Sauvignon Blanc Grapes
Artistic Photo in 'Still Life' style200 total reviews
Comment from Zombie's Woof
Hi-
I'm not sure that I get this, even with
all the extraneous notes.
The purpose of poetry is the disordering
of all of the senses, and that can never
be accomplished in 3 lines of rubbish,
no matter how Napa Valley they are.
Four stars for effort.
ZW
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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Hi-
I'm not sure that I get this, even with
all the extraneous notes.
The purpose of poetry is the disordering
of all of the senses, and that can never
be accomplished in 3 lines of rubbish,
no matter how Napa Valley they are.
Four stars for effort.
ZW
Comment Written 06-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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I didn't know that zombies had senses, but their woofs sure make scatophagous remarks.
Comment from Lynar
I enjoyed the perfect form, style and presentation in your Haiku poem. The imagery, (green translucent grapes on fine white china plate) The description of the vintage wine made me want to taste it, grown from the grape vine, (nature) to the palate. Such a delightful and satisfying taste. No negative comments. I would recommend, Sauvignon Blanc Grapes
to my friends. Excellent.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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I enjoyed the perfect form, style and presentation in your Haiku poem. The imagery, (green translucent grapes on fine white china plate) The description of the vintage wine made me want to taste it, grown from the grape vine, (nature) to the palate. Such a delightful and satisfying taste. No negative comments. I would recommend, Sauvignon Blanc Grapes
to my friends. Excellent.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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Thank you, Lynar. A joy to read your review.
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You're very welcome, tomprato.
Comment from laurabareis
This is a sweet haiku. It is very short, but well written with strong words. When you explained the meaning at the bottom the whole poem made even more sense, and now I totally get the image you are showing.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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This is a sweet haiku. It is very short, but well written with strong words. When you explained the meaning at the bottom the whole poem made even more sense, and now I totally get the image you are showing.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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Thank you, Laura. There has been one pretentious person who objected to my notes - and she has her own 'fan' following on this FanStory site. So I am really encouraged by your review!
Comment from geetika sethi
wonderful...simply awesome...delicious look...
totally agree as even i love serving green grapes on white plates
the freshness it leaves lingers on and on to create a most peaceful hue....thanks for sharing an interesting poem...
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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wonderful...simply awesome...delicious look...
totally agree as even i love serving green grapes on white plates
the freshness it leaves lingers on and on to create a most peaceful hue....thanks for sharing an interesting poem...
Comment Written 06-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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Thanks, Gaps. Yes, a most peaceful hue.
Comment from Kpj731
very nice. it's a very classy sort of poem. I enjoyed reading it and you def picked the correct color scheme. Thanks for posting this!
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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very nice. it's a very classy sort of poem. I enjoyed reading it and you def picked the correct color scheme. Thanks for posting this!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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Thanks, Kpj. Appreciate the comment about the color scheme, too.
Comment from missy98writer
Tomprato,
Your 5/7/5 haiku poem is beauifully written. Your words paint a mental picture in the reared head of lucious grapes sitting atop a white Wedgewood plate. You effectively and abundanty used alliteration. I like your satori line: "Sauvignon vintage." You poem was a joy to have read and reviewed. I'd recommend this poetic Haiku gem to other reviewers. Your poem is a splendid entry in the 5/7/5 Poetry contest. I wish you good lucking the contest with your 17 syllable poem. Have a great day.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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Tomprato,
Your 5/7/5 haiku poem is beauifully written. Your words paint a mental picture in the reared head of lucious grapes sitting atop a white Wedgewood plate. You effectively and abundanty used alliteration. I like your satori line: "Sauvignon vintage." You poem was a joy to have read and reviewed. I'd recommend this poetic Haiku gem to other reviewers. Your poem is a splendid entry in the 5/7/5 Poetry contest. I wish you good lucking the contest with your 17 syllable poem. Have a great day.
Melissa.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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Thank you, Melissa. You are truly very sweet, because those words - 'luscious grapes sitting atop a white Wedgwood plate' - were just what I had in mind! Excellent review. One of the best I've received.
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is an interesting and original 5-7-5 poem that combines grapes, white wine and bone china into a simple work of art. I like the simple presentation, having no picture but using appropriate color combinations. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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This is an interesting and original 5-7-5 poem that combines grapes, white wine and bone china into a simple work of art. I like the simple presentation, having no picture but using appropriate color combinations. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 06-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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Thank you, Jeanie. You put it all in a nutshell. Excellent review.
Comment from Writeaway...
A nice touch of French to the end, an excelent job tomprato, bravo. Your writing is clear, well-written and cleverly constructed, I cannot suggest anything for improvment, an excellent job, good luck in the contest, keep writing!! :)
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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A nice touch of French to the end, an excelent job tomprato, bravo. Your writing is clear, well-written and cleverly constructed, I cannot suggest anything for improvment, an excellent job, good luck in the contest, keep writing!! :)
Comment Written 06-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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Thanks, Writeaway. Excellent and encouraging review.
Comment from bhogg
I like this format because it forces you to choose each and every word. You chose well. I also like your post in that the words alone tell the story. I've seen some other entries that are good, but would not make sense without the art work. I like art work and use it myself, but at the end of the day, your words have to carry through. Yours did. Good luck in your contest. Regards, Bill
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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I like this format because it forces you to choose each and every word. You chose well. I also like your post in that the words alone tell the story. I've seen some other entries that are good, but would not make sense without the art work. I like art work and use it myself, but at the end of the day, your words have to carry through. Yours did. Good luck in your contest. Regards, Bill
Comment Written 06-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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Thank you, Bhogg, for an excellent review. We really don't need art work to support our literary efforts. :)
Comment from hopeflys
Nice and sweet piece of poetry I enjoyed reading this poem and it paints a lovely picture in my head of being in a vineyard smelling all the grapes. Good work 0:D
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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Nice and sweet piece of poetry I enjoyed reading this poem and it paints a lovely picture in my head of being in a vineyard smelling all the grapes. Good work 0:D
Comment Written 06-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2011
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Thanks, hopeflys. That's nice: to think of being in a vineyard and smelling all the grapes!
