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Karma

If at first you don't succeed...

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Comment from Christof McTarnahan
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Great job with this. I like your usage of the words. Great flow to the story, and the subject matter was enjoyable. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
    Thank you. So glad you enjoyed it. :-)
Comment from Curly Girly
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This is a fascintating story and you've told it in an inventive sort of way. I take it that you've come back to earth as a magpie bird?

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
    LOL I don't think so, but ...


    Thanks for the great review.
Comment from madhatter1977
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Really clever mystery writer! Like the ending especially when he turns into a crow - very suitable karma! Should do well in the contest - well done!

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
    Thanks! :-)
Comment from S A Bullen
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That was funny and a clever use of the 200 ish writing prompt.well done. I'm only new to this site and as yet have only entered two comps. Would like to try something like this next time. It was a sweet little read. Sheryn :-)

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
    Thank you! :-)
Comment from barkingdog
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So he came back as a crow instead of a man.
I think I got it right.
I didn't get the bottle top collection. Understood the choking on the apple.

:) e

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
    Thank you. :-) Just figured crows like to collect shiny, metalic things, or so I've heard.
reply by barkingdog on 18-Aug-2013
    So he was a crow to start with. I thought he was a man.Oh, well...
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
    Right. :-) First a man, second time a crow, and third time... back to being a crow. :-)
Comment from elinic414
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This was great! I was confused at first, but I understood once I got to the end! My favorite line is "I'd die laughing, if I wasn't, well... you know". I think I would honestly read this if it were extended into a novel... from the crow's perspective. The crow reminds me of Salem from Sabrina the Teenage Witch - reincarnated with a wicked sense of humor. Thanks for sharing!

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
    Thank you! :-)
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
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A very creative write following the confines of the contest rules. Good use of humor and it is a complete story in so few words. Well done. Good luck in the contest~Debbie

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
    Thank you! :-)
Comment from Jokerswild
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Ah Karma! What a nicely formed piece of writing using those words extremely well and to good advantage. The final turn about is a wonderful twist and made me laugh out loud. Nice work.
Jackie

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
    Thank you so much. :-)
Comment from w.j.debi
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Humorous tale of reincarnation, or so the character was hoping. Looks like he is stuck for a while longer....Good descriptions and narration. You worked the required words smoothly into the story.Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
    Thank you so much. :-)
Comment from sweetwoodjax
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this story about the man who didn't eat enough crow had to come back as a crow again. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest

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 Comment Written 18-Aug-2013


reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
    Thank you. :-)