Savannah Love
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Comment from mikenbel
I most certainly enjoy your writing and look forward to more. A few suggestions...P - paragraph ; L - line.
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P4/L1. "better and better" doesn't require hyphenation
P7/L2. The sentence seems awkward
P15/L2. "the" after "of"
P20/L3. "fell silent" would probably be better than "silenced"
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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I most certainly enjoy your writing and look forward to more. A few suggestions...P - paragraph ; L - line.
From "Previous Post":
P4/L1. "better and better" doesn't require hyphenation
P7/L2. The sentence seems awkward
P15/L2. "the" after "of"
P20/L3. "fell silent" would probably be better than "silenced"
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and your eagle eye.
Comment from emjaihammond
I enjoyed reading this and I feel you have done a good job of presenting it to your reader. It holds the reader's interest early on and carries over from one sentence to the next. There is good character development established. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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I enjoyed reading this and I feel you have done a good job of presenting it to your reader. It holds the reader's interest early on and carries over from one sentence to the next. There is good character development established. Nicely done.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Curly Girly
It read well and I could spot no errors at all. Well written and well edited. Good dialogue and the story is progresssing well.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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It read well and I could spot no errors at all. Well written and well edited. Good dialogue and the story is progresssing well.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from abbasjoy
Do you believe these incredibly snooty ladies? They found their match in Paige, I dear say. They thought their social standing would frighten her, but she sure brought them down a peg or two. I truly like her come back when she dared to link the Walker ladies with the working class.
And then there is Dwayne Walker, he is definitely up to something devious. So the plot thickens.
I just love the way Nala said she couldn't find Paige's date book, what a riot? Paige sure had her going.
I enjoyed this post a lot.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Do you believe these incredibly snooty ladies? They found their match in Paige, I dear say. They thought their social standing would frighten her, but she sure brought them down a peg or two. I truly like her come back when she dared to link the Walker ladies with the working class.
And then there is Dwayne Walker, he is definitely up to something devious. So the plot thickens.
I just love the way Nala said she couldn't find Paige's date book, what a riot? Paige sure had her going.
I enjoyed this post a lot.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh YUM, may I have a muffin? I love blueberries. (LOL) What a lovely chapter, Barbara. I especially enjoyed Paige's giggles over running the two snobs with her talk of the markets! Nicely done. I so enjoy this book. I can't wait for the next chapter!
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Oh YUM, may I have a muffin? I love blueberries. (LOL) What a lovely chapter, Barbara. I especially enjoyed Paige's giggles over running the two snobs with her talk of the markets! Nicely done. I so enjoy this book. I can't wait for the next chapter!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I love blueberries too. I appreciate your ongoing support of my writing.
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You are very welcome - me too, yours, and Barbara - I don't want to miss anything. I do love this book!
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
you keep you date book. (your ? date book). Very good chapter..I never ever thought I would ever really see my book in print. Brandtdoubleday mailed them and they'll be here tomorrow. Everything is almost ready on amazon.com...they have to be sure the book cover meets their measurement requirements. Then I can get it up on this site. Janie's got the first local TV interview set up for May 15th. She's working on bigger stations. I feel bad because she's spending all her free time doing things for my book and not getting to write much. She surprised me and did a promo spot to put on youtube. I'll try to put it at the boot om of pieces I write if we can figure out how to do it. Good chapter. God loves you and I do too.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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you keep you date book. (your ? date book). Very good chapter..I never ever thought I would ever really see my book in print. Brandtdoubleday mailed them and they'll be here tomorrow. Everything is almost ready on amazon.com...they have to be sure the book cover meets their measurement requirements. Then I can get it up on this site. Janie's got the first local TV interview set up for May 15th. She's working on bigger stations. I feel bad because she's spending all her free time doing things for my book and not getting to write much. She surprised me and did a promo spot to put on youtube. I'll try to put it at the boot om of pieces I write if we can figure out how to do it. Good chapter. God loves you and I do too.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Janie is a wonderful caring person. Thank you for the kind review and I'll fix that your.
Comment from adewpearl
The eyebrows rose of the lady - that is an awkwardly constructed sentence
I love this conversation - Paige baits them and finds their weak spot fast enough - she does not tolerate their snobbiness and their implications about her Northern ancestry, or lack of Southern lineage, which is more to the point. They make no secret of how snoopy they've been in investigating her background, but they can't take it when they realizes she knows something of theirs too. LOL
Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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The eyebrows rose of the lady - that is an awkwardly constructed sentence
I love this conversation - Paige baits them and finds their weak spot fast enough - she does not tolerate their snobbiness and their implications about her Northern ancestry, or lack of Southern lineage, which is more to the point. They make no secret of how snoopy they've been in investigating her background, but they can't take it when they realizes she knows something of theirs too. LOL
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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I will fix that sentence. Paige is a very smart lady, maybe a little low on common sense. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Writingfundimension
Oh, you played this scene really well, barbara. I don't like those two old biddies one little bit. Like how Paige kept putting the ball back in their court. Polite but firm. Another excellent chapter!
Warmest regards, Bev
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Oh, you played this scene really well, barbara. I don't like those two old biddies one little bit. Like how Paige kept putting the ball back in their court. Polite but firm. Another excellent chapter!
Warmest regards, Bev
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. Paige is one smart female.
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She sure is! :0)
Comment from Taffspride
Aah this was quite a smart move on Paige's part, she really set the cat among the pidgeons.The two old biddies were undoubtedly after something. Information? perhaps, Paiges money, or the house?
Oh the questions you leave us with, as you continue your excellent story telling.
Thanks for bringing this interesting chapter.
Iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Aah this was quite a smart move on Paige's part, she really set the cat among the pidgeons.The two old biddies were undoubtedly after something. Information? perhaps, Paiges money, or the house?
Oh the questions you leave us with, as you continue your excellent story telling.
Thanks for bringing this interesting chapter.
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate your support.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb well I can say that Paige knew how to ansr the two nosey ladies.
I still cannot figure out what they are uo to
I liked the ending when they let in a huff and slamed the door.
Gert
Gert
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Hello Barb well I can say that Paige knew how to ansr the two nosey ladies.
I still cannot figure out what they are uo to
I liked the ending when they let in a huff and slamed the door.
Gert
Gert
Comment Written 21-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. They gave Paige some new insight to the Walker problem.
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Okay Thank you Barb
Gert
