Savannah Love
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Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
Well, Paige is definitely a take charge person for sure. I wonder if there's more than one ghost? I guess we wait and see. Miss Evelyn is still very confused tonight. God loves you and we do too.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Well, Paige is definitely a take charge person for sure. I wonder if there's more than one ghost? I guess we wait and see. Miss Evelyn is still very confused tonight. God loves you and we do too.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. I appreciate both.
Comment from kiwijenny
This is a great read....that the ghost was caught on video and that Paige has a relationship with the spirit....
It was intriguing....well done
God bless
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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This is a great read....that the ghost was caught on video and that Paige has a relationship with the spirit....
It was intriguing....well done
God bless
Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. I appreciate both.
Comment from rvictoriab
Very well written and nice to see a strong female lead. It's also an interesting play to pit south vs north in favor of the relationship. There were a couple of typos, but other than that very well structured.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Very well written and nice to see a strong female lead. It's also an interesting play to pit south vs north in favor of the relationship. There were a couple of typos, but other than that very well structured.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. I appreciate both.
Comment from Zinnia48
Interesting development in the story. It grabbed my interest and held it until the end of the chapter. Looking forward to the next installment. Caroline
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Interesting development in the story. It grabbed my interest and held it until the end of the chapter. Looking forward to the next installment. Caroline
Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. I appreciate both.
Comment from Sasha
I liked this chapter very much. Lots of great imagery and lots of unanswered questions needing answers. I got a kick out of Paige's concern for Bradley's welfare. I am anxiously looking forward to the next chapter. Great work with this one.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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I liked this chapter very much. Lots of great imagery and lots of unanswered questions needing answers. I got a kick out of Paige's concern for Bradley's welfare. I am anxiously looking forward to the next chapter. Great work with this one.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. I hope you are doing well.
Comment from TOMORAL
I don't recall reading your other posts, but I can tell this is a very exciting story. Very well written. I am from Savannah, Georgia and always love reading stories located there. Excellent writing.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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I don't recall reading your other posts, but I can tell this is a very exciting story. Very well written. I am from Savannah, Georgia and always love reading stories located there. Excellent writing.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I fell in love with Savannah when we would vacation there will stationed in GA.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I sure like Paige's character. I loved the lines:
"I don't want the house rid of my ghost. I have become very fond of Bradley Bookman. Bradley's mischievous but not dangerous." Paige folded her arms across her chest.
I only found two tiny things to fix:
"Ma'am, if the video contains an actual paranormal,
I think it might sound better if the word 'event' or 'activity' or 'sighting' after the word 'paranormal, but maybe you know better on that.
The top of Tyler's right ear elongated and he swiped at it.
I would put a comma after 'elongated'.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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I sure like Paige's character. I loved the lines:
"I don't want the house rid of my ghost. I have become very fond of Bradley Bookman. Bradley's mischievous but not dangerous." Paige folded her arms across her chest.
I only found two tiny things to fix:
"Ma'am, if the video contains an actual paranormal,
I think it might sound better if the word 'event' or 'activity' or 'sighting' after the word 'paranormal, but maybe you know better on that.
The top of Tyler's right ear elongated and he swiped at it.
I would put a comma after 'elongated'.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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I have made the corrections. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Millibrad
This is my first time reading any of your posts and you are right, it is a bit confusing. The writing is excellent and did pull me into the story so I will be going back a bit.
I did find one error:
Paige's eyes widened as she watched Tyler and Daniel enter(ed) the house [by or through]the front door.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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This is my first time reading any of your posts and you are right, it is a bit confusing. The writing is excellent and did pull me into the story so I will be going back a bit.
I did find one error:
Paige's eyes widened as she watched Tyler and Daniel enter(ed) the house [by or through]the front door.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the catch. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from elgone
You have some editing to do if you haven't already been told by other reviewers. Bradley had been a bad ghost but the reasons are understandable. He's protecting his house and Paige.
"I don't want the house rid of my ghost. - this reads awkwardly. I suggest
"I don't want anyone ridding the house rid of my ghost.
for (why) the strange happens.
and Daniel (entering) [entered] the house (through) the front door.
who might have the answers.
" - delete new line before end quote
the narrow[s] halls to
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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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You have some editing to do if you haven't already been told by other reviewers. Bradley had been a bad ghost but the reasons are understandable. He's protecting his house and Paige.
"I don't want the house rid of my ghost. - this reads awkwardly. I suggest
"I don't want anyone ridding the house rid of my ghost.
for (why) the strange happens.
and Daniel (entering) [entered] the house (through) the front door.
who might have the answers.
" - delete new line before end quote
the narrow[s] halls to
E
Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the wonderful review.
Comment from judiverse
Really interesting and six stars for the suspense. That was something to see what was happening to Tyler and Daniel when they entered the house. They certainly got a good scare. How much of the past trouble this pair is responsible for it yet to be determined. Having a paranormal team involved means that Paige's ghosts are being taken seriously. Funny that she doesn't want anything to happen to Bradley. She thinks he's harmless. Last sentence, "I was told you have some answers." judi
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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Really interesting and six stars for the suspense. That was something to see what was happening to Tyler and Daniel when they entered the house. They certainly got a good scare. How much of the past trouble this pair is responsible for it yet to be determined. Having a paranormal team involved means that Paige's ghosts are being taken seriously. Funny that she doesn't want anything to happen to Bradley. She thinks he's harmless. Last sentence, "I was told you have some answers." judi
Comment Written 01-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I always enjoy hearing from you.
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You're so welcome. I always look forward to reading. judi
