Poems By AnnieDawn
Viewing comments for Chapter 93 "Oh No!"My book of poems and stories
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Comment from rouskin
The look of your hair
is not always fair
I enjoyed your funny piece
so I'm sending you my bliss
five stars it is.
Good Luck.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
The look of your hair
is not always fair
I enjoyed your funny piece
so I'm sending you my bliss
five stars it is.
Good Luck.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2013
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Thanks so much for your review. There is always some event we can look back on and have a good laugh.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Most passionate lovable thing is defunct now, how to enjoy a day, so awkward each day now onwards to come and go without curly hair, feeling passion for something is lost, nicely retold, I enjoyed. 08/102
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2013
Most passionate lovable thing is defunct now, how to enjoy a day, so awkward each day now onwards to come and go without curly hair, feeling passion for something is lost, nicely retold, I enjoyed. 08/102
Comment Written 02-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2013
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Thanks very much for your kind remarks and review.
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
LOL ... I can't believe you called in sick because your hair was straight ... hehehe! If that's the worst thing that can happen in your life, then life is good .... good indeed.
Thanks for sharing this cute write. You presented some great imagery with your words, Annie!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2013
LOL ... I can't believe you called in sick because your hair was straight ... hehehe! If that's the worst thing that can happen in your life, then life is good .... good indeed.
Thanks for sharing this cute write. You presented some great imagery with your words, Annie!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
Comment Written 02-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2013
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Of course this was when I was much younger of course. Thanks for your kind remarks.
Comment from vapros
A day to forget, indeed. When the curling iron and the coffee maker both go belly-up on the the same morning, you would be tempting fate to show up for work. Call in irritated. Tell the boss I said it was okay. Good work, well done.
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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2013
A day to forget, indeed. When the curling iron and the coffee maker both go belly-up on the the same morning, you would be tempting fate to show up for work. Call in irritated. Tell the boss I said it was okay. Good work, well done.
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Comment Written 02-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2013
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Thanks for your comments and review. They both kicked the bucket on the same morning.
Comment from SteveY
When it rains...it pours! Well at least you were able to write a very nice poem about this one probably some time later. Great job in writing and surviving this ordeal!
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2013
When it rains...it pours! Well at least you were able to write a very nice poem about this one probably some time later. Great job in writing and surviving this ordeal!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2013
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Thanks so much for your review and I really appreciate the time you all take to do them.
Comment from Glasstruth
LOL. When things go wrong they really do. I'm a bald male, so a curling iron would be the least of my fears. Very playful, and the rhyming is smooth. Wonderfully written. Les
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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2013
LOL. When things go wrong they really do. I'm a bald male, so a curling iron would be the least of my fears. Very playful, and the rhyming is smooth. Wonderfully written. Les
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Comment Written 02-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2013
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Thanks so much for your review. I really appreciate it.
Comment from Tessa Kay
So many poems are sad, it's nice to read a funny one for a change. Like the topic and the way it's expressed.
Most of the poem is in present tense, but then you skip into past tense (She waited till it sparked...)
Maybe rewrite into present tense:
She waits until it sparks no more,
then quickly throws it out the door
she cries and sits down on the floor..
Just an idea.
All the best for the contest.
:) Tessa
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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2013
So many poems are sad, it's nice to read a funny one for a change. Like the topic and the way it's expressed.
Most of the poem is in present tense, but then you skip into past tense (She waited till it sparked...)
Maybe rewrite into present tense:
She waits until it sparks no more,
then quickly throws it out the door
she cries and sits down on the floor..
Just an idea.
All the best for the contest.
:) Tessa
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Comment Written 02-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2013
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Thanks for the tips. I will use them gratefully.