Comment from Warren Rodgers

Excellent

Hi Brooke,
I noticed the category is biographical poetry and I can see why. Not ever having met him, just seeing all your photos of him, it's no doubt he inspires you to write poems to him. Your poem reminds me of the question I always get from Amanda after I tell her I love her asks "how much, dad?" I usually say "to the stars and back". Not that I had any doubt but I'm sure you feel at least that much if not more for Sawyer. I don't think it's hyperbole for you either. He is going to have a whole collection of poems to cherish as he grows! Outstanding poem!
All the best,
Rodger

ps all the technical stuff is perfect too! Nearly forgot but it almost goes without saying.

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014

Roger, thank you so much :-) Amanda is so lucky to have you! Brooke :-)

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

Nice rhyming quatrains showing your love and joy in Sawyers differing smiles. In the first two you can see how he is thinking about what he has heard, then his reaction. Priceless photos.

valda

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014

valda, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Ryanrunsxc16

Excellent

I love it when I can read a poem and it flows off the tongue so smoothly that your eyes just carry down the page. That's what this poem did for me. When I think of the world ending, as you depicted in the first two stanzas, I hardly can think of it in such a beautiful manner as you described, and the thought of the world ending and life as we know it stopping is a frightening one, eased no doubt by your wonderful word choice. The final stanza, which shows the acceptance of that fate on account of that one special person, that one special smile, and I really think that an idea like that is really quite wonderful.

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014

Ryan, thank you so much for your most thoughtful reading of this poem :-) Brooke

Comment from BLACKDYKE

Excellent

How nice, how rollicking, how lovely
and a message of lasting optimism
for all. Another poem of hope and
joy, just as you meant Brooke. I am
sure it is your intention to guide us
all down the narrow path of happiness.
And I will follow you. Eric

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014

Eric, thank you so much :-) Brooke

reply by BLACKDYKE on 23-Jun-2014

My pleasure

Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

Hi Brooke,

You've got me really stumped with this one because it isn't your usual fare. Unless it's just me, I feel a sense of melancholy. I visualize someone lying very sick in bed, with feelings of gratitude but also perhaps saying goodbye.

Hugs,
Lou

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014

Thanks so much, Lou. No worries, I'm fine :-) Just using a bit of hyperbole in declaring my love. Brooke

Comment from mommydear42

Exceptional

I always love your poems. I especially like the alliteration.Aren't Ss wonderful? I also think this is the first time I've seen Sawyer smile so much. Thanks for sharing your thoughts in such a lovely way. LB

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014

LB, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke

Comment from Eternal Muse

Excellent

Oh my, what a cute boy! My face would be even funnier when I heard "supercalifragilisticexpialidocious" (WHAT IS IT?) for the first time, lol. Adorable, how Miranda got 4 of his faces in a picture.

Should stars abandon night
and roses fail to bloom,
Should clocks count down the final hours
of time that won't resume --

I like the 6/8/6/8 rhyme scheme, works well

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014

Thanks so much, Yelena. She uses some app to frame the 4 pictures together - I don't understand that computer stuff. :-) Brooke

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

You will always have that beautiful smile of Sawyer to give you joy - no matter what happens. Wonderful quatrain poem Brooke.
Teresa

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014

Thank you so much, Teresa :-) Brooke

Comment from Just Pete

Exceptional

Loved both the poem and the pictures. The value of that smile is perfectly captured in words and pictures. I thought that the final stanza was particularly meaningful and rounds off the poem just nicely. Great rhyme scheme and easy to read. Pete

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014

Pete, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke

Comment from Dutchie

Exceptional

OM. Brooke I love this one. It's worth a double three stars for me!!! LOL. And look at that smiling face of Sawyer, no wonder he had to laugh. I must already laugh when I try to pronounce it!!! Would be sad when those things happen, but you are right, Sawyer is the sunshine of your life. Great one. Fia

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2014

Thanks so very much, Fia, for your most thoughtful comments and generous rating :-) Brooke