, tdragonfly, for your gracious comments and generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is an apt and fitting poem that the author has created with this piece of work. The rain is starting to come to bear here in London. I think the summer is over.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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This is an apt and fitting poem that the author has created with this piece of work. The rain is starting to come to bear here in London. I think the summer is over.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Tomes, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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My pleasure
Comment from lancellot
Ha, this is a fun poem and perfect for this contest. I'm not a child anymore, but it made me smile, and it reminded me of the Freddy sone, only a nice version.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Ha, this is a fun poem and perfect for this contest. I'm not a child anymore, but it made me smile, and it reminded me of the Freddy sone, only a nice version.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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lancellot, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Caressa_08
Wow, what a story...and, what I understood by reading the requirements....You followed those to a T & then some with such a well constructed poem....Rhyming lines, each with 7 syllables...Making it an easy, enjoyable read for children & adults.
Caressa
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Wow, what a story...and, what I understood by reading the requirements....You followed those to a T & then some with such a well constructed poem....Rhyming lines, each with 7 syllables...Making it an easy, enjoyable read for children & adults.
Caressa
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2014
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Caressa, thank you so much for your generous and gracious review :-) Brooke
