Savannah Love
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Comment from pbroussard209
Another great chapter, I really enjoyed reading about all the hidden passages. It was my dream growing up to live in a house with passages like that. But our old farm house ended up having a few surprises of its own, such as a time capsule from the turn of the century hidden within the dinning room wall. So anything dealing with secret passages always catches my imagination.
A few SPAG, though they may be meant, but I didn't remember Billy Joe having an accent. So please, disregard if they were intentional.
All there is in (the) kitchen is a hidden staircase to Paige's bedroom.
Over here()by the pantry.
Boy, we ain't got no choice but straight. All leads to do(da?) cellar.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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Another great chapter, I really enjoyed reading about all the hidden passages. It was my dream growing up to live in a house with passages like that. But our old farm house ended up having a few surprises of its own, such as a time capsule from the turn of the century hidden within the dinning room wall. So anything dealing with secret passages always catches my imagination.
A few SPAG, though they may be meant, but I didn't remember Billy Joe having an accent. So please, disregard if they were intentional.
All there is in (the) kitchen is a hidden staircase to Paige's bedroom.
Over here()by the pantry.
Boy, we ain't got no choice but straight. All leads to do(da?) cellar.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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Yes, Billy Joe has an accent but only on a few words. Amos' accent is very heavy. I will fix those areas. Thank you for the help.
Comment from Sankey
Good work again friend. I like all the dialogue and it encourages me to try and do more especially in my new fiction I am gonna be getting into more soon.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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Good work again friend. I like all the dialogue and it encourages me to try and do more especially in my new fiction I am gonna be getting into more soon.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the kind review. I can't wait for your fiction to you're going to write.
Comment from Dianemae
Excellent descriptions. I was right there in the tunnel digging and I also heard Morgan barking. Hopefully all will lead to Paige.
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Excellent descriptions. I was right there in the tunnel digging and I also heard Morgan barking. Hopefully all will lead to Paige.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the kind review and the encouraging words.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
You're sure keeping us hanging in there, Savannah must be undermined with these tunnels. I just hope they don't get caught by rising water or another cave-in.
You're certainly keeping it going.
Patrick
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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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Hi Barbara,
You're sure keeping us hanging in there, Savannah must be undermined with these tunnels. I just hope they don't get caught by rising water or another cave-in.
You're certainly keeping it going.
Patrick
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Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
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I hope they don't either. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from adewpearl
Amos, where does this end? - add the question mark
Good use of dialect and overall natural-sounding dialogue that conveys strong emotion well as they race to find Paige
Great, for all we know - add comma
I really like that underground railroad tunnels are involved
good working in of back story
Brooke :-)
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Amos, where does this end? - add the question mark
Good use of dialect and overall natural-sounding dialogue that conveys strong emotion well as they race to find Paige
Great, for all we know - add comma
I really like that underground railroad tunnels are involved
good working in of back story
Brooke :-)
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Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the catches. Sometimes it seems the backstories take on a life of their own. I appreciate you dropping by.
Comment from Ben Colder
Still a good write and it has my attention. I suppose the others or trapped somewhere yet to be found? Alive I hope. Excellent. Shalom.
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Still a good write and it has my attention. I suppose the others or trapped somewhere yet to be found? Alive I hope. Excellent. Shalom.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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I can't wait to find them myself. Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from c_lucas
Those tunnels after a century of neglect would be a death trap filled with all kind of vermin. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
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Those tunnels after a century of neglect would be a death trap filled with all kind of vermin. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the kind review. I am hoping the dogs have scared most of the strange things off.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
